记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and structured. Try to start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences to sound more natural.

示例: I'm moderately good at memorising things. For instance, I easily remember small daily details like conversations, but I sometimes forget important appointments, which can be frustrating. This happens because I'm a visual learner, so I memorise better when I can see information clearly.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrases that affect clarity. Focus on using correct verb tenses and sentence structures. Also, use linking words like 'because' and 'fortunately' appropriately to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I have forgotten something important before. For example, in July, I was supposed to submit a form for summer camp at Mega College, but I forgot because my phone wasn't working properly and I missed the reminders. Fortunately, I fixed my phone and submitted the form later, so my arrival was arranged safely.

建议: Your answer is thoughtful but could be more concise and better structured. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then explain the method with specific details. Also, use correct vocabulary such as 'grateful' instead of 'graceful' and avoid unnecessary filler phrases.

示例: In my daily life, I try to remember ten things I'm grateful for each morning. This habit, suggested by my guidance counselor, helps me stay positive and improves my mood throughout the day.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains unclear phrases and informal language that reduce effectiveness. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and clarify expressions such as 'oil pan'. Use more formal and precise vocabulary to sound natural and effective.

示例: I remember important things by writing reminders on my forearm or palm where I can easily see them. Although it might seem childish, this method helps me stay focused and is quite effective.

× Yes, I've gotten something important before.

✓ Yes, I've forgotten something important before.

The verb 'gotten' is incorrectly used here; the correct past participle for 'forget' is 'forgotten' when referring to failing to remember something. 'Gotten' means 'obtained' which does not fit the context.

× For instance, earlier this July I have I was supposed to submit the form for summer camp at Mega college school to arrange my arrival, but I completely forgot to do this.

✓ For instance, earlier this July I was supposed to submit the form for summer camp at Mega College School to arrange my arrival, but I completely forgot to do this.

The phrase 'I have I was supposed' is incorrect and redundant. The correct past tense form is 'I was supposed' to indicate a past obligation. Also, proper nouns like 'Mega College School' should be capitalized.

× Fortunately, I managed to fix the phone issue, submit the form later on, the arrival was safely out.

✓ Fortunately, I managed to fix the phone issue and submit the form later on; the arrival went smoothly.

The original sentence is a run-on and unclear. It needs conjunctions and proper punctuation to separate ideas. 'The arrival was safely out' is awkward; 'the arrival went smoothly' is clearer and more natural.

× I would list out 10 things that I'm graceful and thankful in my daily life, and I think that's the most important thing that can lift my mood.

✓ I would list out 10 things that I'm grateful for and thankful for in my daily life, and I think that's the most important thing that can lift my mood.

The word 'graceful' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'grateful' meaning feeling thankful. Also, 'thankful' should be followed by 'for' to indicate the object of gratitude.

× It is kinda immature and childish, but I do use the writing method to remember my important things.

✓ It is kind of immature and childish, but I do use the writing method to remember my important things.

'Kinda' is informal slang; 'kind of' is more appropriate in formal or semi-formal speech. The pronoun use is correct, but the expression should be standardized.

× Umm. This reading method is basically using the oil pan to write on my forearm or my palm where I can see so it reminds me while I'm doing other things.

✓ Umm. This writing method basically involves using an oil pen to write on my forearm or my palm where I can see it, so it reminds me while I'm doing other things.

'Reading method' is incorrect; it should be 'writing method' as the context is about writing reminders. 'Oil pan' is a mishearing or typo; the correct term is 'oil pen' (a type of marker). Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.