唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add a reason. Use simple and correct sentence structures. Avoid unclear phrases like 'I don't think I can see.'

示例: No, I don't like singing because I have never been good at it since childhood. However, I enjoy listening to music a lot because it relaxes me.

建议: Answer directly and use complete sentences. Avoid incomplete or unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: No, I have never learnt how to sing. When I was a child, I did not join any singing groups or choirs. Instead, I participated in dancing and drama teams.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Avoid confusing or redundant phrases like 'they cannot stop keep singing, telling ugly or anything.'

示例: If I ever sing, I would like to sing lullabies for my children because they enjoy soothing songs. I might also sing for my pets since they cannot understand words and will not judge my singing.

建议: Start with a clear opinion and explain it with specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary and avoid unclear phrases like 'you can sort others.'

示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions. When someone sings well, it can cheer up listeners and create a joyful atmosphere.

× Will know from my childhood I never try to sing.

✓ I have known since my childhood that I never tried to sing.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Will know' and 'try' in present tense when referring to a past experience. The correct past perfect tense 'have known' and past tense 'tried' should be used to indicate an action that started in the past and continues or is relevant now.

× Oh I never feel good when I say so.

✓ Oh, I never feel good when I say that.

The sentence is mostly correct but missing a comma after 'Oh' and the phrase 'say so' is awkward. Replacing 'say so' with 'say that' improves clarity and correctness.

× I am very much into listening music.

✓ I am very much into listening to music.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Omitting 'to' is a common error.

× But I don't think I can see. In a better way.

✓ But I don't think I can see it in a better way.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'it' and combining the two parts into one sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Not at all. Even when I am a little kid, I was not join with the.

✓ Not at all. Even when I was a little kid, I did not join the...

The sentence incorrectly uses 'am' instead of 'was' for past tense and 'was not join' instead of 'did not join'. The auxiliary 'did' is needed for negation in past tense.

× Single teams or choirs? I just went to dancing teams and the drama.

✓ I did not join single teams or choirs. I just went to dancing teams and drama.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining the question and answer into a clear statement improves sentence structure.

× So no, I was not learning music at.

✓ So no, I was not learning music then.

The phrase 'at' is incomplete and incorrect here. 'Then' is the correct adverb to indicate past time.

× Well, if I think one day I will sing for my kids, obviously lullabys because they cannot judge, and maybe to my pets because they cannot speak or they cannot stop keep singing, telling ugly or anything.

✓ Well, if I think about it, one day I will sing for my kids, obviously lullabies because they cannot judge, and maybe to my pets because they cannot speak or stop me from singing, telling me it's ugly or anything.

The sentence has multiple issues: missing preposition 'about' after 'think', incorrect spelling 'lullabys' should be 'lullabies', awkward phrasing 'cannot stop keep singing' corrected to 'cannot stop me from singing', and unclear phrase 'telling ugly or anything' clarified to 'telling me it's ugly or anything'.

× Well, yeah. Today.

✓ Well, yeah, today.

The original is a fragment. Adding a comma connects the ideas properly.

× Bell yes, singing is one way to express your feelings towards the others.

✓ Well yes, singing is one way to express your feelings towards others.

'Bell' is a typo for 'Well'. Also, 'the others' is incorrect here; 'others' without 'the' is appropriate.

× So if you can sing A at a nice way, you can sort others and it will bring happiness to the listeners.

✓ So if you can sing in a nice way, you can soothe others and it will bring happiness to the listeners.

The phrase 'sing A at a nice way' is incorrect. It should be 'sing in a nice way'. Also, 'sort others' is likely a typo for 'soothe others'.

× So yes, I feel in that way.

✓ So yes, I feel that way.

The phrase 'feel in that way' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'feel that way'.