记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as "when I was still a student" repeated twice. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, for example, "However" is good, but you could add "For example" before your specific instance. Try to use more varied vocabulary like "retain information" instead of "memorize" to show range.

示例: I used to be good at retaining information when I was a student. However, as an adult, my memory has become a bit foggy. For example, during my nursing studies, I could easily memorize all the parts of the body thanks to anatomy and physiology courses.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but lacks coherence and contains some grammatical errors. Use linking words like "but" and "because" properly to connect ideas. Also, avoid fragmented sentences like "But then I think." Try to be more specific about what distracted you and how it caused you to forget. This will make your answer more natural and effective.

示例: Yes, I recently forgot about boiling an egg. I had set a timer for 12 minutes to remind me, but then something else came to mind, and I had to rush out, so I ended up forgetting about the egg.

建议: Your answer is relevant and provides specific details, but it could be more structured and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words like "because" and "so". Also, avoid abrupt transitions like "But then"; instead, use "Therefore" or "So". Try to use more precise vocabulary, for example, "manage" is good, but "organize" or "coordinate" could add variety.

示例: In my daily life, I need to remember our family schedule because, as a mother, I coordinate the activities of my husband and three children, which can be quite overwhelming. Therefore, I use a calendar to keep everything organized.

建议: Your answer is clear but could be more fluent and grammatically correct. Avoid awkward phrases like "so then I won't able to forget it 'cause it our calendar pops up." Instead, say "so I won't forget because the calendar reminds me." Use linking words like "for example" effectively and try to vary your sentence structures to sound more natural.

示例: Whenever I have an important event coming up, I add it to our calendar. For example, if my child has a doctor's appointment, I make sure to enter it so I won't forget, as the calendar sends me reminders.

× Yes I did. I've forgotten something important recently when I tried to boil an egg.

✓ Yes I did. I forgot something important recently when I tried to boil an egg.

The present perfect tense 'I've forgotten' is not appropriate here because the action is completed and specific in the past, indicated by 'recently' and the context. The simple past 'I forgot' is correct for a specific past event.

× Actually I set a timer for 12 minutes and so that I won't forget it that I am cooking an egg.

✓ Actually, I set a timer for 12 minutes so that I wouldn't forget that I was cooking an egg.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect modal verb usage. 'So that I won't forget it that I am cooking an egg' is incorrect. The correct form is 'so that I wouldn't forget that I was cooking an egg' to express purpose in the past.

× But then I think. Something came to my mind and I need to rush going somewhere.

✓ But then I thought of something and needed to rush somewhere.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'I think' should be past tense 'I thought' to match the past context. 'I need to rush going somewhere' is awkward; 'needed to rush somewhere' is correct.

× In my daily life I need to remember our daily schedule because as a mother I manage almost everyone's schedule from my husband to my 3 kids activities which is so overwhelming for me.

✓ In my daily life, I need to remember our daily schedule because, as a mother, I manage almost everyone's schedule, from my husband to my 3 kids' activities, which is so overwhelming for me.

The phrase 'my 3 kids activities' lacks possessive form. It should be 'my 3 kids' activities' to correctly indicate possession. Also, commas improve clarity.

× But then I try to use calendar.

✓ But then I try to use a calendar.

The noun 'calendar' requires an article 'a' here. Without it, the sentence is incomplete. Also, 'try to use a calendar' is the correct phrase.

× Every time that I know that there is an important thing coming up, I put it in the calendar.

✓ Every time I know there is an important event coming up, I put it in the calendar.

'Important thing' is vague; 'important event' is more natural. Also, 'that' after 'Every time' is unnecessary and can be omitted for smoother flow.

× For example, my child has an appointment with the doctor that's already set.

✓ For example, my child has an appointment with the doctor that is already set.

The contraction 'that's' is informal and can be confusing here. Expanding to 'that is' clarifies the sentence.

× I will try to put it in our calendar so then I won't able to forget it 'cause it our calendar pops up.

✓ I will try to put it in our calendar so that I won't be able to forget it because our calendar pops up.

The phrase 'I won't able to forget it' is missing the verb 'be' and should be 'I won't be able to forget it'. Also, 'cause' should be 'because' for formal correctness. 'It our calendar pops up' is missing 'because' or 'since' to connect the clauses properly.