唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: No, I don't like singing very much. However, sometimes when I'm doing household chores like cooking or cleaning, I quietly sing songs to myself. I usually sing softly so that only I can hear. Occasionally, I also sing in the shower, but I don't sing otherwise.

建议: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. To improve, respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and improve vocabulary usage.

示例: Actually, no, I have never learned to sing because I am not interested in it. However, I enjoy watching singing reality shows on TV because I find it fascinating how people can sing so beautifully. Their voices are very soothing to listen to. I believe my voice is not suitable for singing.

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific details with linking words to make your response coherent and natural.

示例: If I ever get the chance, I would like to sing for my children. When they were younger, I used to sing for them occasionally. However, now I don't feel the need to sing often. But if my younger children ask me to sing, I would happily do so.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains awkward phrasing. To improve, express your ideas clearly with proper sentence structure and use linking words to connect your points logically. Provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

示例: Yes, definitely. Singing is a passion for many people, and it brings happiness to their soul. That's why some choose singing as a profession because it provides calmness to both the body and mind. Additionally, some people sing for others simply to make them feel joyful and happy.

× No I don't like singing much but sometimes when I'm doing some household chores like cooking or cleaning I just sing some song of my choice just this slowly so that only I can hear it.

✓ No, I don't like singing much, but sometimes when I'm doing some household chores like cooking or cleaning, I just sing some songs of my choice quietly so that only I can hear them.

The phrase 'just this slowly' is unclear and awkward; it should be replaced with 'quietly' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'some song' should be pluralized to 'some songs' to match the context. The sentence also needs commas for clarity.

× Actually I'm also bottom singer, I just sometimes in the songs when I'm taking shower but I don't think otherwise.

✓ Actually, I'm also a bad singer; I just sometimes sing in the shower, but I don't think otherwise.

The phrase 'bottom singer' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'bad singer'. Also, 'sometimes in the songs when I'm taking shower' is awkward and should be corrected to 'sometimes sing in the shower'. Commas and semicolons improve sentence clarity.

× On actually, no, I have never learned to sing because I don't have interest in singing.

✓ Actually, no, I have never learned to sing because I don't have an interest in singing.

The phrase 'On actually' is incorrect; it should be 'Actually'. Also, 'have never learned' is correct present perfect tense here. The phrase 'don't have interest' is missing the article 'an' before 'interest'.

× I just but I love to watch the singing shows, the TV reality shows do.

✓ I just don't, but I love to watch singing shows, the TV reality shows.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'don't' after 'just' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'the singing shows, the TV reality shows do' is awkward; simplifying to 'singing shows, the TV reality shows' improves clarity.

× They seem to be very interesting to me as how the people can sing so sweetly and it's it's so soothing for years.

✓ They seem very interesting to me because of how people can sing so sweetly, and it's so soothing for years.

The phrase 'as how the people' is incorrect; 'because of how people' is better. Also, 'it's it's' is a repetition error. The sentence structure is improved by splitting into two clauses with a comma.

× I think my voice is not for the single purpose, so.

✓ I think my voice is not suitable for singing, so.

The phrase 'not for the single purpose' is unclear and awkward. Replacing it with 'not suitable for singing' conveys the intended meaning more clearly.

× If I ever get a chance are unlike I would sing for my kids.

✓ If I ever get a chance, I would sing for my kids.

The phrase 'are unlike' is incorrect and unnecessary. Removing it and adding a comma after 'chance' corrects the sentence structure.

× Even I have some little bit for my kids when they were really small or younger but now these I don't feel a need to sing for them too.

✓ I even sang a little bit for my kids when they were really small or younger, but now I don't feel the need to sing for them anymore.

The phrase 'some little bit' is incorrect; 'a little bit' is correct. Also, the sentence structure is improved by clarifying the subject and verb and adding appropriate articles and adverbs.

× But if my my younger ones demand to sing for them, I would really sing for them.

✓ But if my younger ones ask me to sing for them, I would really sing for them.

The phrase 'demand to sing for them' is awkward; 'ask me to sing for them' is more natural. Also, the repeated 'my my' is a typo and should be corrected.

× Yes, definitely singing the passion for some people when this thing, it brings happiness to their soul.

✓ Yes, definitely singing is a passion for some people; when they do it, it brings happiness to their soul.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'is a' after 'singing' and restructuring the sentence with a semicolon improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× That's why some of the people choose singing as the profession as it becomes so 'cause it becomes that brings calmness to their soul and body.

✓ That's why some people choose singing as a profession because it brings calmness to their soul and body.

The phrase 'as the profession as it becomes so 'cause it becomes that brings' is incorrect and redundant. Simplifying to 'as a profession because it brings' corrects the sentence.

× Uh, some people sing for others only because they want to see them joyful and happy.

✓ Some people sing for others only because they want to see them joyful and happy.

The interjection 'Uh' is unnecessary in formal speech and can be omitted for clarity.