巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'I do like' and 'I love a variety of chocolates' closely. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'And to my surprise,' you can say 'Interestingly,' and avoid starting sentences with 'And'.

示例: Yes, I like eating chocolates because I have a sweet tooth. Interestingly, India offers a wide variety of chocolates, and they are commonly enjoyed as a dessert after dinner.

建议: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'Average diverts me'. Try to be more precise and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid repetition of 'sweet tooth' without adding new information. Keep sentences clear and concise.

示例: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a month because I have a sweet tooth. Moreover, my son shares the same liking, so we often enjoy chocolates together.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains errors like 'each and eating' and 'kitten games'. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, avoid repeating the same idea twice. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: Yes, I often ate chocolates as a child. I used to ask my friends to bring chocolates when they visited, and my parents rewarded me with chocolates for my achievements, which I always cherished.

建议: Your answer covers good points but has some vocabulary and grammar mistakes like 'stop chocolates' and 'there quite cheap'. Use correct terms and linking words to improve coherence. Also, try to be more precise and avoid vague phrases.

示例: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it comes in many varieties, such as milk chocolate and extra sweet chocolate. Therefore, people can choose according to their taste. Additionally, chocolates are affordable, making them accessible to many.

建议: Your answer has some factual inaccuracies and awkward phrasing like 'antibiotic properties' and 'makes my craving lower down to a extreme level'. Try to use accurate information and clearer expressions. Also, avoid repeating 'sweet tooth' unnecessarily.

示例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it has health benefits and helps reduce my sweet cravings. I enjoy its rich taste, which is less sweet compared to other chocolates.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains some awkward phrases like 'user friendly' and incomplete sentences. Try to use more natural expressions and complete your ideas clearly. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

示例: Yes, I think chocolates make great gifts because they are affordable and widely liked. People of all ages enjoy receiving chocolates on various occasions.

× Yes, I do like eating chocolates.

✓ Yes, I do like eating chocolate.

The word 'chocolate' is generally used as an uncountable noun when referring to the substance or food in general. Using 'chocolates' implies individual pieces or types, which is less common in this context. Hence, 'eating chocolate' is more appropriate.

× I have a sweet tooth and I love a variety of chocolates.

✓ I have a sweet tooth and I love a variety of chocolate.

When referring to 'a variety of' followed by a noun, the noun is usually plural. However, 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun does not take plural form. To express different types, 'varieties of chocolate' would be better, but here 'a variety of chocolate' is acceptable.

× And of course, chocolate is also considered a sweet dish in my country, so it is eaten mostly after the dinner.

✓ And of course, chocolate is also considered a sweet dish in my country, so it is eaten mostly after dinner.

The definite article 'the' is not used before meals like 'dinner' when speaking generally. Hence, 'after dinner' is correct instead of 'after the dinner'.

× I love eating chocolates an I eat chocolate at least one once or twice in a month.

✓ I love eating chocolate and I eat it at least once or twice a month.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun here. Also, 'an' is a typo and should be 'and'. 'One once' is incorrect; it should be 'once'. 'In a month' is better expressed as 'a month'. Additionally, 'eat chocolate' needs an object pronoun 'it' for clarity.

× Average diverts me to eat the chocolates very often and I also have a son who is having the same sweet tooth so we share our chocolates every often.

✓ Average drives me to eat chocolate very often and I also have a son who has the same sweet tooth, so we share our chocolates very often.

'Average diverts me' is incorrect; 'drives me' is appropriate. 'Eat the chocolates' should be 'eat chocolate' as uncountable. 'Who is having' should be 'who has' for possession. 'Every often' is incorrect; 'very often' is correct.

× When I was a small kid, I loved each and eating chocolates and I request all my kitten games to bring chocolate for me whenever they come to my house.

✓ When I was a small kid, I loved eating chocolates and I requested all my kitten games to bring chocolate for me whenever they came to my house.

'Loved each and eating' is incorrect; 'loved eating' is correct. 'Request' should be past tense 'requested' to match past context. 'Come' should be past tense 'came'.

× And my parents were very loving to me and they always offer me chocolates for my achievements and it was a very memorable experience for me whenever they give me chocolates for my achievements.

✓ And my parents were very loving to me and they always offered me chocolates for my achievements. It was a very memorable experience for me whenever they gave me chocolates for my achievements.

'Offer' and 'give' should be in past tense 'offered' and 'gave' to maintain past narration. Also, the sentence is long and can be split for clarity.

× I think first of all chocolates come in a very huge variety like milk chocolate stop chocolates, an extra sweet chocolates.

✓ I think first of all chocolate comes in a very huge variety like milk chocolate, dark chocolates, and extra sweet chocolates.

'Chocolates come' should be 'chocolate comes' as uncountable noun treated singular. 'Stop chocolates' seems a typo for 'dark chocolates'. 'An extra sweet chocolates' should be 'and extra sweet chocolates'.

× Other than that there quite cheap so everyone can afford it.

✓ Other than that, they are quite cheap so everyone can afford it.

'There' is incorrect; 'they' refers to chocolates. Also, a comma after 'Other than that' improves sentence flow.

× I am a huge fan of dark chocolate because it has antibiotic properties and it also makes my craving lower down to a extreme level.

✓ I am a huge fan of dark chocolate because it has antioxidant properties and it also lowers my craving to an extreme level.

'Antibiotic' is incorrect; 'antioxidant' is the correct term for chocolate. 'Makes my craving lower down' is awkward; 'lowers my craving' is better. 'A extreme' should be 'an extreme'.

× I also have a sweet tooth and dark chocolates tends to be quite sweeter.

✓ I also have a sweet tooth and dark chocolate tends to be quite sweet.

'Dark chocolates' should be singular 'dark chocolate' as uncountable noun. 'Tends' agrees with singular subject. 'Sweeter' is comparative; 'sweet' is better here.

× That's why I love the flavor of dark chocolates.

✓ That's why I love the flavor of dark chocolate.

'Dark chocolates' should be 'dark chocolate' as uncountable noun when referring to flavor in general.

× Yes, I suppose that chocolates are a good source of gifting to each other as they are cost effective and they are user friendly as everybody loves chocolates and oh they.

✓ Yes, I suppose that chocolates are a good gift to give to each other as they are cost effective and user friendly since everybody loves chocolates.

'Source of gifting to each other' is awkward; 'a good gift to give' is clearer. 'User friendly' is better without 'they are' repeated. 'And oh they' is incomplete and removed.

× Would like to have chocolates in almost all the occasions. Moreover, every generation likes it so.

✓ People would like to have chocolates on almost all occasions. Moreover, every generation likes them.

Sentence fragment 'Would like to have chocolates...' needs a subject. 'On almost all occasions' is correct preposition. 'Likes it so' is unclear; 'likes them' refers to chocolates properly.