唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer has some unclear word choices and minor grammar issues that affect clarity. For example, 'I like to see' should be 'I like to sing.' Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas. Try to use clear and natural expressions, and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

示例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress. Moreover, singing allows me to express my emotions and creates a joyful experience. Overall, singing is a positive activity for me.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting prepositions and using more natural phrasing. For example, say 'I haven't attended a professional institution to learn singing.' Also, use linking words like 'so' to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I haven't attended a professional institution to learn singing, so I mostly learn by watching TV, YouTube, or social media. Whenever I hear songs I like, I deliberately sing along to practice.

建议: There are several grammar and word choice errors that make your answer hard to understand. For example, 'I usually seem for myself' should be 'I usually sing for myself.' Also, avoid redundancy and clarify your ideas. Try to use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons clearly.

示例: I usually sing for myself because I'm not confident in my voice. It feels embarrassing to sing in front of others, so I prefer to sing alone when I'm stressed.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. For example, say 'singing can bring happiness to people' without 'first.' Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to explain how singing affects emotions. Avoid vague phrases like 'more of it.'

示例: I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music evokes emotions and stirs feelings inside them. For example, hearing a favorite song can lift someone's mood and make their life happier.

× Yes, I like to see.

✓ Yes, I like singing.

The verb 'like' is commonly followed by a gerund (-ing form) when expressing enjoyment of an activity. 'Like to see' is incorrect here because the context is about singing, not seeing.

× The reason is whenever I see, it helps to relieve my stress.

✓ The reason is whenever I sing, it helps to relieve my stress.

The pronoun 'see' is incorrect in this context; the student likely meant 'sing'. Using the correct verb clarifies the meaning and matches the topic.

× Furthermore, it resonates the feelings and can create a joyful and delightful experience.

✓ Furthermore, it resonates with feelings and can create a joyful and delightful experience.

The verb 'resonate' is usually followed by 'with' when referring to feelings or emotions. Omitting 'with' makes the sentence grammatically incorrect.

× I haven't attended in a professional institution to learn singing.

✓ I haven't attended a professional institution to learn singing.

The verb 'attend' does not require the preposition 'in' when referring to institutions. The correct form is 'attend a professional institution'.

× I just learned singing through watching TV, YouTube, or on social media.

✓ I just learned singing by watching TV, YouTube, or social media.

The phrase 'through watching' is awkward; 'by watching' is the correct preposition to indicate the method of learning.

× Whenever I hear some songs that I like, I deliberately sing along with it.

✓ Whenever I hear some songs that I like, I deliberately sing along with them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'songs', which is plural. The correct pronoun is 'them' to agree in number.

× I usually seem for myself only.

✓ I usually sing for myself only.

The verb 'seem' is incorrect here; the student likely meant 'sing'. Correcting the verb clarifies the meaning.

× So I definitely would only sing for myself whenever I'm stressed and I wanted to sing and consult me.

✓ So I definitely would only sing for myself whenever I'm stressed and want to sing and comfort myself.

The phrase 'consult me' is incorrect; the student likely meant 'comfort myself'. Also, tense consistency requires 'want' instead of 'wanted'.

× I believe that singing can bring happiness to other people first.

✓ I believe that singing can bring happiness to other people.

The word 'first' is unnecessary and confusing here; removing it improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Firstly, when people hear some songs, it brings some emotion and stir up some feelings inside them.

✓ Firstly, when people hear some songs, they bring some emotion and stir up some feelings inside them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'songs', which is plural. The correct pronoun is 'they' to agree in number.

× So more of it is bringing happiness into their life.

✓ So more of it brings happiness into their lives.

The phrase 'more of it' is unclear; 'more of this' or 'it' is ambiguous. Also, 'life' should be plural 'lives' to agree with 'their' referring to multiple people.