巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and clear by avoiding redundancy and using correct grammar. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add a reason or example using linking words.

示例: I don't eat chocolate regularly because I focus on fitness, but I enjoy dark chocolate about twice a month as a treat because it has health benefits.

建议: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using clearer sentence structure and linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'like I eat once one more time or two more time' and be more specific.

示例: As I mentioned earlier, I usually eat dark chocolate twice a month, and I might have it more often during special occasions like birthdays.

建议: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use past tense consistently and avoid unnecessary words. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: When I was a kid, I didn't eat very healthily. My parents used to give me a piece of chocolate every day before school, so I ate chocolate regularly.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organise your ideas logically using linking words and provide specific reasons. Avoid vague or confusing phrases like 'nowadays doctors' and 'it's also make control only'.

示例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and provides quick energy. Additionally, dark chocolate is considered healthy and can help control high blood pressure.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Use clear sentence structure and avoid vague phrases like 'the another chocolates like which have something in it'. Be specific and use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: My favourite chocolate is Dairy Milk Fruit and Nuts because it tastes delicious and contains healthy ingredients like fruits and nuts. Besides that, I also enjoy chocolates with different fillings.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains incorrect phrases like 'gained proof polarity'. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct grammar. Provide reasons why chocolate makes a good gift using linking words.

示例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift because many people enjoy it. Giving chocolate to friends and family is a nice way to show your love and appreciation.

× I'm not like to eating chocolate on my regular basis.

✓ I don't like eating chocolate on my regular basis.

The modal verb 'like' should be followed by the base form or gerund without 'to'. The phrase 'not like to eating' is incorrect; it should be 'don't like eating'.

× sometimes when anyone have birthday or any occasion at that time like I eat once one more time or two more time.

✓ sometimes when anyone has a birthday or any occasion, I eat once or twice more at that time.

The pronoun 'anyone' is singular and requires the verb 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, the phrase 'once one more time or two more time' is awkward and corrected to 'once or twice more'.

× Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?

✓ Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?

This sentence is correct as it uses the past tense appropriately with 'did' and the base verb 'eat'. No correction needed.

× so I'm not eating too much healthy things at that time, I usually eat chocolate on my regular basis.

✓ so I didn't eat too many healthy things at that time, I usually ate chocolate on my regular basis.

The sentence refers to past time ('when I was a kid'), so present tense 'I'm not eating' and 'usually eat' are incorrect. They should be in past tense 'didn't eat' and 'usually ate'. Also, 'too much healthy things' should be 'too many healthy things' because 'things' is countable.

× it's also provide a little bit energy as well as nowadays doctors.

✓ it also provides a little bit of energy, and nowadays doctors say so.

The verb 'provide' should be in third person singular 'provides' to agree with 'it'. Also, 'a little bit energy' should be 'a little bit of energy'. The phrase 'as well as nowadays doctors' is unclear and corrected for clarity.

× it's also make control only.

✓ it also helps control it.

The verb 'make' should be in third person singular form 'makes' or replaced with 'helps' for clarity. The phrase 'make control only' is incorrect and unclear; 'helps control it' is clearer.

× because it have fruits and nuts in it

✓ because it has fruits and nuts in it

The pronoun 'it' requires the verb 'has' in third person singular, not 'have'.

× I also like the another chocolates like which have something in it.

✓ I also like other chocolates that have something in them.

The phrase 'the another chocolates' is incorrect; 'other chocolates' is correct. Also, 'which have something in it' should be 'that have something in them' to agree in number.

× it's a very good gift to giving chocolate to their near and dear ones

✓ it's a very good gift to give chocolate to their near and dear ones

The verb after 'to' should be in base form 'give', not gerund 'giving'.

× to show your love with the another persons.

✓ to show your love to other people.

The phrase 'with the another persons' is incorrect. It should be 'to other people' for correct preposition and plural form.