巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'hit my taste'. Also, provide clear reasons with linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and makes me feel happy. Moreover, I have heard that chocolate has some benefits for the skin, which makes it even more appealing to me.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by using better linking words and avoiding repetition. Also, try to be more concise and natural in your response.

示例: I don't eat chocolate every day, but I usually have it when I go out with my friends or when I go shopping with my mother. I enjoy treating myself to chocolate on these occasions.

建议: Focus on making your sentences clear and grammatically correct. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, try to limit your answer to 4-5 sentences.

示例: Yes, I loved eating chocolate when I was a kid. On my birthdays, my father usually gave me chocolate as a gift. I was quite stubborn back then and often persuaded my parents to buy chocolate for me.

建议: Try to avoid unclear phrases and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why chocolate is popular globally.

示例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes great and many people enjoy it. Additionally, some studies suggest that chocolate has health benefits, such as improving mood and providing antioxidants.

建议: Make your answer more natural by using correct expressions and avoiding awkward phrases like 'hit my taste'. Also, provide clear reasons for your preference.

示例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is Cadbury Dairy Milk because it is very popular in India and its creamy taste satisfies my cravings perfectly.

建议: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and clearer expressions. Avoid vague statements and provide specific reasons with linking words.

示例: Definitely, chocolate makes a good gift because many people enjoy it. For example, girls often like receiving chocolates, and even children are usually excited to get them as presents.

× Yes, I like eating chocolate because it hit my taste.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because it hits my taste.

The verb 'hit' should be in the third person singular present tense 'hits' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue where the verb must match the subject in number and person.

× I believe that chocolate are the first thing which enhance the beauty of a person and having several skin benefits.

✓ I believe that chocolate is the first thing which enhances the beauty of a person and has several skin benefits.

The noun 'chocolate' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, 'enhance' should be 'enhances' to agree with the singular subject, and 'having' should be changed to 'has' to correctly express possession.

× Not daily, but often whenever I have an outing with my friend.

✓ Not daily, but often whenever I have an outing with my friends.

The plural form 'friends' is more appropriate here because outings usually involve more than one friend, and it sounds more natural in English.

× I usually purchase a chocolate at that time because as I mentioned earlier, I love chocolates.

✓ I usually purchase chocolate at that time because, as I mentioned earlier, I love chocolates.

The article 'a' before 'chocolate' is unnecessary when referring to chocolate in general. Also, a comma is needed after 'because' to separate clauses properly.

× Yes, when I was kid I really loved the chocolate and nowadays too when was my birthday my father gave me a chocolate usually and when I was kid I used I was really stubborn so I was making and pursuing my parents to purchase a chocolate for me.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I really loved chocolate and even nowadays, when it is my birthday, my father usually gives me chocolate. When I was a kid, I was really stubborn, so I used to make and persuade my parents to purchase chocolate for me.

Several corrections: 'was kid' should be 'was a kid' (article usage), 'the chocolate' changed to 'chocolate' (general reference), sentence split for clarity, 'gave me a chocolate usually' changed to 'usually gives me chocolate' (word order and tense), 'used I was really stubborn' corrected to 'I was really stubborn', and 'making and pursuing' corrected to 'make and persuade' for correct verb usage and meaning.

× Well, according to me, I think 4 chocolates are popular around the world because it is having a good taste.

✓ Well, according to me, I think chocolate is popular around the world because it has a good taste.

When referring to chocolate in general, the singular uncountable noun 'chocolate' is used instead of '4 chocolates'. Also, 'it is having' is incorrect; 'it has' is the correct present tense form.

× Apart from this, it also contains several health benefits like enhance the skill and also shape the mind of a person and stay away from our diseases.

✓ Apart from this, it also contains several health benefits like enhancing the skin, shaping the mind of a person, and helping to stay away from diseases.

The verbs after 'like' should be in the '-ing' form to indicate examples. 'Enhance the skill' corrected to 'enhancing the skin' (assuming 'skin' was intended), and 'stay away from our diseases' changed to 'helping to stay away from diseases' for clarity and correctness.

× Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate is Calibrate Dairy Milk because it is the very renowned chocolate in India and also it hit my taste and satisfy my cravings.

✓ Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate is Cadbury Dairy Milk because it is a very renowned chocolate in India and it also hits my taste and satisfies my cravings.

Corrected brand name to 'Cadbury'. 'The very renowned' changed to 'a very renowned' for correct article usage. Verbs 'hit' and 'satisfy' changed to 'hits' and 'satisfies' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× Definitely it is very good whenever we choose a chocolate as a gift.

✓ Definitely, it is very good to choose chocolate as a gift.

The phrase 'whenever we choose a chocolate as a gift' is awkward. Using 'to choose chocolate as a gift' is more natural. Also, 'a chocolate' is unnecessary when speaking generally.

× It also depends on the personalities like girls usually love chocolates apart from these small kid that are usually alert towards the chocolates.

✓ It also depends on personalities; for example, girls usually love chocolates, apart from small kids who are usually alert towards chocolates.

'Personalities' should be without 'the'. 'These small kid' corrected to 'small kids' for plural agreement. 'That' changed to 'who' when referring to people. Sentence restructured for clarity.