记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy, such as "I just because I just focus" which affects naturalness. Try to make your sentences clear and concise, and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.

示例: Yes, I am good at memorising things because I focus on understanding the basics first. For example, when I learn a new topic, I concentrate on the introduction and key points, which helps me remember information quickly.

建议: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, be specific about what you forgot and the situation to make your answer more effective.

示例: Yes, I once forgot the main key to our house during a family dinner argument. It was very important because without it, we couldn't enter our home. Fortunately, we later found the key in my mother's bag.

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clear structure. Try to start with a direct answer, then explain with specific details using linking words. Also, correct grammar mistakes like "I finished my task on a time" to improve clarity.

示例: I don't have much to remember daily because I always work according to a plan. Moreover, I regularly check my phone for reminders, which helps me complete my tasks on time.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases like "helped me" twice. Try to provide more specific examples.

示例: I rely heavily on my mobile phone to remember important things. For instance, the notification bar reminds me of my tasks and appointments, which helps me stay organised and complete what I need to do efficiently.

× I don't take too much time to learn something new and I just because I just focus on the intro and basics of anything.

✓ I don't take too much time to learn something new because I just focus on the intro and basics of anything.

The phrase 'and I just because I just' is incorrect and causes confusion. Removing 'and I just' and connecting the clauses with 'because' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× For the sake of argument with my family on a dinner and I lost one of the majority of our home which was really important for us to enter in our home.

✓ During an argument with my family at dinner, I lost one of the keys to our home, which was really important for us to enter our home.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'For the sake of argument' is misused; 'During an argument' is appropriate. 'On a dinner' should be 'at dinner'. 'One of the majority of our home' is incorrect; it should be 'one of the keys to our home'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Later we found in bag of my mother.

✓ Later, we found it in my mother's bag.

The phrase 'found in bag of my mother' is incorrect. The correct prepositional phrase is 'in my mother's bag'. Also, 'it' is needed to specify what was found.

× I don't think so I have anything to remember in my life because I I always work with a plan and I always check my phone and I finished my task on a time.

✓ I don't think I have anything to remember in my life because I always work with a plan, always check my phone, and finish my tasks on time.

'I don't think so I have' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't think I have'. 'I finished my task on a time' is incorrect; 'finish my tasks on time' is correct. Also, removing the repeated 'I' and improving sentence flow enhances clarity.

× As far as I see, my mobile is playing a really important role in my life.

✓ As far as I can see, my mobile plays a really important role in my life.

The phrase 'As far as I see' is better expressed as 'As far as I can see'. 'Is playing' suggests a temporary action; 'plays' is more appropriate for a general statement. Also, 'a really important role' is correct.

× It's helped me to stay connected with notification bar, which really helped me to remember things like what I have to do and what I have done.

✓ It helps me stay connected with the notification bar, which really helps me remember things like what I have to do and what I have done.

The use of 'It's helped' and 'helped' is inconsistent with the present relevance of the statement. Using present tense 'helps' is appropriate here. Also, 'the notification bar' requires the definite article 'the'.