巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is quite long and a bit confusing due to redundancy and unclear phrasing. Try to give a clear and concise response directly addressing the question, followed by a brief reason. Avoid repeating words and unclear expressions.

示例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and makes me feel happy. When I was a child, I often asked my mother to buy chocolate for me because I really enjoyed it.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly how often you eat chocolate now, and explain briefly why, using clear and simple sentences with correct grammar.

示例: I used to eat chocolate every day when I was a child, but now I eat it only occasionally because I want to take care of my teeth and stay healthy.

建议: Your answer is relevant but has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer clearer and more natural.

示例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I liked its sweet taste. I used to ask my mom for chocolate before going to school, and sometimes I bought some to share with my friends.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but is repetitive and contains unclear expressions. Use linking words to organize your ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, use correct idioms and expressions.

示例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and delicious. Moreover, its colorful appearance attracts many people, especially children, making it enjoyable to eat.

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains filler words and unclear vocabulary like 'diligent'. Try to avoid fillers and use precise vocabulary. Also, organize your answer with linking words for clarity.

示例: I like many chocolate flavors, but my favorite is strawberry because it has a creamy texture and a sweet taste. I usually enjoy eating it when I want to relax.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors and confusing phrases. Try to express your opinion clearly with simple sentences and provide reasons. Avoid incorrect or unclear vocabulary.

示例: I think chocolate can be a good gift because many people like it. However, some may prefer other types of gifts depending on the occasion.

× When I was a kid I was like refusing mom to buy me a chocolate for me, but she refused me to not to buy the chocolate and I was like crying, crying and she just gave me the chocolate.

✓ When I was a kid, I kept refusing mom to buy me chocolate, but she refused not to buy the chocolate and I kept crying, and she just gave me the chocolate.

The phrase 'was like refusing' is incorrect; 'was like' is informal and not appropriate here. The verb 'refusing' should be used in a continuous or habitual sense, so 'kept refusing' fits better. Also, 'refused me to not to buy' is incorrect; it should be 'refused not to buy'. The repetition 'crying, crying' is informal and can be simplified to 'kept crying' to indicate continuous action.

× When I was a kid I was like refusing mom to buy me a chocolate for me, but she refused me to not to buy the chocolate and I was like crying, crying and she just gave me the chocolate.

✓ When I was a kid, I kept refusing mom to buy me chocolate, but she refused not to buy the chocolate and I kept crying, and she just gave me the chocolate.

The use of 'a chocolate' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun here. It should be used without the article 'a' unless referring to a specific chocolate item like 'a chocolate bar'.

× So when I was a kid, I used to eat it daily, but now being an early, early age, the teeth we have to look out for of our health.

✓ So when I was a kid, I used to eat it daily, but now at an early age, we have to look out for our teeth and health.

The phrase 'now being an early, early age' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'now at an early age'. Also, 'the teeth we have to look out for of our health' is incorrect; it should be 'we have to look out for our teeth and health' to correctly express concern for health.

× So that's why I used to eat the chocolate a little bit more for my health continuance.

✓ So that's why I eat chocolate a little less for my health now.

The phrase 'used to eat the chocolate a little bit more' conflicts with the current context. Since the speaker is talking about present habits, present tense 'eat' is appropriate. Also, 'health continuance' is incorrect; 'for my health' suffices. The meaning suggests eating less chocolate now for health reasons.

× Yes, I used to eat the daily because I don't know it's a very sweet in taste and I like that chocolate.

✓ Yes, I used to eat it daily because I don't know, it's very sweet in taste and I like that chocolate.

The phrase 'eat the daily' is incorrect; 'the' is unnecessary and 'daily' should be an adverb modifying 'eat'. Also, 'it's a very sweet' is incorrect; 'sweet' is an adjective and does not need 'a' before it.

× Whenever I go to the school I ask mom for the chocolate and I buy some chocolate and I love to give to my friends also.

✓ Whenever I go to school, I ask mom for chocolate, buy some, and I love to give it to my friends as well.

The phrase 'go to the school' is incorrect; 'go to school' is the correct expression when referring to attending school. Also, 'give to my friends also' should be 'give it to my friends as well' for clarity and correctness.

× In my point of view, I think chocolate is very popular around the world because many kids because it is sweet in taste and people feel really enjoy while eating chocolate and it is a flavorful and colorful.

✓ In my point of view, I think chocolate is very popular around the world because many kids like it since it is sweet in taste, and people really enjoy eating chocolate because it is flavorful and colorful.

The original sentence is run-on and lacks proper conjunctions. 'Because many kids because' is repetitive and incorrect. The sentence needs to be broken down and connected properly to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× I think it's apples to eye and it is interesting to eat the chocolate.

✓ I think it's pleasing to the eye and it is interesting to eat chocolate.

The phrase 'apples to eye' is incorrect and likely a mishearing of 'apple to the eye' or 'pleasing to the eye'. The correct idiom is 'pleasing to the eye'. Also, 'the chocolate' should be 'chocolate' unless referring to specific chocolate.

× Well, there's a lot of flavor which I'd love to eat, but one of my favorite flavors is a strawberry flavor.

✓ Well, there are a lot of flavors which I'd love to eat, but one of my favorite flavors is strawberry flavor.

'There's' is singular and should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'flavors'. Also, 'a strawberry flavor' is better as 'strawberry flavor' without the article when used as a general flavor.

× Umm, because umm, it is like creamy in texture and I would love to eat that chocolate flavor. Uh, it is very sweet in taste and it is very diligent.

✓ Umm, because it is creamy in texture and I would love to eat that chocolate flavor. Uh, it is very sweet in taste and it is very delightful.

The word 'diligent' is incorrectly used; 'diligent' describes a person who works hard, not a taste or texture. The correct adjective here is 'delightful' to describe something pleasant.

× While there are many gifts which we can gift up to the peoples but I think it is not good to give a chocolate as a gift to other because chocolate doesn't symbolize as a sharing like gift type.

✓ While there are many gifts which we can give to people, I think it is not good to give chocolate as a gift to others because chocolate doesn't symbolize sharing like a gift.

The phrase 'gift up to the peoples' is incorrect; 'give to people' is correct. 'To other' should be 'to others'. Also, 'symbolize as' is incorrect; 'symbolize' does not require 'as'.

× Chocolate is only we can use for the lactations and for our higher peeling.

✓ Chocolate is only something we can use for celebrations and for our enjoyment.

The phrase 'Chocolate is only we can use' is incorrect; it should be 'Chocolate is only something we can use'. 'Lactations' and 'higher peeling' are incorrect words likely intended to be 'celebrations' and 'enjoyment' or similar.