巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中存在语法错误和重复用词，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并注意时态和冠词的使用。

示例: Yes, I like eating chocolate, especially when I was in Japan because they have many delicious kinds. Eating chocolate always makes me feel happy because its sweetness brings joy.

建议: 回答中有语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议使用更准确的句型，注意冠词和动词形式，同时使句子更简洁。

示例: I eat chocolate about once a week because it can be expensive and eating too much is bad for my skin and teeth.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和口语填充词，表达不够清晰。建议去除多余词汇，使用正确的时态和表达方式。

示例: Yes, I did. When I was in primary school, I often secretly bought chocolate after school, but my mom punished me because it damaged my teeth.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不连贯。建议简化句子，使用连接词使表达更流畅，并准确表达观点。

示例: I think chocolate is popular because it tastes sweet, which makes people happy. Also, it is famous as a gift on Valentine's Day.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够自然。建议简化句子，避免重复，并正确使用比较级。

示例: My favourite flavour is white chocolate because it is sweeter than dark chocolate and suits my taste better.

建议: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构复杂且不连贯。建议简化表达，使用清晰的句子结构。

示例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift because it usually has beautiful packaging and symbolizes love and friendship worldwide.

× I do like eating chocolate, especially when I in Japan, because Japan has a lot of kind of yummy, yummy, delicious chocolate.

✓ I do like eating chocolate, especially when I am in Japan, because Japan has a lot of kinds of yummy, yummy, delicious chocolate.

句子中缺少动词be的现在时形式，正确用法是“I am in Japan”。另外，“a lot of kind of”应改为“a lot of kinds of”，表示多种类。

× And when I eating chocolate, I always feel happy because it the sweet, the taste of sweet can all can always bring people happiness.

✓ And when I am eating chocolate, I always feel happy because the sweet taste can always bring people happiness.

“when I eating”缺少助动词，应为“when I am eating”。“it the sweet”结构不正确，应简化为“the sweet taste”。

× Maybe once a week because the chocolates or some chocolate are expensive for daily cost and I think eating too much chocolate will also bad for our skin and teeth.

✓ Maybe once a week because chocolates or some chocolate are expensive for daily cost and I think eating too much chocolate is also bad for our skin and teeth.

“the chocolates or some chocolate”中“the”不必要且混用单复数，应去掉“the”。“will also bad”缺少动词，应为“is also bad”。

× Yes I did, but like, uh, when I in primary school I always secretly bought some chocolate after school but I was punished by my mom because my teeth, all of my teeth are gone bad, gone harmful.

✓ Yes I did, but like, uh, when I was in primary school I always secretly bought some chocolate after school but I was punished by my mom because all of my teeth had gone bad.

“when I in primary school”缺少动词be，应为“when I was in primary school”。“are gone bad, gone harmful”表达不自然，应改为“had gone bad”。

× I think there's two reasons for this question.

✓ I think there are two reasons for this question.

“there's”是“there is”的缩写，后面接复数名词应使用“there are”。

× One it is, is the tea taste of the chocolate because it's sweet, Sweet always can bring people like happiness in this kind of positive mode.

✓ One is the taste of the chocolate because it's sweet. Sweetness can always bring people happiness and positive feelings.

“tea taste”应为“taste”，“Sweet always can bring people like happiness in this kind of positive mode”表达不自然，应简化为“Sweetness can always bring people happiness and positive feelings”。

× And the second reason is is is so well famous, like in Valentine's Day, this holiday can bring chocolate to popular.

✓ And the second reason is that it is very famous, like on Valentine's Day, this holiday makes chocolate popular.

“is is is so well famous”重复且用词错误，应为“is that it is very famous”。“bring chocolate to popular”表达错误，应为“makes chocolate popular”。

× I think I like the most like taste to for chocolate is white chocolate because it's more sweeter than the original taste like black black chocolate.

✓ I think my favorite taste of chocolate is white chocolate because it's sweeter than the original taste like dark chocolate.

“more sweeter”是双重比较，应只用“sweeter”。“black black chocolate”重复且用词不当，应为“dark chocolate”。

× But I think white chocolate is more suitable for me and more sweeter.

✓ But I think white chocolate is more suitable for me and sweeter.

“more sweeter”是双重比较，应只用“sweeter”。

× I do think so because I think the package of chocolate is always delicate and another reason is chocolate in the global world represent the true love or true friendship.

✓ I do think so because I think the packaging of chocolate is always delicate and another reason is chocolate in the global world represents true love or true friendship.

“package of chocolate”应为“packaging of chocolate”。“chocolate in the global world represent”主谓不一致，应为“represents”。

× I think is it has contained the good meaning of in chocolate.

✓ I think it contains the good meaning in chocolate.

“is it has contained”结构错误，应为“it contains”。“meaning of in chocolate”介词使用错误，应为“meaning in chocolate”。