唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is heartfelt but a bit repetitive and has some grammatical errors. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating words. Also, use simpler and clearer expressions to sound more natural.

示例: Yes, I love singing because it brings me peace and calmness. Singing is one of my favorite hobbies, and I enjoy it very much.

建议: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is unclear. Use correct verb forms and complete sentences. Also, clarify your experience more naturally.

示例: No, I have never taken singing classes, but I learned the lyrics when I was invited to sing at a program.

建议: Your answer is meaningful but a bit long and repetitive. Try to organize your ideas clearly and avoid repeating the same points. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I like to sing for my husband to make our dates more romantic and to show how much he means to me. Singing is like poetry, and I have been singing for him for a long time and will continue to do so.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but some sentences are unclear and repetitive. Try to express your thoughts more clearly and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness. For example, someone once dedicated a song to me, which made me feel very special. So, singing can create strong emotions and joy for people.

× Yes, I love singing because I think the tone and melody that my soul finds during the singing gives the gives me different kind of peace, calmness and tranquillities.

✓ Yes, I love singing because I think the tone and melody that my soul finds during singing give me different kinds of peace, calmness, and tranquility.

The phrase 'during the singing' is incorrect; 'during singing' is the correct form because 'singing' here functions as a gerund without an article. Also, 'gives the gives me' is a repetition error; it should be 'give me' to agree with the plural subject 'tone and melody'. 'Different kind' should be pluralized to 'different kinds' to match the plural objects. 'Tranquillities' is rarely used in plural; 'tranquility' is preferred as an uncountable noun.

× So singing is one of my best hobby and yes I do prefer singing a lot.

✓ So singing is one of my best hobbies and yes I do prefer singing a lot.

The phrase 'one of my best hobby' is incorrect because 'one of' requires a plural noun; therefore, 'hobby' should be pluralized to 'hobbies'.

× No, I have never took class of singing, but I have learned the lyrics of when when I was called for a program to sing.

✓ No, I have never taken a singing class, but I have learned the lyrics when I was called for a program to sing.

The verb 'took' is the simple past tense, but after 'have never' (present perfect), the past participle 'taken' is required. 'Class of singing' is awkward; 'a singing class' is more natural. The repeated word 'when when' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'when'.

× I will sing for my husband to create our date more romantic and also to express his presence in my life.

✓ I will sing for my husband to make our date more romantic and also to express his presence in my life.

The phrase 'create our date more romantic' is incorrect; 'make our date more romantic' is the correct collocation. 'Date' here refers to a romantic meeting, so 'make' is the appropriate verb.

× I think singing is the best form of poetry and till now I have been singing for him and for the rest of my life I will be singing for him and expressing.

✓ I think singing is the best form of poetry, and until now I have been singing for him, and for the rest of my life, I will be singing for him and expressing myself.

The phrase 'till now' is better expressed as 'until now' in formal English. A comma is needed before 'and' to separate independent clauses. The sentence ends abruptly with 'expressing'; it should be 'expressing myself' to complete the thought.

× Yes. Also from my personal experience, I have been someone for whom someone has dedicated a song to.

✓ Yes. Also, from my personal experience, I have been someone to whom someone has dedicated a song.

The phrase 'someone for whom someone has dedicated a song to' is incorrect because the preposition 'to' is redundant at the end. The correct relative pronoun phrase is 'someone to whom someone has dedicated a song'.

× So being that person is really valuable.

✓ So, being that person is really valuable to me.

The sentence is grammatically correct but incomplete in context. Adding 'to me' clarifies the meaning and improves sentence structure.