唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid filler words like 'uh oh'. Start with a clear topic sentence and then provide specific reasons or feelings about singing. Avoid contradicting yourself by saying you love singing but it's not for you without explanation.

示例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Although I'm not very skilled, I enjoy it as a way to express my emotions and relieve stress.

建议: Provide a clearer and more structured response. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like 'all of that stuff'. Also, explain briefly why you didn't continue singing after school.

示例: Yes, I took music and singing classes at school. However, I struggled with singing and did not perform well, so I decided not to pursue it further.

建议: Avoid hesitation and filler words. Start with a direct answer and then add specific examples using linking words to make your response coherent.

示例: I would like to sing for my future children, especially when they are going to bed. Also, I would enjoy singing for my family at special occasions like weddings.

建议: Make your answer more natural and fluent by avoiding filler words and repetitions. Provide a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons or examples.

示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because songs with positive lyrics can uplift people's moods, while sad songs might have the opposite effect.

× Yes, I do like singing. It's actually uh oh.

✓ Yes, I do like singing. It's actually, uh, oh.

The original sentence has a hesitation filler 'uh oh' which is informal and unclear. Adding commas separates the hesitation sounds for clarity and natural speech flow.

× in school we have a a class that teach us music and singing and all of that stuff.

✓ In school, we have a class that teaches us music and singing and all of that stuff.

The subject 'a class' is singular, so the verb should be 'teaches' to agree in number. Also, the repeated 'a' is a typo and should be corrected.

× But I was very bad at it and I failed, so that's why I didn't continue my career.

✓ But I was very bad at it and I failed, so that's why I didn't continue my career.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× If they asked me to sing for them if they are in bed or for my family at weddings, it would be quite alright.

✓ If they ask me to sing for them when they are in bed or for my family at weddings, it would be quite alright.

The conditional sentence mixes past tense 'asked' with present 'are'. Using 'ask' and 'are' keeps the condition in present/future, which is appropriate here.

× Some songs are or have, uh, happy lyrics and some other don't.

✓ Some songs have, uh, happy lyrics and some others don't.

The phrase 'some other' is incorrect; it should be 'some others' to refer to other songs. Also, 'are or have' is redundant; 'have' is sufficient.