巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more coherent and natural by combining related ideas into complete sentences. Avoid sentence fragments and ensure your answer flows logically. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

示例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it is sweet and irresistible. I usually buy it from supermarkets or grocery stores and enjoy it whenever I have free time or when I am feeling down.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains some confusing phrases. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and focus on giving specific examples.

示例: I don't eat chocolate very often, but I usually have it when my friends give it to me on their birthdays or special occasions. Sometimes, they bring chocolates when they visit different places.

建议: Try to improve sentence structure and grammar by using correct tenses and avoiding repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your answer more coherent and natural.

示例: When I was a kid, I liked chocolate a lot because my parents often bought it for me. Since I didn't like eating other foods, they gave me chocolate frequently, and I really enjoyed it during my childhood.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and better linking. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to connect your points. Also, avoid vague phrases and explain your ideas more precisely.

示例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a unique sweet taste and a pleasant texture. Moreover, some ingredients in chocolate can make people feel happy, which is why many enjoy eating it.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by making sentences more fluent and avoiding repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it contains less sugar and has a slightly bitter taste combined with a little sweetness, which appeals to my appetite. Therefore, I usually choose dark chocolate whenever I want some.

建议: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your answer logical. Also, avoid sentence fragments and ensure your answer is concise.

示例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift because many people like it and enjoy eating it occasionally. Therefore, giving different varieties of chocolate can be a great choice when you are unsure what to gift someone.

× Yes, I do like eating chocolates as they are so sweet and I cannot resist them, so I usually have them whenever I get time from.

✓ Yes, I do like eating chocolate as it is so sweet and I cannot resist it, so I usually have it whenever I get time.

The word 'chocolates' is plural but here it refers to chocolate in general, which is uncountable, so 'chocolate' (singular) is correct. Also, 'them' should be 'it' to agree with the singular noun 'chocolate'.

× My work or other schedule.

✓ My work or other schedule.

This is a sentence fragment without a verb. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased to form a complete sentence.

× Buying them from the Super store or grocery markets.

✓ I buy them from the supermarket or grocery stores.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. It should be a complete sentence with subject and verb.

× I usually have them whenever I get time from.

✓ I usually have them whenever I get time from my work or other schedule.

The preposition 'from' is misplaced and incomplete. It should be followed by the source, e.g., 'from my work or other schedule'.

× I don't usually eat chocolate but whenever I get them from my friends.

✓ I don't usually eat chocolate but whenever I get it from my friends.

'Chocolate' is uncountable and singular here, so 'it' should be used instead of 'them'. Also, 'eat chocolate' is correct, not 'eat chocolates'.

× Whenever it's their birthday or other kind of occasions such as they usually bring me whenever they are out of.

✓ Whenever it's their birthday or other kinds of occasions, they usually bring me some.

The original sentence is incomplete and confusing. It needs restructuring to be clear and grammatically correct.

× Down visiting different places and whenever there is some kind of special autism I have them at that.

✓ When they are visiting different places or whenever there is some kind of special occasion, I have some then.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Autism' is incorrect here; likely 'occasion' was intended. The sentence needs to be restructured for clarity.

× When I was kid I usually like chocolate and I used to have them a lot as my parents used to bought them for me and as I didn't.

✓ When I was a kid, I usually liked chocolate and I used to have it a lot as my parents used to buy it for me and as I didn't.

'Was kid' should be 'was a kid'. 'Usually like' should be past tense 'usually liked' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'Used to bought' is incorrect; 'used to buy' is correct. 'Them' should be 'it' for uncountable 'chocolate'. Sentence is incomplete and needs continuation.

× Like to eat other things.

✓ like to eat other things.

This is a sentence fragment; it should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased to form a complete sentence.

× So they bought me chocolate and I used to like them a lot.

✓ So they bought me chocolate and I used to like it a lot.

'Them' should be 'it' because 'chocolate' is uncountable and singular.

× So I had them a lot in my childhood, so I enjoyed it.

✓ So I had it a lot in my childhood, so I enjoyed it.

'Them' should be 'it' for uncountable 'chocolate'.

× Chocolate is popular around the world because of its unique taste as it is sweet and have a good texture so enjoying it is very much.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world because of its unique taste as it is sweet and has a good texture, so enjoying it is very pleasant.

'Chocolate' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. The phrase 'so enjoying it is very much' is awkward and unclear; 'very pleasant' or similar is better.

× So a full for the people and the ingredient in the chocolate also make your hormones happy so people around the world like eating it.

✓ It is also fulfilling for people, and the ingredients in chocolate make your hormones happy, so people around the world like eating it.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'So a full for the people' is incorrect; 'fulfilling' is appropriate. Subject-verb agreement corrected in 'ingredients... make'. Sentence restructured for clarity.

× I like the dark chocolate so much as it does not contain much sugar and it is kind of bitter as well as with a combination of little bit of sweetness which is appealing for my appetite and.

✓ I like dark chocolate so much as it does not contain much sugar and it is kind of bitter as well as having a combination of a little bit of sweetness which is appealing to my appetite.

'The dark chocolate' can be 'dark chocolate' generally. 'With a combination' should be 'having a combination'. 'Little bit' needs article 'a little bit'. 'Appealing for' should be 'appealing to'. Sentence was incomplete and needed correction.

× I like it so much so I usually have dark chocolate whenever I want them.

✓ I like it so much, so I usually have dark chocolate whenever I want it.

'Dark chocolate' is uncountable singular, so 'them' should be 'it'.

× Yes, I think it is good to use chocolate as gift to others as many people like chocolate and enjoy having them from time to time.

✓ Yes, I think it is good to use chocolate as a gift to others as many people like chocolate and enjoy having it from time to time.

'Gift' is countable, so it needs the article 'a'. 'Them' should be 'it' for uncountable 'chocolate'.

× So gifting them different varieties of chocolate might be one of the best of sun whenever you are in dilemma of what to give them for their.

✓ So gifting different varieties of chocolate might be one of the best options whenever you are in a dilemma about what to give them for their.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Best of sun' is incorrect; likely 'best options' intended. 'In dilemma' should be 'in a dilemma'. Sentence needs completion.

× OK, zones.

✓ occasions.

'OK, zones' is incorrect and unclear. Likely intended word is 'occasions'.