巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences clear and concise, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, explain why you like chocolate and how it affects you.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and helps me relax after a stressful day. However, I know it is unhealthy, so I try to eat it in moderation.

建议: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and use linking words to explain your reason. Also, avoid incomplete sentences.

示例: Although I love chocolate, I only eat it once in a blue moon because I am aware of its negative effects on health.

建议: Your answer is fragmented and unclear. Try to form complete sentences and provide specific examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, when I was a kid, I often ate many kinds of chocolates such as chocolate pies, candies, and Milky Bars. I really enjoyed these sweet treats.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains many unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to explain your opinion logically.

示例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet, and people of all ages enjoy sweet foods. Also, chocolate can improve mood and reduce stress.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence and explain your preference with reasons using linking words.

示例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is less sweet and has a higher percentage of cocoa, which I prefer.

建议: Your answer is fragmented and unclear. Try to give a clear opinion and explain why chocolate is a good gift using linking words and complete sentences.

示例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is popular and symbolizes love and care when given to someone special.

× I love eating chocolates and anything that is sweeter in test specially if the chocolates are.

✓ I love eating chocolate and anything that is sweeter in taste, especially if the chocolate is.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. Also, 'test' is a typo and should be 'taste'. 'Chocolates are' should be 'chocolate is' to agree with the singular noun.

× It kind of gives me a guilty pleasure which I look after, specially after a very stressful day.

✓ It kind of gives me a guilty pleasure which I look forward to, especially after a very stressful day.

The phrase 'look after' means to take care of, but the intended meaning is 'look forward to', which means to anticipate something with pleasure. Also, 'specially' should be 'especially'.

× Well, even though I adore chocolates, I've made a pact with myself that out it chocolates only once in a blue moon.

✓ Well, even though I adore chocolate, I've made a pact with myself to eat chocolate only once in a blue moon.

'Chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. The phrase 'out it chocolates' is incorrect and should be 'to eat chocolate'.

× Because I know the side effects of adding. Chocolates.

✓ Because I know the side effects of eating chocolate.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Adding chocolates' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'eating chocolate' to convey the intended meaning.

× Well, growing up I surely. It lots of chocolates, it concluded. Chocolate pies, candies, Milky bars. And various other forms of droplets.

✓ Well, growing up I surely ate lots of chocolates, including chocolate pies, candies, Milky Bars, and various other forms of chocolates.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain unclear words like 'it concluded' and 'droplets' which seem to be errors. 'Droplets' should be 'chocolates'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Well, in my opinion. Droplets are sweeter in nature.

✓ Well, in my opinion, chocolates are sweeter in nature.

The word 'droplets' is incorrect and should be 'chocolates' to refer to the subject properly.

× People are more attracted towards sweeter things, specially if we talk about children's and adult screwing up.

✓ People are more attracted towards sweeter things, especially if we talk about children and adults.

'Children's' is possessive and incorrect here; it should be 'children'. 'Adult screwing up' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; corrected to 'adults'.

× The deep end, their moods and their stressfulness order. Mindset in. Sweetness.

✓ The sweetness affects their moods and stress levels deeply.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It is restructured to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× But I suppose I love something that is not so sweet. So it has to be dark chocolates.

✓ But I suppose I love something that is not so sweet, so it has to be dark chocolate.

'Dark chocolates' should be singular 'dark chocolate' when referring to the type or flavor in general.

× Trouble is that I have higher percentage of cocoa in it.

✓ The trouble is that it has a higher percentage of cocoa in it.

The sentence lacks a subject and proper quantifier. 'I have higher percentage' is incorrect; it should be 'it has a higher percentage'.

× Well, the primary reason chocolates are famous is because it's. Used in gift more often than not.

✓ Well, the primary reason chocolates are famous is because they are used as gifts more often than not.

'It's' is singular and incorrect here; 'chocolates' is plural, so 'they are' should be used. Also, 'used in gift' should be 'used as gifts'.

× It symbolizes. An active. Transferring values to the person you love. Yeah.

✓ It symbolizes an active transfer of values to the person you love.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It is corrected to a complete and clear sentence.