唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, đồng thời câu trả lời quá dài và không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng hơn.

示例: I don't really like singing because I don't think I have a good voice or the talent for it. Also, I find it hard to control my breathing when I sing, so it's not one of my hobbies.

建议: Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

示例: Yes, I have tried to learn singing by following some tutorials on YouTube in the past, but I didn't find them very effective, so I stopped trying.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý. Bạn nên sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ vựng phù hợp hơn để diễn đạt ý muốn hát cho ai và trong dịp nào.

示例: I want to sing for my parents during special celebrations to show my love. Also, I would like to sing at school events, such as the opening ceremony or New Year celebrations.

建议: Bạn cần chú ý phát âm và chính tả (ví dụ: 'seeing' nên là 'singing'). Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

示例: Yes, I believe singing plays an important role in our lives. It helps people relax after a hard day and enjoy positive melodies and lyrics.

× My voice is not beautiful enough and I can control my breath so that singing is not my hobbies at all.

✓ My voice is not beautiful enough and I cannot control my breath, so singing is not my hobby at all.

The phrase 'I can control my breath' contradicts the intended meaning; it should be 'I cannot control my breath' to express inability. Also, 'hobbies' should be singular 'hobby' because it refers to singing as a single activity.

× My voice is not beautiful enough and I can control my breath so that singing is not my hobbies at all.

✓ My voice is not beautiful enough and I cannot control my breath, so singing is not my hobby at all.

The word 'hobbies' is plural but should be singular 'hobby' because the sentence refers to singing as one activity.

× Yes, of course, in the past I try to follow some directions from people on the youtube.com, but I don't think that it is effective and help me to improve my singing skills, so now not.

✓ Yes, of course, in the past I tried to follow some directions from people on YouTube, but I don't think that it was effective or helped me to improve my singing skills, so I don't do it now.

The verb 'try' should be in past tense 'tried' to match 'in the past'. Also, 'help' should be 'helped' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Now not' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't do it now'.

× Yes, of course, in the past I try to follow some directions from people on the youtube.com, but I don't think that it is effective and help me to improve my singing skills, so now not.

✓ Yes, of course, in the past I tried to follow some directions from people on YouTube, but I don't think that it was effective or helped me to improve my singing skills, so I don't do it now.

The phrase 'on the youtube.com' is incorrect; it should be 'on YouTube' without 'the' and '.com'.

× In some celebrations I want to sing for my parents to express my love, my feeling to them and in the other like school opening ceremony I will sing for happy for the New year school.

✓ In some celebrations, I want to sing for my parents to express my love and feelings to them, and in others, like the school opening ceremony, I will sing happily for the New Year at school.

The phrase 'in the other like school opening ceremony' is incorrect; it should be 'in others, like the school opening ceremony'. Also, 'sing for happy' is incorrect; it should be 'sing happily'. 'New year school' should be 'New Year at school'.

× In some celebrations I want to sing for my parents to express my love, my feeling to them and in the other like school opening ceremony I will sing for happy for the New year school.

✓ In some celebrations, I want to sing for my parents to express my love and feelings to them, and in others, like the school opening ceremony, I will sing happily for the New Year at school.

The preposition 'for' before 'happy' is incorrect; 'happily' is the correct adverb form to describe how the singing is done.

× Yes, of course music takes a crucial part in our life, so seeing is one of the most effective way for us to feel more relaxing after a long day working hard and we can feel to the melodies and follow the positive lyric.

✓ Yes, of course, music takes a crucial part in our lives, so singing is one of the most effective ways for us to feel more relaxed after a long day of hard work, and we can feel the melodies and follow the positive lyrics.

'Seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. 'Life' should be plural 'lives' to match 'our'. 'Way' should be plural 'ways' to agree with 'one of the most'. 'Feel more relaxing' should be 'feel more relaxed'. 'Working hard' should be 'of hard work'. 'Feel to the melodies' is incorrect; it should be 'feel the melodies'. 'Lyric' should be plural 'lyrics'.