记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽고 내용이 명확하지만, 문장 구조가 다소 길고 중복되는 표현이 있습니다. 좀 더 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 구성하며, 연결어를 사용해 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 강화하세요.

示例: I'm not very good at memorising things because I often forget information shortly after hearing it. For example, I can't remember exact dates like my friends' birthdays or weddings, so I always double-check in advance.

建议: 답변이 구체적이고 자연스럽지만, 문장 연결이 조금 더 명확하면 좋겠습니다. 'For example' 외에도 다양한 연결어를 사용해 내용을 풍부하게 표현하세요.

示例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, I missed utility bill due dates and sometimes left my wallet or umbrella behind. Most recently, I forgot my front door password and had to call my younger sibling for help.

建议: 답변이 구체적이고 논리적이지만, 연결어 사용을 통해 문장 간 흐름을 더 자연스럽게 만들 수 있습니다. 또한, 다양한 어휘를 활용해 표현을 풍부하게 하세요.

示例: I need to remember many things daily, but the most important is my payday because that's when my bank balance is highest. Also, remembering my family's birthdays is crucial; otherwise, they might feel upset.

建议: 답변이 매우 자연스럽고 구체적이며, 문장 구조도 잘 구성되어 있습니다. 다만, 연결어를 조금 더 다양하게 사용하면 더욱 매끄러운 답변이 될 것입니다.

示例: I used to write notes in my diary, but now I prefer to save important dates on my phone. It alerts me a day or an hour before. For very important events, I also share them with friends or mark them prominently on my calendar.

× Sadly, I am not good at memorizing because I forget things even I just heard.

✓ Sadly, I am not good at memorizing because I forget things even if I just heard them.

The sentence is missing the conjunction 'if' to introduce the conditional clause and the object pronoun 'them' after 'heard' to complete the meaning. Adding 'if' and 'them' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× Actually I cannot remember the exact date about special occasions such as my friend's wedding days or birthdays.

✓ Actually, I cannot remember the exact dates of special occasions such as my friend's wedding day or birthdays.

The preposition 'about' is incorrect here; 'of' is the correct preposition to indicate possession or relation. Also, 'wedding days' should be singular 'wedding day' because a wedding typically happens on one day. Additionally, 'dates' should be plural to match 'occasions'.

× So on every occasion I have to double check and triple check in advance.

✓ So on every occasion, I have to double-check and triple-check in advance.

A comma is needed after 'occasion' to separate the introductory phrase. Also, 'double check' and 'triple check' should be hyphenated when used as verbs. This improves clarity and correctness.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I have.

A comma is needed after 'Yes' to separate the interjection from the rest of the sentence, improving readability and correctness.

× For example I have forgotten utility bill due dates and I have forgotten my wallet or umbrella a few times.

✓ For example, I have forgotten utility bill due dates, and I have forgotten my wallet or umbrella a few times.

A comma is needed after 'For example' as an introductory phrase. Also, a comma before 'and' improves sentence clarity. The plural 'due dates' is correct here.

× The most memorable thing recently was when I forgot the front door password and had to call my younger sibling.

✓ The most memorable thing recently was when I forgot the front door password and had to call my younger sibling.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× There are many things I need to remember in my daily life, but among them, I absolutely must remember my payday.

✓ There are many things I need to remember in my daily life, but among them, I absolutely must remember my payday.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× This is because that is the day when my bank account balance is the highest.

✓ This is because it is the day when my bank account balance is the highest.

The pronoun 'that' is incorrect here; 'it' should be used to refer back to 'this' or the previously mentioned day. This correction improves pronoun reference clarity.

× It is also very important to remember my family's birthday, otherwise they might be very upset.

✓ It is also very important to remember my family's birthdays; otherwise, they might be very upset.

'Birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to refer to all family members' birthdays. Also, a semicolon or period is better than a comma before 'otherwise' to separate independent clauses.

× In the past, I used to make notes in my diary.

✓ In the past, I used to make notes in my diary.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× However, I don't check those things often these days, so I try to register my schedule on my phone.

✓ However, I don't check those things often these days, so I try to record my schedule on my phone.

The verb 'register' is not commonly used for adding events to a schedule; 'record' or 'enter' is more appropriate. This improves naturalness and clarity.

× Then an alarm will sound the day before or an hour before.

✓ Then an alarm will sound the day before or an hour before.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× If it's really important, I try to share it with people around me or mark it big on the calendar.

✓ If it's really important, I try to share it with people around me or mark it prominently on the calendar.

The phrase 'mark it big' is informal and awkward; 'mark it prominently' is more appropriate and grammatically correct. This improves clarity and formality.