记忆— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Are you good at memorising things?
考生
Oh no, The thing is I have something wrong with my breathing so I I sometimes I feel the brain lacks of oxygen so which leads to the poor memory.
考官
Have you ever forgotten something important?
考生
Actually no, because just because I am a person who is bad at memorizing, I will put everything that is necessary and is important on my phone. So umm, make some notes, you know, so I wouldn't forget something like that.
考官
What do you need to remember in your daily life?
考生
Umm, that's a lot of things to remember, like the time for the AUS examination, the time for the school lectures and umm, friends birthdays. That's a lot of things.
考官
How do you remember important things?
考生
So like I've just mentioned, I will put them in my phone. For example, I make some notes of my friend's birthday or the time for the comic examinations, umm in my form to remind me of those necessary and important things to make sure I won't forget about them.
评估
总分
Part 1
Are you good at memorising things?
分数: 55.0建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且内容重复。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并且更自然地表达原因。
示例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things because sometimes I have breathing problems, which makes me feel like my brain doesn't get enough oxygen, leading to poor memory.
Have you ever forgotten something important?
分数: 65.0建议: 回答中有重复和口语填充词，表达不够简洁。建议去除多余词汇，使用更连贯的句子表达。
示例: Actually, I haven't forgotten anything important because I usually put all necessary information on my phone and make notes to remind myself.
What do you need to remember in your daily life?
分数: 60.0建议: 回答中有重复和口语填充词，且内容较简单。建议使用连接词丰富句子结构，并具体说明记忆内容的重要性。
示例: There are many things I need to remember daily, such as the dates of the AUS examination, school lectures, and my friends' birthdays, all of which are important to me.
How do you remember important things?
分数: 65.0建议: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，使用连接词使表达更连贯。
示例: As I mentioned, I use my phone to remember important things. For example, I make notes of my friends' birthdays and exam dates to ensure I don't forget them.
语法
× Oh no, The thing is I have something wrong with my breathing so I I sometimes I feel the brain lacks of oxygen so which leads to the poor memory.
✓ Oh no, the thing is I have something wrong with my breathing, so sometimes I feel my brain lacks oxygen, which leads to poor memory.
这里的错误主要是动词形式和句子结构问题。'lacks of oxygen' 应改为 'lacks oxygen'，因为 'lack' 后面直接接名词，不用介词 'of'。另外，句子中多余的 'I' 需要删除，句子应更流畅。建议简化句子结构，避免重复。
× Actually no, because just because I am a person who is bad at memorizing, I will put everything that is necessary and is important on my phone.
✓ Actually no, because I am a person who is bad at memorizing, I will put everything that is necessary and important into my phone.
介词使用错误，'put ... on my phone' 应改为 'put ... into my phone'，表示将信息存入手机中。'just because' 重复使用，应去掉一个。
× So like I've just mentioned, I will put them in my phone.
✓ So like I've just mentioned, I will put them into my phone.
同样是介词使用错误，'put them in my phone' 应改为 'put them into my phone'，表示将内容存入手机。
× For example, I make some notes of my friend's birthday or the time for the comic examinations, umm in my form to remind me of those necessary and important things to make sure I won't forget about them.
✓ For example, I make some notes of my friend's birthday or the time for the comic examinations, umm in my phone to remind me of those necessary and important things to make sure I won't forget them.
这里 'in my form' 应为 'in my phone'，可能是口误或拼写错误。另外，'forget about them' 中 'about' 多余，'forget them' 更准确。
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