唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 중복되는 표현을 피하며, 구체적인 이유를 들어 답변을 풍부하게 해야 합니다.

示例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Although I am not a professional singer, I enjoy participating in local music contests for fun.

建议: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 직접적으로 질문에 답하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하며, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어야 합니다.

示例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons because singing is just a hobby for me. However, I would like to improve my singing skills in the future.

建议: 답변이 다소 중복되고 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 간결하게 만들고, 구체적인 이유와 감정을 포함하여 자연스럽게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: I want to sing for my parents because they love music. Singing a love song for them would be a way to show my appreciation and affection.

建议: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 구체적인 예시를 들면서 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, musicals often create fantastic feelings and excitement, which can leave us feeling joyful for a long time.

× I like singing because the singing.

✓ I like singing because of singing.

The phrase 'because the singing' is incorrect; it should be 'because of singing' to properly express the reason. The preposition 'of' is necessary after 'because' when followed by a noun.

× When I song then I I become a singer as I like and supposedly all the musical contest, but actually I don't sing well.

✓ When I sing, I become a singer as I like and supposedly participate in all the musical contests, but actually I don't sing well.

The verb 'song' is a noun; the correct verb form is 'sing'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and missing prepositions and articles. 'Supposedly all the musical contest' should be 'supposedly participate in all the musical contests' to make sense.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is a British English past participle form; 'learned' is the American English form. Both are correct, but consistency is important. Since the rest of the text uses American English, 'learned' is preferred.

× So I don't think going to academic school for music, yeah, but I would like to run the music skills.

✓ So I don't think about going to an academic school for music, but I would like to improve my music skills.

The phrase 'going to academic school for music' is missing the article 'an' before 'academic school'. Also, 'run the music skills' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'improve my music skills'. The preposition 'about' is needed after 'think'.

× Umm I want to show them the love song for them.

✓ Umm I want to show them a love song.

The phrase 'show them the love song for them' is redundant and awkward. 'Show them a love song' is sufficient and grammatically correct. The preposition 'for' is unnecessary here.

× so it can gives us very happiness forever.

✓ so it can give us great happiness forever.

After modal verb 'can', the base form of the verb 'give' should be used, not 'gives'. Also, 'very happiness' is incorrect; 'great happiness' or 'a lot of happiness' is appropriate.