唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答不够自然且表达不清晰，语法错误较多，建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题并补充具体原因，避免重复和无关内容。

示例: No, I don't like singing because I am not good at it. When I was a child, I sang in class and my classmates laughed at me, which made me feel embarrassed.

建议: 回答内容较丰富，但表达不够连贯，语法和用词有误，建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并注意时态和单复数形式。

示例: Yes, I have tried to learn singing from some online websites because I wanted to improve. However, I found that I lack talent, so I gave up eventually.

建议: 回答不够完整且语法错误明显，建议先直接回答问题，再补充具体情境，注意句子结构和用词准确。

示例: If I were good at singing, I would sing in public for my girlfriend to express my love and propose to her.

建议: 回答较好，表达了观点并提供了具体例子，但句子结构略显简单，建议使用更多连接词和丰富词汇使表达更自然流畅。

示例: Yes, definitely. For example, when I visit Disneyland, the singing and dancing performances create a relaxing atmosphere that makes me feel very happy.

× Actually I'm not very seen in person because it's it's just because I'm not good at singing.

✓ Actually, I'm not very good at singing in person because it's just because I'm not good at singing.

句子中使用了错误的动词形式“seen”，应使用形容词“good”来表达能力。这里需要用现在时态的形容词来描述当前的状态。

× When I was a kid I sing in the class and everybody just laugh at me and even my mother said that why this child thing like a dog and don't?

✓ When I was a kid, I sang in the class and everybody just laughed at me, and even my mother said, 'Why does this child sing like a dog and not?'

描述过去的动作时，动词应使用过去式。这里“sing”应改为“sang”，“laugh”应改为“laughed”。此外，句子结构不完整，需调整以符合语法规范。

× I learned a little from Billy Billy's I learned a little from Billy Billy websites because I know I'm not very good at singing and singing on public makes me feel embarrassed.

✓ I learned a little from Billy Billy's websites because I know I'm not very good at singing, and singing in public makes me feel embarrassed.

“learned”使用正确，但“singing on public”应改为“singing in public”，这是介词使用错误。

× singing on public makes me feel embarrassed.

✓ singing in public makes me feel embarrassed.

固定搭配是“singing in public”，介词“in”用于表示在某个环境或场合中。

× But after learn a little about things I find that I just don't have such talent so I just give up.

✓ But after learning a little about things, I find that I just don't have such talent, so I just give up.

“after”后面应接动名词形式“learning”，而不是动词原形“learn”。

× I if I'm very good at saying I may stay in public for my girlfriend to tell her I want to marry with her, yeah.

✓ If I'm very good at singing, I may stay in public to tell my girlfriend that I want to marry her, yeah.

“saying”应为“singing”，且“marry with her”应改为“marry her”，动词“marry”后不加介词“with”。

× I if I'm very good at saying I may stay in public for my girlfriend to tell her I want to marry with her, yeah.

✓ If I'm very good at singing, I may stay in public to tell my girlfriend that I want to marry her, yeah.

句中“for my girlfriend to tell her”结构不正确，应改为“to tell my girlfriend”。

× When I go to Disneyland, the performance, just singing and dancing and the whole atmosphere, just very relaxing and makes me feel a sense of happiness.

✓ When I go to Disneyland, the performances, just singing and dancing, and the whole atmosphere are just very relaxing and make me feel a sense of happiness.

“performance”应为复数“performances”，主谓一致；“makes”应改为“make”，与复数主语一致。