巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ phù hợp. Bạn nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi, sau đó giải thích lý do một cách cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I don't like eating chocolate because I prefer spicy food. Chocolate and other sweet foods like cake don't suit my taste. Also, eating chocolate sometimes makes me feel uncomfortable, so I usually avoid it.

建议: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ và câu không rõ nghĩa. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và làm rõ lý do bạn ăn chocolate ít khi nào.

示例: I rarely eat chocolate, only on special occasions like parties. I eat it out of politeness to share happiness with the host, even though I don't really like it.

建议: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và đúng ngữ pháp hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và nói rõ hơn về thói quen ăn chocolate khi còn nhỏ, đồng thời sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc.

示例: When I was a child, I often ate chocolate because I didn't pay much attention to my parents' advice. However, now that I am 15, I rarely eat chocolate because I am more conscious about my health.

建议: Bạn cần trả lời rõ ràng và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Hãy tránh câu dài không rõ nghĩa và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc, đồng thời giải thích cụ thể lý do tại sao chocolate phổ biến.

示例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is widely available and loved by many people, especially children. It contains substances that can make people feel happy and relaxed, which adds to its popularity.

建议: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc. Hãy nói rõ lý do bạn thích hương vị đó.

示例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is coconut milk chocolate. I used to enjoy it a lot as a child because I also like the taste of coconut, which makes this chocolate special to me.

建议: Bạn nên trả lời câu hỏi một cách trực tiếp và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh câu hỏi ngược lại. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và giải thích rõ lý do tại sao chocolate là món quà tốt.

示例: I think giving chocolate as a gift is a lovely idea because it symbolizes sweetness and affection. It is a good way to express love or appreciation to someone special.

× I don't like the chocolate while some people really love to eating it but maybe it is suitable with my taste.

✓ I don't like chocolate while some people really love eating it but maybe it is not suitable for my taste.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the gerund form 'eating' without 'to'. Also, 'the chocolate' is incorrect here; 'chocolate' as a general food does not need 'the'. 'Suitable with' should be 'suitable for'.

× I don't like the chocolate while some people really love to eating it but maybe it is suitable with my taste.

✓ I don't like chocolate while some people really love eating it but maybe it is not suitable for my taste.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect after 'suitable'; the correct preposition is 'for'.

× I love spicy food so I don't really like to eat sweet food like cake or chocolate and also it makes me feel like umm I will be fellow if I eat chocolate so it's not my taste.

✓ I love spicy food so I don't really like eating sweet food like cake or chocolate and also it makes me feel like umm I will be full if I eat chocolate so it's not my taste.

After 'like', the gerund form 'eating' is preferred. Also, 'fellow' is a wrong word here; the correct word is 'full'.

× I rarely eat chocolate, I just eat chocolate in some special occasions later in a party that I have to share the happiness with the host.

✓ I rarely eat chocolate; I just eat chocolate on some special occasions, like at a party where I have to share happiness with the host.

'Occasions' is plural, so 'in some special occasions' is correct but 'later in a party' is incorrect; it should be 'like at a party'. Also, 'share the happiness' should be 'share happiness' without 'the'.

× I rarely eat chocolate, I just eat chocolate in some special occasions later in a party that I have to share the happiness with the host.

✓ I rarely eat chocolate; I just eat chocolate on some special occasions, like at a party where I have to share happiness with the host.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'occasions'; the correct preposition is 'on'. Also, 'later in a party' is incorrect; 'at a party' is correct.

× So I will I will eat the chocolate like politeness that I gave to them and because I don't relate.

✓ So I will eat the chocolate as a polite gesture to them because I don't really like it.

The sentence is awkward and unclear. 'Like politeness that I gave to them' is incorrect; it should be 'as a polite gesture'. 'Because I don't relate' is unclear and likely incorrect; it is corrected to 'because I don't really like it'. Also, repeated 'I will' is an error.

× With every child I usually eat chocolate because at this time I don't usually pay attention at my parents so I are really comfortable whether eat some sweet food like cake or chocolate.

✓ Like every child, I usually ate chocolate because at that time I didn't usually pay attention to my parents so I was really comfortable eating some sweet food like cake or chocolate.

The sentence refers to past habits, so past tense 'ate', 'didn't', and 'was' should be used. 'Pay attention at' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to'. 'I are' is incorrect; it should be 'I was'. 'Whether eat' is incorrect; it should be 'eating'.

× But now I'm 15 and I feel really, uh, unconfident about myself so I don't usually eat.

✓ But now I'm 15 and I feel really, uh, unconfident about myself so I don't usually eat it.

The verb 'eat' here needs an object; adding 'it' (referring to chocolate) completes the sentence properly.

× Maybe because which is a popular stay in the world and maybe it is a very common food and you can see all over the world and it suits for many children because a subsistence in chocolate, it makes people feel more comfortable and it's help people to clamp down or have to have more sweet.

✓ Maybe because it is a popular treat in the world and a very common food that you can see all over the world. It suits many children because chocolate contains substances that make people feel more comfortable and it helps people to calm down or crave more sweets.

The original sentence is confusing and contains many errors. 'Popular stay' should be 'popular treat'. 'Suits for' should be 'suits'. 'Subsistence in chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'substances in chocolate'. 'It's help' should be 'it helps'. 'Clamp down' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'calm down'. 'Have to have more sweet' is incorrect; it should be 'crave more sweets'.

× I used to eat coconut milk chocolate and maybe it's a really delicious taste of chocolate I used to have in my child and because of it, because I like coconut too, so maybe it's my favorite flavor.

✓ I used to eat coconut milk chocolate and maybe it has a really delicious taste that I used to have in my childhood. Because of that, and because I like coconut too, maybe it's my favorite flavor.

'In my child' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in my childhood'. Also, 'it's a really delicious taste of chocolate I used to have' is awkward; rephrased for clarity.

× I think it's a really lovely way if you want to give someone a gift, because chocolate is a symbol of sweet, which is very lovely.

✓ I think it's a really lovely way if you want to give someone a gift, because chocolate is a symbol of sweetness, which is very lovely.

'A symbol of sweet' is incorrect; 'sweet' is an adjective. The noun form 'sweetness' should be used here.

× So maybe is it a good way when you want to say something about love or you want to express your feelings about them?

✓ So maybe it is a good way when you want to say something about love or express your feelings to them.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'Is it a good way' should be 'it is a good way'. Also, 'express your feelings about them' is better as 'express your feelings to them'.