唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但句子较长且有重复，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: Yes, I really like singing because it helps me relieve stress and boost my confidence. Moreover, it allows me to connect better with my friends.

建议: 回答不够清晰，表达有些混乱，建议直接回答问题并解释原因，使用更准确的词汇和句子结构。

示例: No, I haven't learned how to sing formally because I believe singing is a natural talent that depends on the individual.

建议: 回答不够直接，句子结构混乱且有重复，建议直接回答问题并用简洁的句子表达原因，避免重复。

示例: I want to sing for myself because singing helps me comfort myself when I feel upset and boosts my confidence.

建议: 回答中有语法和用词错误，表达不够清晰，建议使用正确的词汇和句子结构，明确表达观点并举例说明。

示例: Yes, I think singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their feelings and enjoy their favorite songs, which helps them relax and forget their worries.

× Yes, I really like singing because it can help me release my worries and improve my confidence and it also can broaden my my relationship with my friends.

✓ Yes, I really like singing because it can help me release my worries and improve my confidence and it also can broaden my relationships with my friends.

这里的“relationship”应该用复数形式“relationships”，因为通常指的是与多个朋友的多种关系。

× To be honest, I haven't learned how to sing because I think it may be someone who's born with this active ability, so it depends on myself.

✓ To be honest, I haven't learned how to sing because I think it may be something you're born with, so it depends on myself.

这里“someone”用错了，应该用“something”表示“这项能力”，且“who's born”改为“you're born”更符合表达。

× To be honest, I haven't learned how to sing because I think it may be someone who's born with this active ability, so it depends on myself.

✓ To be honest, I haven't learned how to sing because I think it may be something you're born with, so it depends on me.

“depends on myself”用法错误，反身代词不能用在这里，应该用宾格“me”。

× From my perspective, I really want to think for myself because when when I was so upset, I can comfort myself with saying it can relieve my worries and boost my confidence.

✓ From my perspective, I really want to sing for myself because when I was so upset, I can comfort myself by saying it can relieve my worries and boost my confidence.

“want to think for myself”表达不正确，应该是“want to sing for myself”。

× From my perspective, I really want to think for myself because when when I was so upset, I can comfort myself with saying it can relieve my worries and boost my confidence.

✓ From my perspective, I really want to sing for myself because when I was so upset, I can comfort myself by saying it can relieve my worries and boost my confidence.

“comfort myself with saying”中介词用错，正确用法是“comfort myself by saying”。

× From my perspective, I really want to think for myself because when when I was so upset, I can comfort myself with saying it can relieve my worries and boost my confidence.

✓ From my perspective, I really want to sing for myself because when I am upset, I can comfort myself by saying it can relieve my worries and boost my confidence.

句中“when I was so upset”与后文“can comfort”时态不一致，改为“when I am upset”保持时态一致。

× Yes, actually I think it's a fantastic way to bring happiness because when many people are seeing, they are expressing themselves and they can do whatever they want, seeing their favorite songs, which can relieve their worries.

✓ Yes, actually I think it's a fantastic way to bring happiness because when many people are singing, they are expressing themselves and they can do whatever they want, singing their favorite songs, which can relieve their worries.

“are seeing”用错，应该是“are singing”，且后面“seeing their favorite songs”应改为“singing their favorite songs”。