记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct nouns and articles (memories → memorising things; telephone numbers → my closest friends' telephone numbers). Reduce hesitation words (uh) and slightly shorten explanation to 2–3 clear sentences. Use one linking phrase to connect example (For example, …).

示例: Yes, I'm good at memorising things. For example, I can easily remember my closest friends' telephone numbers because I create mental images and connect the digits visually, which helps me recall the numbers quickly.

建议: Clarify timeline and cause-effect with correct grammar and concise structure. Start with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words (because, as a result). Avoid unclear phrases (in the end of the turn).

示例: Yes. Last year I forgot to submit an online test because I did not add the deadline to my calendar. As a result, I missed the deadline and my overall grade for the course dropped significantly.

建议: Use correct pluralization and articles (every days → every day; take pills → take my pills). Make the sequence clear with linking words (so, therefore) and correct time expressions (at specific times). Avoid irrelevant or incorrect time zones (Pacific times) unless intended.

示例: I need to remember to take my pills every day because I sometimes miss a dose. Therefore, I set reminders in my calendar at specific times so I don't forget to take them.

建议: Produce a clear topic sentence then one supporting detail. Use correct verbs and time phrases (set reminders to notify me an hour before). Avoid hesitation and awkward phrases (make some opportunities). Include a specific example of the tool or method used.

示例: I usually add important tasks and events to my calendar and set reminders to notify me an hour before. For example, I use my phone's calendar app to receive an alert so I have enough time to prepare.

× Yes, I'm quite good at memories and things.

✓ Yes, I'm quite good at memorising things.

The student used the plural noun 'memories' where a gerund or noun 'memorising' (ability) fits the meaning of being skilled at the activity. Use 'memorising' to describe the skill. Suggestion: use gerund forms (verb+ing) to express abilities, e.g., 'good at memorising'.

× For example, I can easily remember my closest friends telephone numbers.

✓ For example, I can easily remember my closest friend's telephone number.

Possessive form and singular/plural agreement are needed. If referring to one closest friend, use 'closest friend's'. If multiple friends and multiple numbers, use 'closest friends' telephone numbers'. Also include the article in 'telephone number' as appropriate. Suggestion: decide singular or plural and add apostrophe for possession.

× Uh, I develop my own skills by uh, creating a virtual image and the digital connections between the each numbers so that I can recall the telephone number so quickly and clearly.

✓ I develop my skills by creating a mental image and digital connections between the numbers so that I can recall telephone numbers quickly and clearly.

Problems: unnecessary filler words, incorrect article 'the each numbers', awkward noun 'virtual image' for mental memory, and repetition 'so'. Corrected to 'mental image' and 'between the numbers'. Also removed redundant 'so' before 'quickly'. Suggestion: remove fillers, use correct determiners ('the' vs 'each'), and use concise phrasing.

× Yes, last year I forgot to submit a online test that I because I forgot to add a deadline to my calendar reminders.

✓ Yes, last year I forgot to submit an online test because I forgot to add the deadline to my calendar reminders.

Errors: incorrect article 'a online' should be 'an online' and extra words 'that I' are incorrect. Also 'a deadline' vs 'the deadline' depends on context; here 'the deadline' is clearer. Suggestion: remove stray words and use correct indefinite article 'an' before vowel sound.

× So in the end of the turn this is my overall grades was so bad.

✓ So in the end my overall grades were very bad.

Problems: incorrect phrase 'end of the turn', wrong word order, subject-verb agreement ('grades' plural requires 'were'), and awkward 'so bad'. Corrected to 'in the end' and 'were very bad'. Suggestion: use 'in the end' and match plural subject with plural verb.

× I need to remember to take my pills every days because I often forget to take one of the doses during the week.

✓ I need to remember to take my pills every day because I often forget to take one of the doses during the week.

Error: 'every days' is incorrect; use 'every day' (adverbial phrase) or 'every day' singular. 'Pills' plural is fine. Suggestion: use 'every day' for daily frequency.

× So to avoid these situations happens, I put the reminders in my calendars to remind me to take pills at the Pacific times.

✓ So to avoid these situations, I put reminders in my calendar to remind me to take my pills at Pacific Time.

Errors: 'these situations happens' is ungrammatical (redundant verb), plural 'calendars' may be singular 'calendar', missing possessive 'my pills', and 'Pacific times' should be 'Pacific Time' (time zone). Suggestion: remove extra verb, use consistent singular/plural, and use correct time zone name.

× I usually put an important text and events on my calendars and set the deadline times, uh remind me about an hour ago so that I can have enough time to react and make some opportunities.

✓ I usually put important texts and events on my calendar and set deadlines to remind me about an hour before so that I have enough time to react and take advantage of opportunities.

Multiple issues: 'an important text' is awkward — use 'important texts' or 'an important text message'; 'calendars' -> 'calendar' is more natural; 'set the deadline times' -> 'set deadlines'; 'remind me about an hour ago' incorrect tense and direction — use 'about an hour before'; 'make some opportunities' unnatural — use 'take advantage of opportunities'. Suggestion: use plural/singular consistently, correct time expressions, and choose idiomatic verbs like 'take advantage of'.