巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Apni answer e clear topic sentence dite paren, ar sentence gula ke sohoje bujha jabe emon vabe structure korte hobe. Apnar answer e kichu grammar ar clarity problem ache, ar sentence gula onek confusing. Apni chesta korun simple ar clear sentence use korte, jate apnar opinion bhalo vabe express hoy.

示例: I used to like eating chocolate when I was a child, but now I don't enjoy it as much because my taste has changed.

建议: Apnar answer e sentence structure ar word choice improve korte hobe. Apni frequency er kotha bolte paren, ar supporting details clear vabe dite paren. Linking words use korle answer ta aro logical hobe.

示例: I usually eat chocolate a few times a week, especially when I go out or visit friends, because I find it enjoyable.

建议: Apnar answer e grammar ar vocabulary improve korte hobe. Apni direct question er uttor dite paren, ar supporting details clear ar specific hote hobe. Linking words use korle answer ta bhalo hobe.

示例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I loved it. I especially liked mango and apple flavored chocolates that I bought from shops.

建议: Apni answer e clear topic sentence dite paren, ar supporting details logical ar relevant hote hobe. Grammar ar vocabulary improve korte hobe. Linking words use korle answer ta aro coherent hobe.

示例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many children enjoy its sweet taste. Additionally, chocolate production supports the economy in many countries.

建议: Apni answer e clear topic sentence dite paren, ar vocabulary ar grammar improve korte hobe. Apni specific ar relevant words use korben, ar sentence gula ke sohoje bujha jabe emon vabe structure korben.

示例: I like many flavors of chocolate, but my favorite is mango flavor because it tastes unique and delicious to me.

建议: Apnar answer bhalo, kintu kichu spelling ar word choice error ache (e.g., 'conceit' should be 'suitable' or 'common'). Apni chesta korun spelling ar vocabulary bhalo vabe use korte, ar sentence gula ke aro natural korte.

示例: Yes, I think giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea because many people love it. For example, chocolates are often given during holidays to show appreciation and bring happiness.

× Actually depends on my mind.

✓ Actually, it depends on my mind.

The sentence lacks a subject. In English, sentences need a subject, so 'it' is necessary here to indicate what depends on your mind.

× When I was a child I always liked eating chocolate but now I am going up and I will buy.

✓ When I was a child, I always liked eating chocolate but now I am growing up and I will buy it.

The phrase 'I am going up' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I am growing up' to indicate maturing. Also, 'I will buy' needs an object, so 'it' is added.

× And this time I do not like eating chocolate, so this is very embarrassing for me.

✓ And now I do not like eating chocolate, so this is very embarrassing for me.

'This time' is better replaced with 'now' to indicate the current situation. The rest is correct.

× Actually I eat chocolate were in.

✓ Actually, I eat chocolate sometimes.

The phrase 'were in' is incorrect and unclear. 'Sometimes' is a better adverb to express frequency.

× At times of week, but most probably when I go outside for visiting or doing something, I eat chocolate in.

✓ At times during the week, but most probably when I go outside for visiting or doing something, I eat chocolate.

'At times of week' should be 'at times during the week'. Also, 'eat chocolate in' is incorrect; 'eat chocolate' suffices.

× This is very much interesting for me.

✓ This is very interesting for me.

'Very much interesting' is incorrect; the correct form is 'very interesting'.

× Obviously when I was a kid I, uh, I had chocolate because I loved this very much and in this past period of my time I it chocolate from a shops like mango flavor, apple flavor.

✓ Obviously, when I was a kid, I had chocolate because I loved it very much and during that time I got chocolate from shops with flavors like mango and apple.

The sentence has missing words and incorrect structure. 'I it chocolate' is incorrect; 'I got chocolate' is better. Also, 'a shops' should be 'shops'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Actually it depends on a children's satisfaction because in on the world there are a lot of children's who love to eat chocolate.

✓ Actually, it depends on children's satisfaction because in the world there are a lot of children who love to eat chocolate.

'Children's' is possessive and incorrect here; the plural 'children' is correct. Also, 'in on the world' is incorrect; 'in the world' is correct.

× So I think chocolate is very important for our world and it also help to improve our economical growth.

✓ So I think chocolate is very important for our world and it also helps to improve our economic growth.

'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Economical' is an adjective meaning related to economy but 'economic' is the correct adjective for growth.

× So I think this is.

✓ So I think this is true.

The sentence is incomplete and needs an object or complement to be complete.

× There are lots of flavor of chocolate in my judging list, but uh, but especially I like to mango flavor chocolate because it's flavor is very a glorious and interesting for me.

✓ There are lots of flavors of chocolate in my judging list, but especially I like mango flavor chocolate because its flavor is very glorious and interesting for me.

'Flavor' should be plural 'flavors' because of 'lots of'. 'Like to mango flavor chocolate' is incorrect; 'like mango flavor chocolate' is correct. 'It's flavor' should be 'its flavor' (possessive). 'Very a glorious' is incorrect; 'very glorious' is correct.

× Yes, I think using chocolate as gift is a great idea.

✓ Yes, I think using chocolate as a gift is a great idea.

The noun 'gift' needs the article 'a' before it.

× Chocolate is widely loved and conceit many occasions.

✓ Chocolate is widely loved and used on many occasions.

'Conceit' is incorrect here; likely the intended word is 'used' or 'given'. The sentence is corrected accordingly.