记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，如“not good to remember”应为“not good at remembering”，且表达略显冗长。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意介词搭配。

示例: No, I'm not very good at remembering things, so I usually make plans or schedules on my phone and check them whenever I need to.

建议: 回答中有语法和表达错误，如“a in primary school”应为“in primary school”，“let me to hand out this money”表达不清晰。建议使用更准确的时态和表达，避免重复，增强句子连贯性。

示例: Yes, when I was in primary school, I forgot to bring money to buy a book. Fortunately, my classmate lent me some money, and I was very grateful. I returned the money to her later.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然，如“deadline about”不完整，“closer friend's birthday”应为“close friend's birthday”。建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构，避免重复，提升表达流畅度。

示例: As a college student, I need to remember deadlines for my assignments. Also, I try to remember the birthdays of my close friends and family so I can prepare gifts for them, which I think is important.

建议: 回答中有较多语气词“uh”，影响流畅性。建议减少填充词，使用更简洁自然的表达，同时可以增加细节说明以丰富内容。

示例: I usually make notes on my mobile phone and check my schedule anytime and anywhere. This method is very useful and convenient for me.

× No, to be honest I'm not good to remember some things, so I usually need to make some plans or schedule on my mobile phone and I need to browse them everywhere and every anytime.

✓ No, to be honest I'm not good at remembering some things, so I usually need to make some plans or schedules on my mobile phone and I need to check them everywhere and anytime.

这里“good to remember”用法错误，正确表达是“good at remembering”，表示擅长做某事。"schedule"应为复数形式"schedules"，因为通常指多个计划。"browse"用法不当，改为"check"更合适，且"every anytime"应为"anytime"。

× Yes, when I was a in primary school I forgot to take the money to pay for the book.

✓ Yes, when I was in primary school I forgot to take the money to pay for the book.

句中"a in primary school"中"a"多余，应去掉。

× But that time my classmate gave me some money let me to hand out this money so I appreciate about her and I return the money to her.

✓ But that time my classmate gave me some money to let me hand out this money, so I appreciate her and I returned the money to her.

"let me to hand out"中"to"不应出现，应为"let me hand out"。"appreciate about her"错误，正确用法是"appreciate her"。"return"时态应与过去事件一致，改为"returned"。

× Uh, nowadays I'm a college student, so I need to remember the deadline about.

✓ Uh, nowadays I'm a college student, so I need to remember the deadline.

"deadline about"中"about"多余，应去掉。

× I need to finish my professional assignment, and in my daily life, I think I need to remember my closer friend's birthday and my family birthday.

✓ I need to finish my professional assignment, and in my daily life, I think I need to remember my close friend's birthday and my family's birthday.

"closer friend"应为形容词"close friend"。"my family birthday"应为所有格形式"my family's birthday"。

× I need to prepare the gift for these people.

✓ I need to prepare gifts for these people.

"the gift"改为复数"gifts"更符合语境，因为是为多个人准备礼物。

× I usually, uh, make the notes in my mobile phone and I could, uh, browse the schedule, uh, any time and anywhere.

✓ I usually, uh, make notes on my mobile phone and I can, uh, check the schedule anytime and anywhere.

"make the notes in my mobile phone"中"the"多余，改为"make notes on my mobile phone"更自然。"could"改为表示习惯的现在时态"can"。"browse the schedule"改为"check the schedule"更合适。"any time and anywhere"合并为"anytime and anywhere"。