Part 1
考官
Do you like singing? Why?
考生
Yes, I like singing. Cousin can make me happy when I am not happy and angry and I I like seeing to help me to be relaxed and I like singing.
考官
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
考生
No, because it's just my favorite. Uh, it's not my class to be rent. Uh, but anyway, if I have the time and I think I will, uh, to buy a class to learn too soon.
考官
Who do you want to sing for?
考生
Umm, because my personality is fine. So I just inform you because I think I can sing for other people. For me, it's not good. Then I'm not confident about my thing because I think I'm seeing not very good.
考官
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
考生
Uh, that is a very big per question. Uh, first, I think some people like songs and like singing. It's a good way to sing, uh, bring happiness to people, but some people not like seeing. So it's just not good for them. And I think it's, uh, exposed, OK.
Do you like singing? Why?
分数: 40.0建议: 回答不够连贯,存在语法错误和重复,表达不自然。建议简洁明了地表达喜欢唱歌的原因,并避免重复。
示例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and improves my mood when I feel upset or angry.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
分数: 30.0建议: 回答含糊不清,语法和表达错误较多,缺乏逻辑。建议直接回答是否学过唱歌,并说明原因或计划。
示例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I haven't had time, but I plan to take classes in the near future.
Who do you want to sing for?
分数: 35.0建议: 表达不清晰,缺乏逻辑和连贯性。建议明确回答想为谁唱歌,并说明原因。
示例: I would like to sing for my family and friends because I want to share my happiness with them, even though I'm not very confident in my singing.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
分数: 40.0建议: 回答内容重复且表达不流畅。建议简洁明了地表达观点,并用具体例子支持。
示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and enjoy music, although some may not like singing.
× Cousin can make me happy when I am not happy and angry and I I like seeing to help me to be relaxed and I like singing.
✓ My cousin can make me happy when I am not happy and angry, and I like singing to help me relax.
句子中缺少冠词“my”来修饰单数名词“cousin”,导致单复数错误。应使用“my cousin”表示“我的表兄弟/表姐妹”。另外,“seeing”应为“singing”,且“to help me to be relaxed”表达不自然,改为“to help me relax”更简洁。
× I I like seeing to help me to be relaxed and I like singing.
✓ I like singing to help me relax.
“seeing”应为“singing”,且“to help me to be relaxed”中“to be relaxed”用法不当,正确表达为“to help me relax”,即动词不定式后直接跟动词原形。
× No, because it's just my favorite. Uh, it's not my class to be rent.
✓ No, because it's just my favorite. Uh, it's not my class to be taken.
“to be rent”用法错误,动词“rent”意为“租”,此处应使用“take a class”,即“上课”,正确表达为“it's not my class to be taken”。
× Uh, but anyway, if I have the time and I think I will, uh, to buy a class to learn too soon.
✓ Uh, but anyway, if I have the time, I think I will buy a class to learn soon.
“to buy a class to learn too soon”结构不正确,且“too soon”含义不明确,应为“soon”表示“很快”。此外,“I think I will”后应直接跟动词原形,去掉“to”。
× Umm, because my personality is fine. So I just inform you because I think I can sing for other people.
✓ Umm, because my personality is fine, so I just want to inform you that I think I can sing for other people.
“inform you”用法不当,表达意图应为“告诉你”,应使用“want to inform you that”。
× For me, it's not good. Then I'm not confident about my thing because I think I'm seeing not very good.
✓ For me, it's not good. I'm not confident about my singing because I think I'm not very good at it.
“my thing”表达不明确,应改为“my singing”;“I'm seeing”应为“I'm singing”;句子结构不完整,需补充“at it”使表达完整。
× Uh, that is a very big per question.
✓ Uh, that is a very big personal question.
“per question”用词错误,应为“personal question”,表示“个人问题”。
× Uh, first, I think some people like songs and like singing.
✓ Uh, first, I think some people like songs and like singing.
此句无明显语法错误,保持原句。
× It's a good way to sing, uh, bring happiness to people, but some people not like seeing.
✓ It's a good way to sing and bring happiness to people, but some people do not like singing.
“some people not like seeing”缺少助动词“do”,且“seeing”应为“singing”。
× So it's just not good for them. And I think it's, uh, exposed, OK.
✓ So it's just not good for them. And I think it's, uh, okay.
“exposed”用词错误,语境中应为“okay”,表示“还好”。