唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma dherai repetition ra grammatical error haru chan. Tapai le sentence haru lai chhoto ra spashta banayera, pratyek sentence ma ek matra vichar prastut garnu parcha. English ma natural awaz ko lagi, sentence haru lai sanga jodne linking words jastai 'because', 'so', 'and' ko prayog garnu hos, tara barambar prayog nagarnu hos.

示例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and clear my mind. It is one of my habits, especially when I am taking a bath. Singing reduces my stress and makes me feel happy.

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma clarity ra grammar ko samasya cha. Tapai le prashna ko sidha uttar dinu parcha ra tespachi thap bibaran dinu parcha. Sentence haru lai sanga jodne linking words ko prayog garnu hos ra repetition hataunu hos.

示例: No, I have never learnt how to sing because my parents did not allow me to take extra singing classes. They believe that focusing on school education is more important for success than pursuing careers like singing or dancing.

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma repetition ra asamarthit sentence haru chan. Tapai le prashna ko sidha uttar dinu parcha ra thap bibaran ma spashta ra sanga jodne sentence haru prayog garnu parcha. Tapai le linking words jastai 'because', 'so' ko prayog garera uttar lai ramro banau hos.

示例: I want to sing for my mother because she has struggled a lot to help me succeed in life. Singing for her is my way of showing gratitude and love.

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma clarity ra grammar ko samasya cha. Tapai le prashna ko sidha uttar dinu parcha ra thap bibaran ma spashta ra sanga jodne sentence haru prayog garnu parcha. Repetition hataunu hos ra sentence haru lai sajilo ra natural banau hos.

示例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them express their emotions and feel connected. When people listen to or sing songs, they often smile and feel joyful.

× Yes, I like sing singing because because it make me feel it make my mind freeze, relax, straightening.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund form 'singing' not 'sing'. Also, 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'mind freeze, relax, straightening' is unclear and ungrammatical; 'relaxed and refreshed' is a clearer expression.

× because because it make me feel it make my mind freeze, relax, straightening.

✓ because it makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× It also helps me to do outcome from the strain.

✓ It also helps me to relieve stress.

The phrase 'do outcome from the strain' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'relieve stress' to convey the intended meaning.

× So I love to I love to do singing singing it make my It is also my one of the habit of habit while bathing.

✓ So I love singing; it is also one of my habits while bathing.

The phrase 'love to do singing' is incorrect; 'love singing' is correct. 'It make my' is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'One of the habit of habit' is redundant; correct form is 'one of my habits'.

× I love to use.

✓ I love to sing while bathing.

The sentence 'I love to use' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'sing while bathing' completes the thought logically.

× No, I didn't. I didn't learn how to sing because my parents didn't allow me to to take the extra classes of singing because they think that only if if daughter get a education from school all they they become more successful not in the another career like singing, dancing.

✓ No, I didn't. I didn't learn how to sing because my parents didn't allow me to take extra singing classes because they thought that only if a daughter gets an education from school, she will become more successful, not in another career like singing or dancing.

The verb tense should be consistent in past tense: 'think' to 'thought', 'get' to 'gets'. Articles 'a' and 'an' are needed before 'education'. Pronouns should be correct: 'she' instead of 'they'. Redundant words like 'to to' and repeated words should be removed.

× because they think that only if if daughter get a education from school all they they become more successful not in the another career like singing, dancing.

✓ because they thought that only if a daughter gets an education from school, she will become more successful, not in another career like singing or dancing.

Pronouns should agree in number and gender. 'Daughter' is singular, so 'she' is appropriate. Also, 'all they they' is incorrect and should be removed.

× So I did not allowed and I also I did not.

✓ So I was not allowed, and I also did not learn.

The correct past tense passive form is 'was not allowed'. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'learn' clarifies the meaning.

× I love to I love to sing for my mother because my mother has done has done many struggle for me to make me to make me success in life, to make to make my career better.

✓ I love to sing for my mother because she has struggled a lot to help me succeed in life and improve my career.

The phrase 'has done many struggle' is incorrect; 'has struggled a lot' is correct. Repetition like 'to make me to make me success' should be corrected to 'help me succeed'.

× My mother. I love to sing her the like and I love to write about her how how she struggled from the from after the match.

✓ My mother. I love to sing to her and I love to write about how she struggled after the match.

The verb 'sing' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. The phrase 'sing her the like' is incorrect. Repetition and unclear phrases like 'from the from after the match' should be simplified.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because because every people, because when people are in shape this and they listen to this thing and they smile and they in singing the people we can easily express our emotion values how we feel for each other.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because when people are in a good mood and listen to music, they smile and through singing, we can easily express our emotions and how we feel for each other.

The phrase 'every people' is incorrect; 'people' is plural and does not take 'every'. 'In shape this' and 'listen to this thing' are unclear; 'in a good mood' and 'listen to music' are clearer. Sentence structure is improved for clarity.