巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has grammatical errors and some unclear phrases. Try to make your sentences clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it is sweet and has a pleasant aroma. Whenever I eat it, I feel comforted and refreshed. Therefore, I prefer to eat at least one piece of chocolate every day.

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentence structures and linking words to make your response more coherent. Also, avoid repetition and be concise.

示例: I eat chocolate once a day because eating too much can harm my health, especially my taste buds. Therefore, I prefer to limit myself to just one piece to avoid any risks.

建议: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear and incorrect sentences. Focus on using simple, clear sentences with correct grammar. Provide specific details and use linking words to explain the consequences of eating too much chocolate as a child.

示例: Yes, I used to eat a large amount of chocolate when I was a kid. I remember eating many chocolates, which made me sick. As a result, my father was very worried because I was ill for several weeks.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and clear sentences. Explain specific reasons why chocolate is popular, such as taste and its effect on mood.

示例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy its sweet taste. Also, it is available in many varieties, so people like to try different types. Additionally, eating chocolate can make people feel relaxed and reduce stress.

建议: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer more natural and coherent. Be specific about your preferences.

示例: My favorite flavor of chocolate is strawberry mixed with cocoa beans. It tastes delicious and is not too sweet, so it is healthier for me. I often eat one or two pieces of this flavor each day.

建议: Your answer is relevant but unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically using linking words. Explain why chocolate makes a good gift with specific reasons.

示例: Yes, chocolate is a good gift because it can improve someone's mood. Since it is sweet and enjoyable, many people like receiving it. Also, giving chocolate can strengthen relationships between people.

× Yes, I prefer to eat are chocolate because it's just was this sweet and I enjoy their pleasing aroma.

✓ Yes, I prefer to eat chocolate because it's just so sweet and I enjoy its pleasing aroma.

The sentence contains incorrect use of 'are' and 'was' which are unnecessary and incorrect here. 'Are' should be removed and 'was' replaced with 'so' to correctly express the degree of sweetness. Also, 'their' should be 'its' to agree with the singular noun 'chocolate'.

× Yes, I prefer to eat are chocolate because it's just was this sweet and I enjoy their pleasing aroma.

✓ Yes, I prefer to eat chocolate because it's just so sweet and I enjoy its pleasing aroma.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrectly used for 'chocolate', which is singular. The correct possessive pronoun is 'its'.

× Also whenever I eat it I feel very comfort and refreshed and do I so that's I prefer in our day to eat or at least one piece of chocolate.

✓ Also, whenever I eat it, I feel very comfortable and refreshed, so I prefer to eat at least one piece of chocolate every day.

'Comfort' is a noun; the adjective 'comfortable' should be used to describe the feeling. The sentence structure is also corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Well, I eat a chocolate once in a day because if I eat it in a large amount, it's not good for my health, specially for my taste, it will damage it badly.

✓ Well, I eat chocolate once a day because if I eat a large amount, it's not good for my health, especially for my taste; it will damage it badly.

The article 'a' before 'chocolate' is unnecessary when referring to chocolate in general. 'Specially' should be 'especially'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× So I didn't want to take such type of risk in my life.

✓ So I don't want to take such a risk in my life.

The sentence refers to a present preference, so present tense 'don't want' is appropriate instead of past tense 'didn't want'. Also, 'such type of risk' is corrected to 'such a risk' for natural expression.

× So I prefer to eat only one piece of it hardly.

✓ So I prefer to eat only one piece of it rarely.

'Hardly' is incorrectly used here; 'rarely' correctly expresses infrequency.

× Yes, I often eat large amount of chocolate.

✓ Yes, I often ate a large amount of chocolate.

The question is about past habits, so past tense 'ate' is required. Also, 'large amount' needs the article 'a'.

× Yes, I often eat large amount of chocolate.

✓ Yes, I often ate a large amount of chocolate.

'Large amount' requires the article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× When I was a kid I have remember all they remembered, even I87 chocolates.

✓ When I was a kid, I remember all of it, even 87 chocolates.

The sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'I have remember' should be 'I remember'. 'They remembered' is unclear and removed. 'I87' is likely a typo for '87'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× After that I face a lot of difficulties like I fall in sick and you do, which my father appearance was for worry and stress.

✓ After that, I faced a lot of difficulties like falling sick, which caused my father to worry and be stressed.

Past tense 'faced' is needed. 'I fall in sick' is incorrect; 'falling sick' is correct. 'You do' is unclear and removed. 'My father appearance was for worry and stress' is corrected to 'caused my father to worry and be stressed'.

× After that I face a lot of difficulties like I fall in sick and you do, which my father appearance was for worry and stress.

✓ After that, I faced a lot of difficulties like falling sick, which caused my father to worry and be stressed.

The phrase 'you do' is an incorrect pronoun usage and is removed for clarity.

× FCB 'cause I suffer from S AM situations for a several week.

✓ Because I suffered from some situations for several weeks.

Past tense 'suffered' is needed. 'S AM situations' is unclear and replaced with 'some situations'. 'A several week' is corrected to 'several weeks'.

× I felt that it was I felt that because of its changed many peoples like to eat or sweets that's why they are prefer it and it's also common in our menu varieties due to which platform do which people prefer to try each type of chocolates because it given also a positive iti to them and I feel relaxed and stress fools when they eat it.

✓ I feel that many people like to eat sweets, which is why they prefer it. It's also common in our menu varieties, so people like to try each type of chocolate because it gives them positive energy. I feel relaxed and less stressed when I eat it.

The sentence is confusing and contains multiple errors. 'Felt' is changed to 'feel' for present tense. 'Many peoples' corrected to 'many people'. 'Are prefer' corrected to 'prefer'. 'Given also a positive iti' corrected to 'gives them positive energy'. 'Stress fools' corrected to 'less stressed'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Well, I love to eat a strawberry flavor mixture of cocoa beans.

✓ Well, I love to eat strawberry-flavored chocolate made from a mixture of cocoa beans.

'Strawberry flavor mixture of cocoa beans' is awkward. 'Strawberry-flavored chocolate' is more natural. Added 'made from' for clarity.

× It's changed towards our delicious, although it is not too much sweet, which is not harmful for my health also.

✓ It's very delicious, although it is not too sweet, which is also not harmful to my health.

'Changed towards our delicious' is incorrect; replaced with 'very delicious'. 'Not too much sweet' corrected to 'not too sweet'. 'Not harmful for' corrected to 'not harmful to'.

× And I eat very often in RJ on day sometime I prefer to 8 or two chocolates in of such a flavors of it.

✓ I eat it very often in a day; sometimes I prefer to eat one or two chocolates of such flavors.

'In RJ on day' is unclear and corrected to 'in a day'. '8 or two chocolates' corrected to 'one or two chocolates'. 'In of such a flavors of it' corrected to 'of such flavors'.

× Yes, of course. The chocolate is a good gift to give another one.

✓ Yes, of course. Chocolate is a good gift to give to others.

'Another one' is an incorrect pronoun usage here; 'others' is appropriate.

× It will be your had to change their moods also because it says is too sweet and they're also added sugar and sugar as in our relation also an make it all stronger and some papers are like it too much and although it is a good one to given as a gift to another one.

✓ It can help change their moods because it is sweet and contains added sugar, which can strengthen relationships. Some people like it very much, so it is a good gift to give to others.

The original sentence is confusing with incorrect pronouns like 'your had', 'they're', 'papers'. These are corrected to proper pronouns and clearer expressions.