记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, use correct verb tenses and singular/plural forms. For example, say "I cherish my memories and collect photos with my friends and teachers."

示例: Yes, I am good at memorising things because I cherish my memories and often collect photos taken with my friends and teachers.

建议: Your answer is clear but can be improved by avoiding repetition and clarifying details. Also, the word "Exxon" seems out of context; perhaps you meant "exam". Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

示例: Yes, I once forgot my documents on the day of my driving learner's test, which was crucial for entry to the exam. Because of this, I was unable to take the test that day.

建议: Your answer is good but can be more natural by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: In my daily life, I need to remember tasks such as doing my workout, reading for at least 30 minutes, and drinking the right amount of water, all of which I have set for myself.

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and ends abruptly. Try to be concise and complete your thoughts. Use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: I usually list important tasks and events on my mobile phone to ensure I don't forget anything important.

× I am pretty good at memorizing things because I'm a person who always cherish my memories because I used to collect every single piece of photos that I had taken in the past with my friends, with my classmates, with my teachers.

✓ I am pretty good at memorizing things because I'm a person who always cherishes my memories because I used to collect every single piece of photos that I had taken in the past with my friends, with my classmates, with my teachers.

The verb 'cherish' should be in the third person singular form 'cherishes' to agree with the singular subject 'a person'. This is a subject-verb agreement error. Always ensure the verb matches the subject in number.

× I used to collect every single piece of photos that I had taken in the past with my friends, with my classmates, with my teachers.

✓ I used to collect every single piece of photo that I had taken in the past with my friends, with my classmates, with my teachers.

The phrase 'piece of photos' is incorrect because 'piece' is singular and 'photos' is plural. It should be 'piece of photo' or better 'photos' alone. Alternatively, 'pieces of photos' if plural. Here, 'piece of photo' is more appropriate to indicate individual photos.

× I forgot to take my documents, which was crucial for the entry for the Exxon.

✓ I forgot to take my documents, which were crucial for entry to the Exxon.

The preposition 'for' before 'entry' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to' when referring to entry into a place. Also, 'documents' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was'.

× And I think that I used to.

✓ And I think that I did.

The phrase 'I used to' is incomplete and unclear here. The past tense auxiliary 'did' is more appropriate to complete the thought. 'Used to' requires a following verb to indicate a habitual past action.

× For remembering important things, I usually list down the important things or the important events that that I know in my mobile phone so that nothing or none of the events would get missed so that I think.

✓ For remembering important things, I usually list down the important things or the important events that I know on my mobile phone so that none of the events get missed, I think.

The phrase 'that that I know' has a repeated 'that'. Also, 'in my mobile phone' should be 'on my mobile phone' as we use 'on' for devices. 'Nothing or none of the events would get missed' is awkward; 'none of the events get missed' is clearer. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.