巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ không tự nhiên như "I'm a sweet tooth, uh, person" và lỗi ngữ pháp như "I eating". Hãy nói rõ ràng, mạch lạc và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Ngoài ra, nên dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it satisfies my sweet cravings. For example, when I feel tired, eating a bar of chocolate boosts my energy and helps me work more efficiently. Moreover, I enjoy its sweet taste very much.

建议: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, tránh lỗi như "I'm not eat chocolate" và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Hãy dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn. Ngoài ra, nên giải thích rõ hơn về lý do hạn chế ăn chocolate với các chi tiết cụ thể.

示例: Although I love sweets, I don't eat chocolate every day. Usually, I eat it about four times a month, mostly when I'm tired or feeling down because I know it's not very healthy. Also, I try to limit it since I am a bit overweight.

建议: Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "we do not have" nên là "we did not have". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên mạch lạc hơn với các từ nối và câu hoàn chỉnh.

示例: Not really. When I was a child in Vietnam, there were not many types of chocolate available, and it was not as popular as it is now. Also, chocolate was quite expensive, so I only ate it on special occasions like my birthday or when I got high scores.

建议: Bạn nên tránh dùng từ ngữ không tự nhiên như "chocolate is how people become happiness" và lỗi ngữ pháp như "it's have people to reduce stress". Hãy dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ nối để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn.

示例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it can be used in many foods like cakes and ice cream. Moreover, eating chocolate releases dopamine, which makes people feel happy and helps reduce stress.

建议: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, nên dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn và tránh nói lắp như "mad share" (có thể là "Matcha"?), và câu nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng.

示例: My favourite flavour is matcha chocolate because I love its unique taste. It is sweet but also has a slight bitterness from the tea, which I find very enjoyable. Whenever I get the chance, I like to eat it all day.

建议: Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "are become". Hãy dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như "like" quá nhiều.

示例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because in my country, many people give chocolates to their relatives, friends, and especially loved ones on special occasions like Valentine's Day or birthdays. Nowadays, chocolates have become very popular gifts.

× Like when I'm tired I eating a bar of chocolate and it boosts my energy up and it's helped me to work more efficient and also I really enjoy the uh, sweet taste of the chocolate.

✓ Like when I'm tired I eat a bar of chocolate and it boosts my energy up and it helps me to work more efficiently and also I really enjoy the uh, sweet taste of the chocolate.

The phrase 'I eating' is incorrect because after 'I' we need the base form of the verb, so it should be 'I eat'. Also, 'it's helped' should be 'it helps' to maintain present tense consistency. 'More efficient' should be 'more efficiently' because it modifies the verb 'work', requiring an adverb.

× Although I have a sweet tooth, I'm not eat chocolate in my daily life.

✓ Although I have a sweet tooth, I don't eat chocolate in my daily life.

The phrase 'I'm not eat' is incorrect; the correct negative form in present simple tense is 'I don't eat'. 'I'm not eat' mixes present continuous auxiliary with base verb incorrectly.

× And uh, you can see that I a little bit, uh, obesity so.

✓ And uh, you can see that I am a little bit obese, so.

'Obesity' is a noun, but here an adjective 'obese' is needed to describe 'I'. Also, the verb 'am' is missing after 'I'. The phrase should be 'I am a little bit obese'.

× Not really. Uh, because when I was a child in Vietnam, we do not have a lot of kinds of chocolate and it's not as popular as nowadays.

✓ Not really. Uh, because when I was a child in Vietnam, we did not have a lot of kinds of chocolate and it was not as popular as nowadays.

The sentence refers to past time ('when I was a child'), so the verbs should be in past tense: 'did not have' and 'was not' instead of 'do not have' and 'it's not'.

× So I just eat chocolate is my special occasion like my birthday or when I have a high, high score.

✓ So I just eat chocolate on special occasions like my birthday or when I get a high score.

The original sentence lacks preposition 'on' before 'special occasion' and has incorrect structure 'eat chocolate is my special occasion'. It should be 'eat chocolate on special occasions'. Also, 'have a high, high score' is better as 'get a high score'.

× I think the reason why chocolate is uh, famous around the world because it can use in varieties of food like a cake or ice creams.

✓ I think the reason why chocolate is famous around the world is because it can be used in a variety of foods like cakes or ice cream.

The phrase 'it can use in varieties of food' is incorrect. It should be 'it can be used in a variety of foods'. 'Variety' is singular and 'foods' is plural. Also, 'a cake or ice creams' should be 'cakes or ice cream'.

× And also chocolate is how people become happiness because it can increase the dopamine when people eat it and it's have people to reduce stress too.

✓ And also chocolate makes people happy because it can increase dopamine when people eat it and it helps people reduce stress too.

'Chocolate is how people become happiness' is incorrect; it should be 'chocolate makes people happy'. 'It's have people to reduce stress' is incorrect; it should be 'it helps people reduce stress'. 'Happiness' is a noun, but here an adjective 'happy' is needed.

× Like it's sweet, but it's also a little bitter of tea.

✓ Like it's sweet, but it also has a little bitterness of tea.

'A little bitter of tea' is incorrect. 'Bitter' is an adjective; here a noun 'bitterness' is needed to describe the taste. Alternatively, 'a little bitter taste of tea' could be used.

× Chocolates nowadays are become popular gifts in my countries and a lot of people.

✓ Chocolates nowadays have become popular gifts in my country and among a lot of people.

'Are become' is incorrect; the correct form is 'have become'. 'In my countries' should be 'in my country' (singular). Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'and among a lot of people' clarifies meaning.