记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief reason and an example. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Use linking words like 'but' or 'because' to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I used to be better at memorising, but these days I find it harder because I'm busier and more distracted. For example, I often forget small tasks when I'm juggling work and family responsibilities.

建议: Answer directly and give a specific example. Use one or two supporting details and a linking word like 'so' or 'therefore' to show cause and effect. Keep sentences short and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, I have. When I was a student I once missed an assignment deadline because I forgot it, so I started writing important tasks in a notebook to remind myself.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence naming what you must remember, then add one or two precise details (times, routines). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'especially' to clarify. Remove filler words and fragmented phrases.

示例: I need to remember school pickup and drop-off times, especially mornings at 8:00 and afternoons at 3:30. For example, if I forget the pickup time my children have to wait at school, which causes a lot of stress.

建议: State your main method first, then briefly explain why it works and give one specific example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and avoid broken sentences.

示例: I use my phone—Google Calendar and Google Keep—to remember important things because they send reminders and are always with me. For example, I set an alert for parent-teacher meetings and never miss them because of the notification.

× I used to be able to memorize something. Well, but now. I I find it hard to memorize something because I'm getting older.

✓ I used to be able to memorize things, but now I find it hard to memorize things because I'm getting older.

The original contains sentence fragments and inconsistent number (something -> things). 'Used to' indicates past habit so keep past context then contrast with present using 'but now'. Remove the fragment 'Well, but now.' and duplicate 'I'. Use 'things' (plural) for general objects to match common English usage. Also maintain present simple 'find' for current state and present continuous 'am getting' for ongoing change.

× Yes, many times when I was when I was young, I realized that I could forget important things.

✓ Yes, many times when I was young, I realized that I could forget important things.

The original repeats 'when I was' causing redundancy. Remove the duplicate to form a correct past-time clause. 'Realized' and 'could' are correct past tense/modal forms for the meaning.

× So at that time, from at that time, I write important thing in my note.

✓ So at that time I wrote important things in my notebook.

The sentence repeats 'at that time' and uses incorrect tense and singular count. Use past simple 'wrote' to match 'at that time'. Use plural 'important things' for general items and 'notebook' or 'note' as a noun; 'in my note' is unnatural—'in my notebook' or 'in my notes' is correct. Remove redundant phrase 'from at that time'.

× These days my important thing is time when I need to drop my children off at school and pick children them up at school. Is my. Worked to only I have to do.

✓ These days the most important thing is the time when I need to drop my children off at school and pick them up. It is the only work I have to do at that time.

Original has word order and article errors and fragments. Use 'the most important thing' to express priority. 'Pick children them up' has incorrect pronoun order—use 'pick them up'. 'Is my. Worked to only I have to do.' is ungrammatical; rewrite as 'It is the only work I have to do at that time' or simpler 'That's the only thing I have to do then.' Match present simple for routines.

× Actually I tried to write every important thing in my phone such as Google Calendar and Google Notes. It is really efficient. Tools because I always say and. See easily.

✓ Actually I try to write every important thing in my phone using Google Calendar and Google Keep. It is really efficient because I can access it easily.

Original mixes past 'tried' with present meaning; use present simple 'try' for habitual action or 'I try to write' or 'I write'. 'Google Notes' is better as 'Google Keep'. 'It is really efficient. Tools because I always say and. See easily.' contains fragments and unclear words. Replace with 'It is really efficient because I can access it easily.' Use 'access' not 'see' and correct sentence flow. If speaker meant past attempt, 'I tried' could be kept with past consequences.