唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，如"when they learned"应为"when I learn"，且句子结构稍显冗长。建议简化句子结构，注意主谓一致，并使用更自然的表达方式。

示例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress and gives me a sense of achievement when I master a difficult song.

建议: 回答中时态使用不一致，且表达不够流畅。建议统一时态，使用更自然的表达，并避免重复。

示例: Actually, I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I have taught myself by repeatedly singing along to songs.

建议: 回答不完整，句子中断，且表达不清晰。建议完整表达观点，避免语法错误，并使用连贯的句子。

示例: I don't have a specific person to sing for; I usually sing whenever I feel like it, not to show off or express emotions to anyone in particular.

建议: 回答中缺少主语，语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议补充主语，调整句子结构，使表达更自然流畅。

示例: I definitely think singing can increase happiness and reduce anxiety because it involves full-body exercise and helps control breathing.

× I like singing because I think singing can reduce our stress and it also can give us a sense of achievement when they learned a difficult song.

✓ I like singing because I think singing can reduce our stress and it can also give us a sense of achievement when we learn a difficult song.

句中使用了代词'they'指代'singing'，但'singing'是不可数名词，不能用复数代词'they'，应改为第一人称复数代词'we'，表示学习歌曲的人。

× Actually, I never learned systematic lessons.

✓ Actually, I have never learned systematic lessons.

句子描述过去到现在的经历，使用一般过去时'never learned'不准确，应使用现在完成时'have never learned'表示从过去到现在的经历。

× However, I always learn by myself and I was learning through singing repeated lyrics with the songs.

✓ However, I always learn by myself and I learn by singing repeated lyrics with the songs.

句中前半部分用一般现在时，后半部分用过去进行时不一致，应统一用一般现在时表达习惯性动作。

× Actually, I don't have specific people that I want to save for because when I like to sing, I just do it whenever I want to.

✓ Actually, I don't have specific people that I want to sing for because when I like to sing, I just do it whenever I want to.

句中'save for'应为'sing for'，动词用错导致句意不明，需改正为正确动词'sing'。

× Rather than showing off in front of somebody or express my emotions to somebody, I just.

✓ Rather than showing off in front of somebody or expressing my emotions to somebody, I just sing.

句子结构不完整，缺少谓语动词，且并列结构中动词形式应一致，故'express'改为'expressing'，并补充谓语动词'sing'。

× Definitely think can increase our happiness and release our anxious because through this activity you can exercise all over your body and through control the breathing.

✓ I definitely think singing can increase our happiness and relieve our anxiety because through this activity you can exercise your whole body and control your breathing.

句中缺少主语'I'，'release our anxious'用词错误，应为'relieve our anxiety'，且表达更准确，'all over your body'改为'your whole body'，'through control the breathing'改为'and control your breathing'。