巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: ควรตอบคำถามโดยตรงและใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนมากขึ้น เช่น เริ่มด้วยประโยคที่ตอบคำถามโดยตรง และใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงเหตุผลที่ให้มาให้ลื่นไหลและเข้าใจง่าย

示例: Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it was a luxury for me when I was a child. Since I grew up in a small town, it was hard to find chocolate in stores, so I always treasured it.

建议: ควรตอบคำถามในปัจจุบันและใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้อง เช่น ใช้ tense ที่เหมาะสมและเชื่อมประโยคด้วย linking words เพื่อให้คำตอบสมบูรณ์และชัดเจน

示例: I usually eat chocolate once a month because it is hard to find in my town, and my mother thinks it might harm my throat.

建议: ควรใช้ tense ที่ถูกต้องและหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำซ้อน เช่น ใช้ past tense อย่างสม่ำเสมอและเชื่อมประโยคด้วย linking words เพื่อให้คำตอบมีความลื่นไหล

示例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often when I was a kid because it was hard to buy, and my mother believed it was bad for my throat.

建议: ควรใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยคและหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำ เช่น ใช้คำเชื่อมที่หลากหลายและอธิบายเหตุผลให้ชัดเจนมากขึ้น

示例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because most people naturally prefer sweet flavors. Moreover, its rich taste makes it a favorite treat everywhere.

建议: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น ใช้คำกริยาและคำคุณศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง และอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน

示例: My favorite flavor is milk chocolate with nuts because the milk softens the bitterness of the chocolate and adds an interesting texture.

建议: ควรใช้ tense ที่ถูกต้องและคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น ใช้ present tense และคำคุณศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมเพื่ออธิบายความหมายของช็อกโกแลตในฐานะของขวัญ

示例: Yes, chocolate symbolizes many emotions like kindness and love, so it is a suitable gift to give to friends or loved ones.

× when I was a little child it's hard for us to purchase chocolate from the physical stores

✓ when I was a little child it was hard for us to purchase chocolate from the physical stores

The sentence refers to a past situation, so the verb 'is' should be in the past tense 'was' to match the time frame.

× because I was born in a very small town, so chocolate is a luxurious food for me

✓ because I was born in a very small town, so chocolate was a luxurious food for me

Since the context is about the past, the verb 'is' should be changed to 'was' to maintain tense consistency.

× it's hard to purchase and also my mother thinks it's bad to my throat

✓ it was hard to purchase and also my mother thought it was bad for my throat

The sentence refers to past events, so present tense verbs 'is' and 'thinks' should be changed to past tense 'was' and 'thought'. Also, 'bad to my throat' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'bad for my throat'.

× I don't think so. When I was a little kid, I don't eat too much

✓ I don't think so. When I was a little kid, I didn't eat too much

The clause refers to past habits, so 'don't eat' should be changed to past tense 'didn't eat' to match the time frame.

× my mother thought it's bad to my throat

✓ my mother thought it was bad for my throat

The phrase 'it's' should be in past tense 'it was' to match 'thought'. Also, 'bad to my throat' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'bad for my throat'.

× Because people all have the nature to prefer the sweet flavor

✓ Because people all have a nature to prefer sweet flavors

The phrase 'the nature' is incorrect; 'a nature' or simply 'nature' is appropriate. Also, 'the sweet flavor' should be plural 'sweet flavors' to generalize the preference.

× So chocolate is definitely that kind of food holding great flavor

✓ So chocolate is definitely that kind of food that holds great flavor

The verb 'holding' should be changed to 'that holds' to correctly describe the food. 'Holding' is a present participle and does not fit here.

× I prefer milk chocolate with some nuts in it, since milk smoothes the flavor of chocolate bitter and not added some interesting taste to it

✓ I prefer milk chocolate with some nuts in it, since milk smoothes the bitter flavor of chocolate and adds some interesting taste to it

The phrase 'smoothes the flavor of chocolate bitter' is incorrect; it should be 'smoothes the bitter flavor of chocolate'. Also, 'not added' should be 'adds' to correctly express the idea.

× chocolate symbolized a lot of emotions or feelings such as kindness and love

✓ chocolate symbolizes a lot of emotions or feelings such as kindness and love

The sentence is a general statement about chocolate, so present tense 'symbolizes' is appropriate instead of past tense 'symbolized'.