记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, kind of), correct grammar (use gerunds/nouns correctly), and give one specific supporting detail with a linking phrase. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I’m fairly good at memorising academic material. For example, I can learn math formulas quickly, but in everyday life I often misplace things, so I rely on notes to help me.

建议: Use past tense consistently and structure the response: state the event, explain feelings, and end with the outcome. Remove redundant words and avoid conflicting adverbs (luckily fortunately).

示例: Yes, once I forgot my keys at a restaurant and I felt very nervous because I couldn't get into my flat. Fortunately, the staff found them and returned them to me later.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and two specific, well-formed examples. Remove disfluencies and correct grammar (e.g., remember to + verb, teacher taught us). Use a linking phrase to separate study and daily-life points.

示例: As a student I need to remember study-related facts and daily chores. For instance, I must memorise key formulas my teacher taught, and I also keep track of dates for doing laundry and other household tasks.

建议: Organize into a clear comparison (past vs present), use correct verb forms, and finish the example. Avoid minor word choice errors (tap into an app). Keep it concise and specific about apps or methods.

示例: I used to write important tasks in a notebook, but now I rely on my phone because it’s more convenient. I use a reminder app to set alarms for deadlines, such as assignment submission dates.

× Kind of. In study, I'm the person who is good at memorizing things.

✓ Kind of. In my studies, I'm the person who is good at memorizing things.

Missing possessive and plural form: 'In study' is incorrect; use 'in my studies' to indicate the subject area. 'Study' here should be plural or the phrase needs a determiner. This keeps present tense and meaning intact.

× Uh, for example, I can memorize the math formula very easily, but in real life I'm not good at memory writing things because I easily lost many things.

✓ For example, I can memorize math formulas very easily, but in real life I'm not good at remembering things because I easily lose many things.

Multiple issues: 'the math formula' should be plural or generic 'math formulas'. 'Memory writing things' is ungrammatical; use the gerund 'remembering things'. 'I easily lost' mixes past with present; use present 'I easily lose' to match overall meaning.

× Yes, I've forgotten my keys in the restaurant once time and it makes me nervous and was very terrible.

✓ Yes, I once forgot my keys in a restaurant and it made me very nervous.

Use simple past 'forgot' or present perfect with correct time expression; 'once time' is redundant — use 'once'. 'In the restaurant' -> 'in a restaurant'. 'It makes me nervous and was very terrible' mixes tenses and uses weak phrasing; use past 'made me very nervous'.

× Luckily fortunately we found it eventually.

✓ Fortunately, we found them eventually.

Redundant adverbs 'luckily fortunately' — choose one. 'It' refers to keys (plural), so use 'them'. Add comma after adverb and use past tense 'found' to match event.

× As a student, there are a lot of things that have to remember.

✓ As a student, there are a lot of things that I have to remember.

Missing subject 'I' in the relative clause; 'have to remember' needs a subject. The sentence structure requires 'that I have to remember'.

× For example, I in study I have to remember the uh, math formula and many knowledge the teach teacher taught taught us.

✓ For example, in my studies I have to remember math formulas and much of the knowledge the teacher taught us.

Fix word order ('in my studies I...'), pluralize 'formula' to 'formulas', use 'much of the knowledge' instead of 'many knowledge', and remove repeated word 'teach'/'taught'. Keep present tense for habitual action.

× And in everyday life I have to remember the date about when I have to umm, wash my clothes and.

✓ And in everyday life I have to remember the dates when I need to wash my clothes.

Remove filler and incomplete ending. Use plural 'dates' if multiple occasions, and 'when I need to' is clearer than 'about when I have to'. Complete the sentence.

× Before I had a phone, I used a notebook to write down important things so I wouldn't forgot them.

✓ Before I had a phone, I used a notebook to write down important things so I wouldn't forget them.

Use base form 'forget' after auxiliary 'would' (would + base verb). 'Wouldn't forgot' incorrectly uses past form.

× But now I use my mobile phone because it's much more convenient.

✓ But now I use my mobile phone because it's much more convenient.

Sentence is correct; included for completeness. Present tense correctly expresses current habit.

× I can tap not into an app and set reminders or alarms that notify me at the right time.

✓ I can tap into an app and set reminders or alarms that notify me at the right time.

'Tap not into' is incorrect word order; remove 'not'. 'Tap into an app' is the correct phrasing for using an app.

× For example, I always use that to notify me when I have to submit my.

✓ For example, I always use it to notify me when I have to submit my work.

Incomplete sentence: 'submit my' is missing an object. Replace 'that' with 'it' (referring to the app) and add 'work' or the appropriate noun to complete the sentence.