记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is incomplete and a bit repetitive. Try to give a clear and complete response with a topic sentence and supporting details without repeating words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: Honestly, I am not very good at memorising things because I often forget details quickly. For example, the other day I went to another room to get something but forgot what it was. This shows that my memory is not very reliable.

建议: Your answer has good content but is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Avoid filler words and repetition.

示例: Yes, I once forgot my father's birthday, which was very important. Surprisingly, all my family members forgot it as well. Although I was supposed to remember it, I failed, which made me feel very bad.

建议: Your answer is relevant but has many hesitations and some grammar issues. Try to speak more fluently and clearly, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: In daily life, I need to remember to stay organized and use my time productively because this helps me maintain a healthy lifestyle and reduces stress.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but is a bit confusing and repetitive. Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid repeating words.

示例: Since I am not good at remembering things, I usually write important tasks in my diary before going to sleep. Then, I review my diary the next day to focus on my important work.

× I really have a bad memory.

✓ I really have a bad memory.

No correction needed here as 'memory' is correctly used in singular form.

× So I think that because the other day when I went to the other room to take things, then I.

✓ So I think that the other day when I went to the other room to take things, I forgot what I needed.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb or conclusion, making it a sentence structure error. The correction completes the thought clearly.

× Not only me, all my family, uh, forgot it, uh, forgotten that.

✓ Not only me, all my family forgot it.

The phrase 'forgotten that' is incorrect here because 'forgotten' is a past participle and needs an auxiliary verb. The simple past 'forgot' is appropriate. Also, 'Not only me' should be followed by a verb to complete the sentence.

× And uh, uh, among the family members, I was the one to remember, but umm, I forgot that, which was very important.

✓ And among the family members, I was the one who remembered, but I forgot it, which was very important.

The phrase 'the one to remember' is awkward; 'the one who remembered' is correct. Also, 'forgot that' should be 'forgot it' to refer back to the birthday properly.

× remaining organized and spending the most of your time, uh, in a productive way is important

✓ remaining organized and spending most of your time in a productive way is important

The phrase 'the most of your time' is incorrect; 'most of your time' is the correct quantifier usage without 'the'.

× it helps to get the better healthy lifestyle and, uh, and reduces our stress.

✓ it helps to achieve a better, healthier lifestyle and reduces our stress.

'Better healthy lifestyle' is incorrect; it should be 'better, healthier lifestyle' with correct adjective order and comparative forms.

× I usually write it down in my diary at night when I'm sleeping.

✓ I usually write it down in my diary at night before I go to sleep.

'When I'm sleeping' is incorrect because you cannot write while sleeping. The adverbial phrase is corrected to indicate the time before sleeping.

× I plan all my day before the day comes up and I see that diary and focuses focus on important work.

✓ I plan my whole day before it starts, and I see that diary and focus on important work.

'Plan all my day' is awkward; 'plan my whole day' is better. 'Before the day comes up' is unnatural; 'before it starts' is clearer. Also, 'focuses' should be 'focus' to agree with 'I'.