记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 文法の誤りや繰り返しを避け、より自然で簡潔な表現を心がけましょう。例えば、過去形の使い方や不要な単語の削除に注意してください。

示例: Yes, I am good at memorising things. For example, I successfully memorised a lot of information for my university entrance exam.

建议: 答えが不完全で文法的にも不自然です。具体的な例を挙げて、文を完結にし、繰り返しを避けましょう。

示例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, sometimes my supervisor tells me tasks when I enter the office, but I forget them later.

建议: 内容は良いですが、繰り返しや冗長な表現を減らし、接続詞を使って文を滑らかにしましょう。

示例: In my daily life, I need to remember my upcoming tasks. At work, my supervisor often gives me important instructions, so I sometimes make notes to help me remember.

建议: 文中の不要な単語や誤りを修正し、より明確で自然な表現を使いましょう。

示例: I usually make notes on my phone to remember important things, and I try to complete tasks as soon as possible so I don't forget my supervisor's instructions.

× I think I'm good at memorizing things because when I take a took a exam for entrance to university, I had to memorize many things, but I succeeded.

✓ I think I'm good at memorizing things because when I took an exam for entrance to university, I had to memorize many things, but I succeeded.

The phrase 'take a took a exam' contains a past tense error and article error. 'Took' is the past tense of 'take', so 'take a took a exam' is incorrect. The correct past tense verb is 'took'. Also, 'exam' is a singular noun starting with a vowel sound, so the article should be 'an' instead of 'a'. The corrected sentence uses 'took an exam'.

× I've forgotten many things. Important important things.

✓ I've forgotten many important things.

The original sentence is fragmented and repeats the word 'important' unnecessarily. Combining the two sentences into one clear sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× When I walk in, supervisor tells me something important but I forget so I have had to.

✓ When I walk in, the supervisor tells me something important, but I forget, so I have to.

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'supervisor'. Also, 'have had to' is incorrect in this context; the correct modal verb phrase is 'have to' to express obligation. Additionally, commas are added for clarity.

× In my daily life, I do need to remember what I need to do next. In my work, my supervisor tells me to do something very important, so I sometimes I make a note to help me remember.

✓ In my daily life, I do need to remember what I need to do next. At work, my supervisor tells me to do something very important, so sometimes I make a note to help me remember.

The phrase 'In my work' is better expressed as 'At work' to indicate the place of work. Also, the sentence had an unnecessary repetition of 'I' before 'make a note'. Removing the extra 'I' improves sentence flow.

× I sometimes make a note in my phone to help me remember Bella and often I do the things as soon as possible not to forget the things that supervisor tells me.

✓ I sometimes make a note in my phone to help me remember, and often I do the things as soon as possible so I don't forget the things that the supervisor tells me.

The original sentence is confusing due to the word 'Bella' which seems out of context and likely a mistake. It is removed for clarity. Also, 'not to forget' is better expressed as 'so I don't forget' for naturalness. The definite article 'the' is added before 'supervisor'. Commas and conjunctions are adjusted for better sentence structure.