唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sắp xếp câu hợp lý hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh câu quá dài hoặc bị ngắt quãng.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because my dad taught me every day when I was young. Although my voice was soft at first, I kept practicing. Now, singing helps me relieve stress and makes me feel happy.

建议: Bạn nên sử dụng thì đúng và cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy thêm các chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp.

示例: Yes, I have learned singing every day because my dad taught me. It makes me very happy and confident when I sing in front of others.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn nên ngắn gọn và rõ ràng hơn. Hãy chú ý dùng đúng từ và cấu trúc câu, đồng thời sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy và tự nhiên hơn.

示例: I want to sing for everyone, especially my friends and parents, because it helps me improve my singing skills and boosts my confidence.

建议: Bạn cần tránh sử dụng các từ ngắt quãng như "uh" và hoàn thiện câu trả lời với ý nghĩa rõ ràng. Hãy sử dụng các từ liên kết để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm các chi tiết cụ thể để làm rõ quan điểm.

示例: Definitely yes. Singing can bring happiness because it inspires people and allows them to feel the emotions in the music, which makes them feel joyful.

× I'm really interested in singing because when I was young my dad how taught me how to sing a song every day even though my voice was soft at first, today I still love singing because it helps me relieve stress and.

✓ I'm really interested in singing because when I was young my dad taught me how to sing a song every day even though my voice was soft at first. Today I still love singing because it helps me relieve stress.

The phrase 'my dad how taught me' contains an unnecessary word 'how' which disrupts the past tense verb 'taught'. Removing 'how' corrects the sentence. Also, the sentence is a run-on and should be split for clarity.

× Yes, I learned every day and my dad told me taught me how to sing a song and it makes me very happy and also be confident when sing a song to everyone.

✓ Yes, I learned every day and my dad taught me how to sing a song. It made me very happy and also confident when singing a song to everyone.

The phrase 'told me taught me' is incorrect; 'taught me' alone is sufficient. 'It makes me' should be in past tense 'It made me' to match the past learning context. 'Be confident when sing' should be 'confident when singing' to use the correct verb form after 'when'.

× Because my hobby is singing, so I want to sing to everyone because it's not only sharpen up my singing skills but I will feel confidently when I sing for everyone, especially my friends or my parents.

✓ Because my hobby is singing, I want to sing for everyone because it not only sharpens my singing skills but also makes me feel confident when I sing for everyone, especially my friends or my parents.

The phrase 'sing to everyone' should be 'sing for everyone' to use the correct preposition. 'Sharpen up' should be 'sharpens' to match subject-verb agreement and correct verb form. 'Feel confidently' should be 'feel confident' because 'confident' is an adjective describing the feeling.

× Definitely yes, because when, when we're singing, the voice is, uh, inspired to everyone and everyone and people can, uh, feel the music and also like.

✓ Definitely yes, because when we're singing, the voice inspires everyone, and people can feel the music and enjoy it.

The sentence has redundant words and incorrect conjunctions. 'The voice is inspired to everyone' should be 'the voice inspires everyone' to use active voice correctly. The phrase 'and also like' is incomplete and should be 'and enjoy it' to complete the thought.