巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Apni answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar sentence structure aro natural korte hobe. Apni direct question er uttor diye, tarpor kichu supporting details dite paren. Linking words use korle answer ta aro fluent hobe.

示例: Yes, I love eating chocolate, but now that I am older, I don't eat it often. However, when I was a child, I used to eat chocolate every day because I enjoyed its sweet taste.

建议: Apnar uttor e kichu grammar mistake ache, ar sentence gulo aro clear korte hobe. Apni direct question er uttor dite paren, tarpor supporting details diye answer ta boro korte paren. Linking words use korle bhalo hobe.

示例: I don't eat chocolate often nowadays, but sometimes I buy chocolate for my daughter. When she eats it, she offers me some, and I really enjoy sharing chocolate with her.

建议: Apnar uttor e kichu grammar error ache, ar sentence gulo aro natural korte hobe. Apni direct question er uttor diye, supporting details add korben. Linking words use korle answer ta fluent hobe.

示例: Yes, when I was a kid, I used to eat chocolate every day. I loved eating it both at home and at school because it was my favorite treat.

建议: Apnar uttor e kichu confusion ache ar sentence gulo incomplete. Apni clear vabe opinion dite paren, supporting details diye. Linking words use korle answer ta logical hobe.

示例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it contains delicious ingredients like peanuts and cocoa. Therefore, children all over the world love chocolate for its sweet and rich taste.

建议: Apnar uttor e filler words beshi ache, ar kichu grammar mistake ache. Apni direct vabe uttor din, supporting details add korben. Linking words use korle answer ta bhalo hobe.

示例: My favorite flavor is crunchy chocolate, such as Kit Kat. Sometimes, I also enjoy eating dark chocolate because of its rich taste.

建议: Apnar uttor e filler words beshi ache, ar sentence gulo incomplete. Apni direct uttor din, supporting details diye answer ta boro korun. Linking words use korle answer ta fluent hobe.

示例: I think giving chocolate as a gift is a good idea, especially for children. For occasions like birthdays or anniversaries, chocolate is a popular and appreciated present worldwide.

× Yes I love to eat chocolate but as a older I don't eat chocolate nowadays but when I was a child I used to umm take or eat chocolate in every day.

✓ Yes, I love to eat chocolate but as an older person I don't eat chocolate nowadays, but when I was a child I used to eat chocolate every day.

The phrase 'as a older' is incorrect because 'older' starts with a vowel sound and needs the article 'an' instead of 'a'. Also, 'in every day' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'every day' without 'in'. The verb 'take or eat' is redundant; 'eat' alone is sufficient here.

× Yes I love to eat chocolate but as a older I don't eat chocolate nowadays but when I was a child I used to umm take or eat chocolate in every day.

✓ Yes, I love to eat chocolate but as an older person I don't eat chocolate nowadays, but when I was a child I used to eat chocolate every day.

The phrase 'used to umm take or eat chocolate in every day' should be corrected to 'used to eat chocolate every day' to properly express habitual past action. 'Used to' requires the base form of the verb, and 'every day' is the correct adverbial phrase.

× Nowadays I I brought chocolate for my daughter.

✓ Nowadays I buy chocolate for my daughter.

The word 'brought' is past tense and does not fit with 'Nowadays' which indicates present habitual action. Also, 'brought' is the past tense of 'bring', but the correct verb for habitual action is 'buy'.

× Sometimes when my daughter eats chocolate, she offer me to take some parts from his chocolate and I really enjoy to take some chocolate from her.

✓ Sometimes when my daughter eats chocolate, she offers me some of her chocolate and I really enjoy taking some chocolate from her.

The pronoun 'his' is incorrect because it refers to a male, but the subject is 'my daughter' (female). It should be 'her chocolate'. Also, 'she offer me to take some parts' is incorrect; the correct form is 'she offers me some of her chocolate'. The verb 'enjoy to take' should be 'enjoy taking'.

× Yes, when I was kid it is. It was my habit to take chocolate every day.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, it was my habit to eat chocolate every day.

The phrase 'when I was kid it is' is incorrect. It should be 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'take chocolate' is better expressed as 'eat chocolate' in this context.

× I I loved to eat chocolate in my home as well as my school.

✓ I loved to eat chocolate at my home as well as at my school.

The preposition 'in' is not appropriate for 'home' and 'school' in this context. The correct preposition is 'at' to indicate location.

× I think chocolate has a very. Fruitful ingredient like peanuts and chocolate.

✓ I think chocolate has very good ingredients like peanuts and cocoa.

The word 'fruitful' is incorrectly used here; 'fruitful' means productive or beneficial, not suitable to describe ingredients. Also, 'a very. Fruitful ingredient' is fragmented and incorrect. 'Very good ingredients' is more appropriate. Additionally, 'chocolate' is repeated as an ingredient which is redundant; 'cocoa' or 'chocolate' is the main ingredient.

× So all over the world child loves chocolate.

✓ So all over the world, children love chocolate.

The singular noun 'child' is incorrect here because the meaning is general and plural. The correct plural form is 'children'. Also, the verb should agree with the plural subject: 'love' instead of 'loves'.

× Sometimes I uh, loves, love to eat a black chocolate or dark chocolate.

✓ Sometimes I love to eat black chocolate or dark chocolate.

The verb 'loves' is incorrect with the first person singular subject 'I'. The correct form is 'love'. Also, 'a black chocolate' is incorrect; 'black chocolate' or 'dark chocolate' is uncountable and does not need an article.

× I think it is a good thing to eat chocolate as a gift to others, especially, uh, kids.

✓ I think it is a good thing to give chocolate as a gift to others, especially kids.

The phrase 'to eat chocolate as a gift' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'to give chocolate as a gift'. The preposition 'to' is correct after 'gift'.