巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时应避免语法错误和重复表达，句子应更简洁自然。例如，避免使用“really don't much like it”这种不自然的表达。

示例: I don't like plain chocolate very much, but I enjoy chocolate desserts like chocolate tarts because they taste delicious and sweet.

建议: 回答应更清晰，避免语法错误和不连贯的表达。应直接回答问题并用连词连接细节。

示例: I eat chocolate about once every few months, usually when my roommate shares some with me because she loves chocolate a lot.

建议: 回答应注意时态一致，句子结构应更清晰，避免重复和语法错误。

示例: I rarely ate chocolate as a child because my mother thought it was too sweet and could harm my teeth or cause obesity.

建议: 回答应更准确，避免语法错误和不恰当的词汇使用。应使用连词使表达更连贯。

示例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet taste and unique flavors like coconut. Eating sweets can improve mood by releasing hormones that make people feel happier.

建议: 回答应更自信和明确，避免犹豫和重复。句子应更流畅自然。

示例: My favorite chocolate flavor is dark chocolate because it is less sweet and I believe it is healthier than other types.

建议: 回答应更简洁，避免语法错误和重复。使用连词使句子更连贯。

示例: Definitely, chocolate is a good gift, especially for a maid or a friend's birthday. It tastes good and shows you want to make them happy.

× For the chocolate itself, I really don't much like it and I will not desire to eat them.

✓ For the chocolate itself, I really don't much like it and I will not desire to eat it.

这里的'chocolate'是不可数名词，应该用单数形式的代词'it'，而不是复数的'them'。

× But As for the some chocolate dessert, I really like to eat them like some chocolate tart.

✓ But as for some chocolate desserts, I really like to eat them like some chocolate tarts.

这里'dessert'和'tart'应使用复数形式，因为说的是多种甜点。

× Maybe once a semester it's really sudden 'cause I only eat it when I roommate give it to me.

✓ Maybe once a semester, it's really sudden because I only eat it when my roommate gives it to me.

'when I roommate'中缺少所有格'my'，且动词需与主语一致，'give'应改为'gives'。

× They ** *** will share the chocolate with me, 'cause she's a very chocolate cosmetics.

✓ She will share the chocolate with me, because she's very into chocolate cosmetics.

主语和动词不一致，且表达不清，改为正确的主谓一致和表达。

× She's really love eating it.

✓ She really loves eating it.

'She's'是'she is'的缩写，后面不能直接接动词原形，动词应为第三人称单数形式'loves'。

× I seldom eat chocolate when I was a kid 'cause my mother thinks it is too sweet for a kid that will allowed my tooth become bad and it is sweet that may cause cosmetic may cause obesity problems, so I seldom eat it.

✓ I seldom ate chocolate when I was a kid because my mother thought it was too sweet for a kid and that it would allow my teeth to become bad. It was sweet and might cause cosmetic and obesity problems, so I seldom ate it.

描述过去的事情，动词应使用过去时态，如'ate','thought','was'等。

× 'Cause I think chocolate is special for it, coconut flavor and it is sweet.

✓ Because I think chocolate is special for its coconut flavor and it is sweet.

'special for it'表达不正确，应为'special for its coconut flavor'，使用所有格代词。

× When people eat sweet things, it will improve your emotion, your hormone will be dismissed and you can feel more happier.

✓ When people eat sweet things, it will improve their emotions, their hormones will be released, and they can feel happier.

代词应与主语一致，'your'改为'their'，'hormone will be dismissed'表达错误，应为'hormones will be released'。

× This is maybe why people like to eat them.

✓ This is maybe why people like to eat it.

这里指代不可数名词'chocolate'，应使用单数代词'it'。

× Maybe it's dark chocolate, I don't know. Maybe it is not such sweet and it's I think it might be healthier.

✓ Maybe it's dark chocolate, I don't know. Maybe it is not so sweet and I think it might be healthier.

'not such sweet'表达不正确，应为'not so sweet'。

× Definitely it is a good present special for a maid or a friend's birthday.

✓ Definitely it is a good present, especially for a maid or a friend's birthday.

'special for'用法不当，应改为'especially for'。

× You can send it to them and it is quite decent and have good flavor and have the means of that you want them to feel happy is a good gift.

✓ You can send it to them and it is quite decent and has a good flavor. It means you want them to feel happy, so it is a good gift.

句子结构混乱，动词时态和主谓一致错误，需拆分句子并调整动词形式。