唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在较多错误，导致意思不清晰。建议简化句子结构，直接表达观点，并用具体理由支持。例如，避免使用不相关或错误的词汇，如“Microsoft instrument”。

示例: No, I don't like singing because I am not very good at it, even though I studied music at university. However, I would like to improve my singing skills if I have the chance.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和词汇使用不当，表达不清晰。建议直接回答问题，并用简单明了的句子说明学习经历和感受。

示例: Yes, I have learned how to sing before, but I am not very good at it. I want to practice more to improve my singing.

建议: 回答表达不流畅，语法错误较多，且用词不准确。建议简洁明了地表达想为谁唱歌，并说明原因。

示例: I want to sing for my parents, especially my mother, because she supported me a lot during my university studies in music.

建议: 回答中有语法和拼写错误，如“seeing”应为“singing”，句子结构不完整。建议使用正确的词汇和完整句子表达观点，并举例说明。

示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps me feel joyful and forget my worries when I sing.

× To be honest, I don't like singing because my singing is not so good despite I my university degree in musicology but the Microsoft instrument.

✓ To be honest, I don't like singing because my singing is not so good despite having my university degree in musicology and playing the Microsoft instrument.

句子结构混乱，缺少连词和动词，导致句意不清。应使用动名词短语'having my university degree'和连接词'and'连接两个并列部分，使句子完整通顺。

× So if I have a chance I will improve my instinct skills.

✓ So if I have a chance, I will improve my instinct skills.

缺少逗号分隔条件状语从句，影响句子结构的清晰。应在条件状语从句后加逗号。

× Yes, I started seeing how to sing because my Microsoft the scene is a miracles but I'm not good at it.

✓ Yes, I started learning how to sing because my Microsoft scene is a miracle, but I'm not good at it.

动词'seeing'用错，应为'learning'表示学习。'miracles'应为单数'miracle'。句子中时态和词汇使用不当，需调整。

× So as I said before, I will improve it.

✓ So, as I said before, I will improve it.

缺少逗号，导致句子结构不清晰。应在插入语前后加逗号。

× I want to sing for my parents, participate my mother, because my mother contributed many things for my university degree, which is musicology.

✓ I want to sing for my parents, especially my mother, because my mother contributed a lot to my university degree, which is musicology.

'participate my mother'用词错误，应为'especially my mother'。'contributed many things for'表达不当，应为'contributed a lot to'。代词和介词使用错误。

× So I want to thanks to you to her.

✓ So I want to thank her.

'thanks to you to her'结构错误，动词用法错误。应使用动词不定式'to thank'加宾语。

× Yes, of course, as far as I'm concerned, I believed that seeing can bring people of happiness because when we say it, I will feel very happy and pleasant.

✓ Yes, of course, as far as I'm concerned, I believe that singing can bring happiness to people because when we sing, I feel very happy and pleasant.

时态错误，'believed'应为现在时'believe'。'seeing'应为'singing'。'people of happiness'表达错误，应为'happiness to people'。'say it'应为'sing'。

× Can make me lose my worry.

✓ It can make me lose my worries.

缺少主语，句子不完整。应加主语'It'。'worry'应为复数'worries'。