唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more coherent and concise. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and unclear phrases such as 'come to every song' and 'just the bathroom, very natural bathrooms in there.' Instead, directly state your feelings about singing and give clear reasons. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and avoid redundancy.

示例: I enjoy singing even though I'm not a professional. I often hum along to my favorite songs, especially when I'm alone, like in the bathroom. Singing helps me relax and express myself, but I haven't performed professionally or recorded any songs.

建议: Focus on giving a clear and direct answer. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and fragmented sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, explain that you haven't had formal training but practice by memorizing and understanding songs, which helps you improve.

示例: I haven't received formal singing lessons or participated in competitions. However, I usually memorize songs and try to understand their lyrics, which helps me practice by singing and humming along.

建议: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain your feelings about singing for others. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'sing singing' and 'was pretty shy'.

示例: I prefer to sing only for myself because I find it relaxing and enjoyable when I'm alone. I'm usually shy and feel intimidated singing in front of others, so I avoid performing publicly.

建议: Make your answer more fluent and grammatically correct. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas. Be specific about how singing affects mood and stress. Avoid redundancy such as 'all the all the'.

示例: Of course, singing your favorite songs can bring happiness because it helps you relax and relieves stress. When you focus on the lyrics and enjoy the music, it can make you forget your problems and feel calm and pleasant.

× I do come to every song which I listen to and I like humming the song and just the bathroom, very natural bathrooms in there, but not a professional singer who sing in studios and stuff.

✓ I do come to every song which I listen to and I like humming the song and just the bathroom, very natural bathrooms in there, but not a professional singer who sings in studios and stuff.

The verb 'sing' should be in the third person singular form 'sings' to agree with the singular subject 'a professional singer'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue (ID 2).

× I, I didn't send any professional songs to any silver screen.

✓ I, I haven't sent any professional songs to any silver screen.

The present perfect tense 'have/has + past participle' is more appropriate here to indicate an experience up to now, rather than the simple past 'didn't send'. This is a past tense issue (ID 5).

× I've never been to any uh singing competitions or singing learning schools.

✓ I've never been to any singing competitions or singing schools.

The phrase 'singing learning schools' is incorrect; 'singing schools' is the proper term. Also, 'to' is correctly used with 'been'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and word choice (ID 11).

× I usually like, memorize the song and understand the lyrics and just uh, reflect back by singing and humming to the same song.

✓ I usually like to memorize the song and understand the lyrics and just, uh, reflect back by singing and humming the same song.

After 'like', the infinitive form 'to memorize' is preferred over the bare verb. Also, 'humming to the same song' should be 'humming the same song' as 'hum' is a transitive verb here. This is a verb form and preposition usage issue (ID 8 and 11).

× I just want to enjoy and relax and just hum to the songs to my favorite songs while I'm at while I'm alone.

✓ I just want to enjoy and relax and just hum to my favorite songs while I'm alone.

The phrase 'hum to the songs to my favorite songs' is redundant and incorrect. The correct preposition is 'hum to my favorite songs'. Also, 'while I'm at while I'm alone' is redundant and should be simplified. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and sentence structure issue (ID 11 and 26).

× And usually I was pretty shy sing singing in front of public and it was very intimidating to sing for anybody.

✓ And usually I was pretty shy singing in front of the public and it was very intimidating to sing for anybody.

The phrase 'shy sing singing' is incorrect; it should be 'shy singing'. Also, 'in front of public' requires the definite article 'the public'. This is a verb form and article usage issue (ID 10 and 17).

× Of course, singing to your favorite songs which helps you relax and give us very stress relief mood.

✓ Of course, singing to your favorite songs helps you relax and gives you a very stress-relieving mood.

The pronoun 'us' is incorrect here; it should be 'you' to match the subject. Also, 'give us very stress relief mood' is awkward; 'gives you a very stress-relieving mood' is better. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and adjectives/adverbs issue (ID 12 and 13).

× So it makes you forget all the all the problems you have and just working with the song and understanding the lyrics and enjoying the music, that really puts you in a very calm and pleasant way.

✓ So it makes you forget all the problems you have and just work with the song, understand the lyrics, and enjoy the music; that really puts you in a very calm and pleasant state.

The phrase 'just working with the song' should be 'just work with the song' to maintain parallel verb forms. Also, 'puts you in a very calm and pleasant way' is incorrect; it should be 'puts you in a very calm and pleasant state'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and sentence structure issue (ID 11 and 26).