唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to correct grammatical errors and make your answer more concise and natural. For example, say "Singing is actually one of my favourite hobbies" and avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly. Also, use linking words to connect your reasons logically.

示例: Yes, singing is one of my favourite hobbies because I grew up surrounded by music students, which inspired me. Additionally, I enjoy listening to music and often sing in the shower.

建议: Focus on clear pronunciation and grammar. Replace informal fillers like "umm" and correct phrases such as "breathe pro probably" to "proper breathing techniques." Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

示例: I have never taken professional singing lessons, but I have learned some techniques through YouTube videos. For instance, I improved my breathing and enunciation skills by practising regularly.

建议: Avoid vague expressions like "like medium scale audience" and improve grammar, e.g., "amateurly saying" should be "amateur singing." Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to add details coherently.

示例: I have sung as an amateur in front of a medium-sized audience during my university years. I joined the music club and performed several times, which was a great experience.

建议: Try to avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and finish your thoughts clearly. For example, explain why singing brings you happiness with specific reasons.

示例: I believe singing brings happiness, at least for me. When I listen to music and start singing along, it gives me a sense of freedom and helps me forget my worries.

× Singing is actually one of my favorite hobby.

✓ Singing is actually one of my favorite hobbies.

The word 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' because it is preceded by 'one of my favorite', which requires a plural noun after 'of'. This is a common singular and plural issue.

× I grow up in an area where there's a lot of music students nearby and I was always influenced by them.

✓ I grew up in an area where there were a lot of music students nearby and I was always influenced by them.

The verb 'grow' should be in the past tense 'grew' to match the past time frame. Also, 'there's' (there is) should be 'there were' to agree with the plural noun 'students' and past tense context.

× I've never officially learned how to sing with a professional, but I did some online lesson by myself through YouTube videos and I did learn how to breathe pro probably and how to enunciate my singing umm stuff.

✓ I've never officially learned how to sing with a professional, but I did some online lessons by myself through YouTube videos and I did learn how to breathe properly and how to enunciate my singing stuff.

The noun 'lesson' should be plural 'lessons' because it refers to multiple sessions. Also, 'pro probably' is a misspelling of 'properly'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× So actually I have been amateurly saying before in front of a like medium scale audience.

✓ So actually I have been singing amateurishly before in front of a medium-scale audience.

The adverb 'amateurly' is incorrect; the correct form is 'amateurishly'. Also, 'saying' should be 'singing' to match the context. 'Medium scale' should be hyphenated as 'medium-scale' when used as a compound adjective.

× It was actually during my university year, I joined the music club and I did some performances back then.

✓ It was actually during my university years that I joined the music club and did some performances back then.

'University year' should be plural 'university years' to indicate the period. Also, the sentence is improved by adding 'that' to connect the clauses properly.

× I don't know for other people, but for me it obviously does.

✓ I don't know about other people, but for me, it obviously does.

The phrase 'I don't know for other people' is awkward; 'I don't know about other people' is the correct expression. Adding a comma after 'me' improves readability.

× Singing brings me joy because when I listen to music, when when I start singing to it, it brings me a feeling of freedom and I just forget about.

✓ Singing brings me joy because when I listen to music and start singing along, it gives me a feeling of freedom and I just forget about everything.

The sentence has repetition ('when when') and incomplete ending ('I just forget about'). Correcting these improves clarity and completeness. 'Singing to it' is better expressed as 'singing along'.