唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa yang membuatnya kurang natural. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih jelas dan singkat, serta hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'happier'. Gunakan kalimat yang langsung menjawab pertanyaan dengan alasan yang spesifik.

示例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions. Whenever I feel happy or sad, singing makes me feel better and more relaxed.

建议: Jawaban Anda agak membingungkan dan ada kesalahan dalam penggunaan kata. Cobalah untuk menjawab dengan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur, serta gunakan kosakata yang tepat untuk menjelaskan bahwa Anda belum belajar menyanyi secara formal.

示例: No, I have never taken singing lessons. I enjoy singing for fun and personal enjoyment, but I have never considered becoming a professional singer.

建议: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup jelas, tetapi ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa dan kalimat yang kurang natural. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih lancar dan gunakan kata-kata yang tepat untuk menyatakan ketidakpercayaan diri dan harapan di masa depan.

示例: I want to sing for myself because I'm not confident enough to sing in front of others. However, maybe one day I will have the courage to sing for them.

建议: Jawaban Anda mengandung banyak kesalahan tata bahasa dan kata yang salah (misalnya 'seeing' seharusnya 'singing'). Cobalah untuk menggunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta perhatikan penggunaan kata yang tepat untuk menyampaikan pendapat Anda.

示例: Absolutely yes. Singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions. For example, when I sing, I feel happy and it helps me share my feelings with others.

× I like singing but I didn't want to become the artist.

✓ I like singing but I didn't want to become an artist.

The past tense 'didn't want' is correct, but the article 'the' before 'artist' is incorrect because it implies a specific artist. It should be 'an artist' to indicate any artist in general.

× I just enjoy singing whenever I feel sad or feel happy I always think or maybe things like makes me more happier.

✓ I just enjoy singing whenever I feel sad or happy; I always think that maybe things like this make me happier.

The sentence has redundancy and incorrect comparative form 'more happier'. 'Happier' alone is the correct comparative form. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and needs punctuation and conjunctions for clarity.

× Actually, I didn't ever think to learn how to sing, but I love singing.

✓ Actually, I never thought about learning how to sing, but I love singing.

The phrase 'didn't ever think to learn' is awkward. The correct past tense expression is 'never thought about learning'. Also, 'think to learn' is not idiomatic; 'think about learning' is better.

× I like singing, but it's just for fun, for myself, for seeing for myself, not just become to the artist.

✓ I like singing, but it's just for fun, for myself, for seeing myself, not to become an artist.

The phrase 'for seeing for myself' is incorrect; it should be 'for seeing myself'. Also, 'not just become to the artist' is incorrect; it should be 'not to become an artist'. The prepositions 'for' and 'to' are misused here.

× I will say I want to sing for myself because I'm not confident with my voice that I sing for everyone.

✓ I would say I want to sing for myself because I'm not confident enough with my voice to sing for everyone.

The use of 'will say' is incorrect here; 'would say' is more appropriate for expressing opinion. Also, 'confident with my voice that I sing' is incorrect; it should be 'confident enough with my voice to sing'.

× Absolutely yes. Seeing can bring happiness to people.

✓ Absolutely yes. Singing can bring happiness to people.

The word 'Seeing' is a typo or incorrect word; it should be 'Singing' to match the context. The present tense 'can bring' is correct.

× For example, me, I'm seeing when I says or when I'm happy.

✓ For example, I sing when I am sad or when I'm happy.

'I'm seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'I sing'. Also, 'when I says' is incorrect; it should be 'when I am sad'. The verb 'say' is misused here; the intended meaning is 'sing'.

× Singing could express your emotion, your feeling on it.

✓ Singing can express your emotions and feelings.

'Your emotion, your feeling on it' is awkward and redundant. It should be plural 'emotions and feelings' without 'on it' for clarity and correctness.