唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some redundancy. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, avoid irrelevant information, and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary usage will help make your answer more natural.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing very much, although I feel shy singing in front of others. Usually, I sing when I am alone, especially while taking a bath. I find it relaxing and a good way to enjoy my favourite songs.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid minor grammar mistakes and try to be more specific about your experience.

示例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I usually sing for myself when I am alone, as it is a relaxing pastime. Occasionally, I sing in front of my brother, but he finds it amusing.

建议: Your answer is clear but could be enhanced by using linking words and more varied vocabulary. Try to combine sentences to avoid repetition and provide more specific reasons.

示例: I prefer to sing for myself rather than for others because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Singing alone is a great way for me to unwind and enjoy my free time.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and hesitations. Try to use linking words to structure your answer clearly and avoid filler words. Also, be more concise and specific in your explanation.

示例: I believe singing can bring happiness to many people, although it depends on personal preferences. For me, singing helps me relax and relieves stress, which makes me feel very happy.

× Usually I sing a song when I take a bath, when I'm a bathroom singer.

✓ Usually I sing a song when I take a bath, as I'm a bathroom singer.

The phrase 'when I'm a bathroom singer' is incorrect because 'when' implies a time, but being a bathroom singer is a state or habit. Using 'as' clarifies the reason or role, making the sentence grammatically correct.

× My wife is not too melodious, but it's quite good according to me.

✓ My voice is not too melodious, but it's quite good according to me.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'my wife' which is incorrect in this context. The speaker likely means their own voice, so replacing 'my wife' with 'my voice' and keeping 'it' referring to 'voice' corrects the sentence.

× So I've seen my favorite song and my favorite.

✓ So I've sung my favorite song.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'I've seen my favorite song and my favorite' is not a proper sentence. The intended meaning is likely that the speaker has sung their favorite song, so correcting it to 'I've sung my favorite song' makes it clear and grammatically correct.

× Oh, I didn't learn anything about singing, I just sing a song for myself or when I am alone.

✓ Oh, I didn't learn anything about singing, I just sang a song for myself or when I was alone.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the speaker refers to past actions ('didn't learn'), the verbs 'sing' and 'am' should be in past tense to maintain consistency.

× Sometime I sing a song in front of my brother, but he laughed.

✓ Sometimes I sing songs in front of my brother, but he laughs.

The adverb 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'a song' can be plural 'songs' to indicate multiple occasions. 'He laughed' is past tense, but the context suggests habitual action, so 'he laughs' is appropriate.

× I think for myself, not for anybody, because it makes me relax or it's a good way to express my emotions.

✓ I think I sing for myself, not for anybody, because it helps me relax and it's a good way to express my emotions.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject for 'think for myself'. Adding 'I sing' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'makes me relax' is better expressed as 'helps me relax' for natural English usage.

× Actually, it depends upon the people choice.

✓ Actually, it depends on people's choice.

The phrase 'depends upon' is less common and 'depends on' is preferred. Also, 'people choice' should be possessive 'people's choice' to indicate choice belonging to people.

× According to my opinion, yes, it's a very good way for bring happiness for me because when I sing song, uh, that time my mind is too relaxed and it's free from every stress in my life that I, that I'm facing.

✓ In my opinion, yes, it's a very good way to bring happiness to me because when I sing a song, my mind is very relaxed and free from all the stress I am facing in my life.

'According to my opinion' is incorrect; 'In my opinion' is correct. 'Way for bring' should be 'way to bring'. 'Sing song' needs an article: 'sing a song'. 'That time' is unnecessary and awkward. 'Too relaxed' should be 'very relaxed' for positive meaning. 'Free from every stress' should be 'free from all the stress'. The phrase 'that I, that I'm facing' is redundant; 'I am facing' suffices.