唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors and awkward phrases. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific reasons using simple and correct English. Avoid redundancy and irrelevant details.

示例: No, I don't like singing because I am not confident about my voice. Even though I have tried to improve it, I haven't succeeded. Therefore, I prefer to focus on other hobbies that suit me better.

建议: Your answer needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. Start with a direct response, then explain your experience with specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I have learned to sing by watching YouTube videos and attending lessons at a local institute. However, I found it difficult to improve and eventually lost motivation. Now, I focus on other hobbies that I enjoy more.

建议: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains unclear phrases. Provide a clear topic sentence answering the question, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: If I had the chance to sing for someone, I would choose my parents because they have sacrificed a lot for me. Singing for them would be a way to show my appreciation and gratitude for everything they have done.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but is difficult to understand due to grammar and word choice errors. Use clear sentences with correct grammar and provide specific examples with linking words to support your opinion.

示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, my sister sings whenever she feels stressed or sad. Even if her voice is not perfect, singing helps her feel better and more relaxed.

× No, I didn't like her singing because my voice is not so pleased and whenever I try to sink sits make into my sister become eleted.

✓ No, I don't like singing because my voice is not so pleasant and whenever I try to sing, it makes my sister become elated.

The sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'didn't like' when the question is about a general preference, so present tense 'don't like' is appropriate. Also, 'sink sits make into my sister become eleted' is unclear and grammatically incorrect; it should be 'whenever I try to sing, it makes my sister become elated.' 'Pleased' is an adjective describing feelings, but 'pleasant' better describes the quality of the voice.

× Well, I also do a hard work to make my voice become becomes rate, but I didn't get desires.

✓ Well, I also work hard to improve my voice, but I didn't get the desired results.

'Do a hard work' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'work hard.' 'Become becomes rate' is nonsensical; it should be 'improve my voice.' 'Didn't get desires' is incorrect; it should be 'didn't get the desired results.' The verb form and word choice need correction for clarity and grammar.

× Also, it's not my cup of tea, so now I'll just focus on some other activities.

✓ Also, it's not my cup of tea, so now I'll just focus on some other activities.

This sentence is grammatically correct and uses modal verb 'will' appropriately to express future intention.

× Yeah, of course I have learned very often from our you tubes or institute where they are providing teaching lesson towards it.

✓ Yeah, of course I have learned very often from YouTube or institutes where they provide lessons on it.

'You tubes' should be 'YouTube' (proper noun). 'Institute' should be plural 'institutes' if referring generally. 'Are providing teaching lesson towards it' is awkward; 'provide lessons on it' is better. Present perfect 'have learned' is appropriate here.

× But I become failed now.

✓ But I have failed now.

'Become failed' is incorrect; the correct form is 'have failed' to indicate present perfect tense showing a recent failure.

× I lost my hope towards it for some purpose.

✓ I have lost my hope in it for some reason.

'Lost' is simple past; present perfect 'have lost' fits better with 'now' context. 'Hope towards it' is incorrect; 'hope in it' is correct. 'For some purpose' is awkward; 'for some reason' is better.

× I do our focus on other hobbies.

✓ I am focusing on other hobbies.

'I do our focus' is incorrect; the correct present continuous form is 'I am focusing.' Also, 'our' is incorrect pronoun here.

× Well, well, in my life, if I get a chance to choose someone for whom I want to, I think I will given up reference to my parents because they have lowest average because they have sacrificed everything for their children.

✓ Well, in my life, if I get a chance to choose someone to sing for, I think I will give preference to my parents because they have the lowest average and have sacrificed everything for their children.

'Will given up' is incorrect; it should be 'will give.' 'Given up reference to' is incorrect phrase; 'give preference to' is correct. 'Lowest average' is unclear but kept as is; 'have sacrificed' is correct present perfect.

× So it was our responsibility to given a preference whenever do anything in their life.

✓ So it is our responsibility to give preference whenever we do anything in their life.

'Was' should be 'is' to express general truth. 'Given' should be 'give' (infinitive). 'Whenever do anything' needs subject 'we'.

× It is a way to show our appreciation and gratitude for everything.

✓ It is a way to show our appreciation and gratitude for everything.

This sentence is grammatically correct.

× Yes, of course I felt that singing bring her happiness in people's lives.

✓ Yes, of course I feel that singing brings happiness to people's lives.

'Felt' is past tense; present tense 'feel' fits better. 'Bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'singing.' 'Her happiness' is incorrect; 'happiness' alone is correct.

× Whenever they feel aboard or stressful after singing a song, they feel very happy.

✓ Whenever they feel bored or stressed, after singing a song, they feel very happy.

'Aboard' is incorrect; should be 'bored.' 'Stressful' is adjective describing something causing stress; 'stressed' is correct to describe feeling.

× Just I can take an example of my sister, whenever they feel an excuse they prefer to singing a song, don't care about their voice, it will make it will have to change their Mozan make they're happy, make them happy.

✓ I can give an example of my sister: whenever she feels upset, she prefers to sing a song and doesn't care about her voice; it changes her mood and makes her happy.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Just I can take an example' should be 'I can give an example.' 'They' should be 'she' to refer to sister. 'Feel an excuse' is incorrect; likely meant 'feel upset.' 'Prefer to singing' should be 'prefer to sing.' The rest is corrected for clarity and grammar.