唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more coherent and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. I often sing along to my favourite songs, especially when the lyrics are meaningful and fascinating.

建议: Provide a clear and complete response with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your knowledge and interest.

示例: I haven't learned to sing professionally, but I am familiar with a few different singing styles. I am eager to learn more about how these styles work and improve my skills.

建议: Make your answer clearer and more structured. Start with a direct answer, then explain with specific details. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

示例: I would like to sing for my girlfriend because she enjoys love songs and traditional songs from my country. I hope to learn to sing these songs professionally to impress her.

建议: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your points logically and provide specific reasons.

示例: Yes, absolutely. Singing can bring happiness because it helps people forget their stress and daily tasks for a while. It boosts their mood and makes them feel joyful.

× I often saying becauses it makes me.

✓ I often sing because it makes me.

The verb 'saying' is incorrectly used here; the correct form is the base verb 'sing' to match the present simple tense. 'Often' requires the base verb form, not the '-ing' form.

× singing along with the listening and sometimes the lyrics are very fascinating to sing.

✓ singing along with the music and sometimes the lyrics are very fascinating to sing.

The phrase 'singing along with the listening' is incorrect; 'listening' is a verb form, not a noun here. The correct noun is 'music' to indicate what is being listened to and sung along with.

× Professionally, I haven't learned how to sing, but.

✓ Professionally, I haven't learned how to sing, but...

The sentence ends abruptly with a conjunction 'but' and a period; it should be followed by additional information or an ellipsis to indicate continuation.

× I know few. Types of singing and I'm really eager to explore more about how different types of singing works.

✓ I know a few types of singing and I'm really eager to explore more about how different types of singing work.

The phrase 'I know few. Types' is fragmented and incorrect; 'a few types' is the correct quantifier. Also, 'types of singing works' should be 'types of singing work' because 'types' is plural and requires a plural verb.

× If I want to sing for I will sing for my girlfriend.

✓ If I want to sing for someone, I will sing for my girlfriend.

The sentence is missing an object after 'sing for'; adding 'someone' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× She really likes the love song Anne.

✓ She really likes love songs.

'The love song Anne' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; 'love songs' is the correct plural noun to express the idea generally.

× And other other national songs that that these bins sang in my country and I would really like to learn professionally to sing that kind of song for my girlfriend.

✓ And other national songs that these bands sang in my country, and I would really like to learn professionally to sing that kind of song for my girlfriend.

Repeated words 'other other' and 'that that' are errors. 'Bins' is likely a typo for 'bands'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Yes absolutely, singing can bring joy and happiness to people becaused they feel like disconnected from whatever whatever task or whatever stress they are having for awhile and it gives them a boost in their mood and it makes them happy.

✓ Yes, absolutely, singing can bring joy and happiness to people because they feel disconnected from whatever task or stress they are experiencing for a while, and it gives them a boost in their mood and makes them happy.

'Becaused' is a typo for 'because'. 'Feel like disconnected' should be 'feel disconnected'. 'Having for awhile' is incorrect; 'experiencing for a while' is better. Also, repeated words 'whatever whatever' are removed for clarity.