巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, for example, avoid repeating 'chocolate' unnecessarily and correct grammar such as 'because' and 'crave for'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it is one of my favourite snacks. Moreover, I often crave it when I am feeling unwell. As a foodie, I enjoy trying different types of chocolates, such as the recently popular Kunafa flavour.

建议: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like 'also' or 'in addition' to connect your points logically. For example, clarify 'I need to' and 'special news' for better understanding.

示例: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week because it is not very healthy. Also, I tend to eat it when I feel a bit nervous. In addition, I enjoy chocolate on special occasions or when I receive good news.

建议: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid repetition. Also, make your sentences more coherent by using linking words like 'because' or 'since'.

示例: Yes, definitely. When I was a child, I really enjoyed eating chocolate because it was sweet and tasted delicious. Like most kids, I was quite fond of chocolate.

建议: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific reasons clearly.

示例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a smooth texture that melts in the mouth. In addition, people often enjoy it during special occasions. Moreover, many food lovers really like chocolate and eat it frequently.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'also' or 'in addition' to connect your points logically.

示例: My favourite chocolate flavour has recently changed to Kunafa, which originates from the Middle East. Also, I like to eat dark chocolate when I feel unwell because it helps improve my health. In addition, I sometimes crave milk chocolate for its creamy taste.

建议: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical errors and could be more concise. Try to avoid repeating ideas and use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to improve coherence.

示例: In my opinion, people in my country often give chocolates as gifts during festivals and special occasions because they believe chocolates make others happy. Therefore, chocolates are preferred over expensive gifts as they help strengthen relationships.

× Yes, I really like to eat chocolate becauses the chocolate is one of my favorite snack.

✓ Yes, I really like to eat chocolate because chocolate is one of my favorite snacks.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; the correct conjunction is 'because'. Also, 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match 'one of my favorite'.

× Moreover, I always crave for chocolate when I'm feeling not well.

✓ Moreover, I always crave chocolate when I'm not feeling well.

The verb 'crave' does not require the preposition 'for'. Also, 'feeling not well' is better expressed as 'not feeling well'.

× the chocolate is one of my favorite snack.

✓ chocolate is one of my favorite snacks.

The noun 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' after 'one of my favorite'.

× Usually I need to.

✓ Usually I do.

The phrase 'I need to' is incomplete and incorrect here; 'I do' is appropriate to answer frequency questions.

× Once or twice a week as it's not that much good for our health.

✓ I eat it once or twice a week as it's not very good for our health.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb; also, 'not that much good' is incorrect, 'not very good' is correct.

× Moreover, I when I'm feeling quite a bit unnerved then I eat, then I prefer to eat chocolates.

✓ Moreover, when I'm feeling quite a bit unnerved, I prefer to eat chocolates.

The sentence has redundant and misplaced words; restructuring improves clarity and grammar.

× Apart from that, when I have a special occasion or a special news then I eat chocolate as a sweet.

✓ Apart from that, when I have a special occasion or special news, I eat chocolate as a sweet.

The article 'a' is incorrect before 'special news' as 'news' is uncountable.

× When I was a kid, I really like san enjoy to eat chocolate.

✓ When I was a kid, I really liked and enjoyed eating chocolate.

The past tense 'liked' and 'enjoyed' should be used to match 'was'. Also, 'san' is a typo and 'to eat' should be 'eating' after 'enjoyed'.

× so I like to eat chocolate as it sweet and it tastes so good.

✓ so I liked to eat chocolate as it was sweet and tasted so good.

Past tense 'liked', 'was', and 'tasted' are needed. Also, 'as it sweet' is missing the verb 'was'.

× So when I was a child I really likes to eat it moreover.

✓ So when I was a child, I really liked to eat it moreover.

The verb 'likes' should be in past tense 'liked' to agree with 'was'.

× Ask it to Most of the kids are addicted to chocolate and one of them is me.

✓ Most kids are addicted to chocolate, and I am one of them.

The phrase 'Ask it to' is incorrect and unnecessary; sentence restructured for clarity.

× If I'm not mistaken, chocolate have a quite good texture that people really likes that when it when we eat it, it just melts in our mouth.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, chocolate has quite a good texture that people really like because when we eat it, it just melts in our mouth.

The singular noun 'chocolate' requires singular verb 'has'. Also, 'people' is plural and requires 'like'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× In addition, chocolate is a sweet that people usually eat it on special occasions.

✓ In addition, chocolate is a sweet that people usually eat on special occasions.

The pronoun 'it' is redundant after 'people usually eat'.

× Moreover, some kind of people who are foodie really likes to eat chocolate and often eat so much chocolates.

✓ Moreover, some kinds of people who are foodies really like to eat chocolate and often eat so much chocolate.

'Some kind of people' should be 'some kinds of people'. 'Foodie' should be plural 'foodies'. 'Likes' should be 'like' to agree with plural subject. 'Chocolates' is better as uncountable 'chocolate' here.

× So my one of the most favorite flavor of chocolate has recently changed and it becomes the Kunafa flavoured chocolate and its origin is found in the boy.

✓ So one of my most favorite flavors of chocolate has recently changed and it has become the Kunafa flavored chocolate, which originates from the boy.

'My one of the most favorite flavor' is incorrect order; corrected to 'one of my most favorite flavors'. 'Becomes' changed to 'has become' for present perfect tense. 'Origin is found in the boy' is unclear; 'originates from the boy' is better but 'boy' may be a typo or unclear.

× Moreover, sometimes I really like to eat dark chocolate one when I'm feeling quite unwell as it helps me to enhance my health.

✓ Moreover, sometimes I really like to eat dark chocolate when I'm feeling quite unwell as it helps me improve my health.

'One' is unnecessary and removed. 'Enhance my health' is better expressed as 'improve my health'.

× Moreover, sometimes I really crave for milk chocolate as it.

✓ Moreover, sometimes I really crave milk chocolate.

The sentence is incomplete and 'crave for' is incorrect; 'crave' does not need 'for'. The phrase 'as it' is incomplete and removed.

× In my perspectives, in my country, people used to give chocolates to each other in special festivals, occasions or get together because they all think that chocolate is a better way to make someone happy rather than gifting them something really precious and valuable.

✓ In my perspective, in my country, people used to give chocolates to each other during special festivals, occasions, or get-togethers because they all think that chocolate is a better way to make someone happy rather than gifting them something really precious and valuable.

'Perspectives' should be singular 'perspective'. 'In special festivals' is better as 'during special festivals'. 'Get together' should be hyphenated as 'get-togethers'.

× Moreover, they think it enhanced their bond.

✓ Moreover, they think it enhances their bond.

The verb tense should be present 'enhances' to agree with 'think' which is present tense.