巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly to connect ideas. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

示例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it helps me feel relaxed and freshens my mind. During mood swings, chocolate soothes me. My favourite is Bourbon chocolate. Also, my father gives me chocolate when I am upset with him.

建议: Focus on clarity and avoid contradictory statements. Use linking words like 'but' and 'because' correctly. Keep sentences grammatically correct and avoid unnecessary repetition.

示例: I usually eat chocolate once during the weekend because eating too much can cause health problems like diabetes. However, I really enjoy the taste of chocolates.

建议: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and be specific in your explanation.

示例: Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate when I was a kid, which affected my health negatively. However, eating chocolate in small amounts can be beneficial.

建议: Use clearer sentence structures and correct linking words. Avoid redundancy and ensure your answer flows logically with appropriate connectors like 'because' and 'and'.

示例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet and delicious flavour. Also, it is affordable and available in various sizes, making it accessible to everyone.

建议: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

示例: I like many chocolate flavours, but my favourites are Cadbury and Silk because they are very sweet. Eating them boosts my mood, especially when I feel sad.

建议: Improve sentence structure and avoid awkward phrases. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' to add supporting details. Keep your answer clear and concise.

示例: Yes, chocolates make great gifts. For example, I recently bought a Dairy Milk chocolate for my little sister's birthday. She was very happy and appreciated the gift a lot.

× Yes, I do love eating chocolates because chocolates makes my mind fresh and relaxing and during my mood swings chocolate helps me to relax whereas I love to eat uh bourbon chocolate which is my favorite.

✓ Yes, I do love eating chocolate because chocolate makes my mind fresh and relaxed and during my mood swings chocolate helps me to relax whereas I love to eat uh bourbon chocolate which is my favorite.

The word 'chocolates' is plural but here it is used to refer to chocolate in general, which is uncountable, so 'chocolate' (singular) is correct. Also, 'chocolates makes' is incorrect because 'chocolates' is plural and should be followed by 'make'. However, since 'chocolate' is uncountable, 'makes' is correct. The phrase 'fresh and relaxing' should be 'fresh and relaxed' to describe the state of the mind. Use singular 'chocolate' to refer to the substance in general.

× Yes, I do love eating chocolates because chocolates makes my mind fresh and relaxing and during my mood swings chocolate helps me to relax whereas I love to eat uh bourbon chocolate which is my favorite.

✓ Yes, I do love eating chocolate because chocolate makes my mind fresh and relaxed and during my mood swings chocolate helps me to relax whereas I love to eat uh bourbon chocolate which is my favorite.

The verb 'makes' agrees with singular 'chocolate'. Using 'makes' with plural 'chocolates' is incorrect. Since 'chocolate' is uncountable here, 'makes' is the correct verb form.

× I often eat chocolate during my weekends because eating chocolates can lead to various disease or disease like diabetes whereas I eat chocolate on my weekend only once.

✓ I often eat chocolate during my weekends because eating chocolate can lead to various diseases or disease like diabetes whereas I eat chocolate on my weekend only once.

The word 'chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as it refers to the substance in general. Also, 'disease' should be plural 'diseases' when referring to various illnesses.

× But I love to eat chocolates which is my great delicious.

✓ But I love to eat chocolate which is very delicious.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as it refers to the substance generally. The phrase 'my great delicious' is incorrect; it should be 'very delicious' to describe the chocolate properly.

× Yes, I eat chocolate when I were a kid because during every during my childhood I always eat too much chocolate which ruin my **** and it is possible that eating chocolate in a small quantity will helpful to boost your.

✓ Yes, I ate chocolate when I was a kid because during my childhood I always ate too much chocolate which ruined my teeth and it is possible that eating chocolate in small quantities will help to boost your health.

The past tense of 'eat' is 'ate' and 'were' should be 'was' for singular subject 'I'. 'Ruin' should be 'ruined' to match past tense. 'Will helpful' is incorrect; it should be 'will help'. Also, 'small quantity' should be plural 'small quantities' for general meaning.

× Yes, I eat chocolate when I were a kid because during every during my childhood I always eat too much chocolate which ruin my **** and it is possible that eating chocolate in a small quantity will helpful to boost your.

✓ Yes, I ate chocolate when I was a kid because during my childhood I always ate too much chocolate which ruined my teeth and it is possible that eating chocolate in small quantities will help to boost your health.

The phrase 'during every during my childhood' is incorrect; it should be 'during my childhood'. Also, 'in a small quantity' is better expressed as 'in small quantities' for general advice.

× According to my perspective, chocolates are more popular around the world because due to the sweetness and delicious flavour of chocolate make everyone fond of it.

✓ According to my perspective, chocolate is more popular around the world because the sweetness and delicious flavour of chocolate make everyone fond of it.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as it refers to the substance generally. 'Chocolate' is singular, so the verb 'make' should be 'makes' or the subject should be plural. Here, 'sweetness and delicious flavour' is plural, so 'make' is correct.

× According to my perspective, chocolates are more popular around the world because due to the sweetness and delicious flavour of chocolate make everyone fond of it.

✓ According to my perspective, chocolate is more popular around the world because of the sweetness and delicious flavour of chocolate that make everyone fond of it.

The phrase 'because due to' is redundant; use 'because of' or 'due to'. Also, 'that make' is needed to connect the clause properly.

× Whereas chocolates are much affordable and ranges from small amount to big amount.

✓ Whereas chocolate is much more affordable and ranges from small amounts to big amounts.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable noun. 'Ranges' agrees with singular 'chocolate'. 'Amount' should be plural 'amounts' when referring to varying quantities.

× There are various flavors of chocolate that I'd like, but the most favorable chocolate of mine is Cadbury chocolate and Silk chocolate because the sweetness of these chocolates are very much good, whereas it boosts my mood and changes my mood when I am sad.

✓ There are various flavors of chocolate that I'd like, but my most favorite chocolates are Cadbury chocolate and Silk chocolate because the sweetness of these chocolates is very good, and it boosts my mood and changes my mood when I am sad.

'Most favorable chocolate of mine' is awkward; 'my most favorite chocolates' is better. 'Sweetness of these chocolates are' should be 'is' because 'sweetness' is singular. 'Very much good' is incorrect; use 'very good'.

× Yes, absolutely. Chocolates are used as a gift to other.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Chocolates are used as gifts for others.

'Gift to other' is incorrect; it should be 'gifts for others' to indicate giving to multiple people.

× Whereas I recently bought a Dairy Milk chocolate for my little sister on her birthday.

✓ I recently bought a Dairy Milk chocolate for my little sister on her birthday.

The word 'Whereas' is incorrectly used at the beginning of the sentence; it should be removed for correct past tense statement.

× She was really elated and hugged me with a great great sense of willingness and she loves me a lot by giving her.

✓ She was really elated and hugged me with a great sense of happiness and she loves me a lot for giving it to her.

'Sense of willingness' is incorrect; 'sense of happiness' or 'joy' is better. 'She loves me a lot by giving her' is incorrect; it should be 'for giving it to her' referring to the chocolate.