记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'like'. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'I feels' to 'I feel' and use clearer sentence structures. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons using linking words.

示例: Yes, I am quite good at memorizing things. However, I believe my memory was sharper during my childhood because I relied less on technology. Nowadays, I often use devices to help me remember important information.

建议: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, be more concise and clear in your description. For example, describe the situation, your feelings, and the result in a structured way.

示例: Yes, I once forgot my key fob inside my room when I went to start my car. It was quite embarrassing because I had to return to get it. This experience taught me to be more careful with my belongings.

建议: Improve clarity by avoiding filler words and organizing your ideas logically. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' to give specific details. Also, correct grammar errors and avoid vague phrases.

示例: In daily life, I need to remember important tasks and activities that have deadlines. For example, at work, I must complete projects on time and attend scheduled appointments carefully.

建议: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases and try to use varied vocabulary.

示例: I usually make lists to remember important things. For instance, I use the Notepad app on my phone to take notes. However, for simpler tasks, I rely on my memory because I believe it is quite strong.

× I'm very good at memories and things.

✓ I'm very good at memorizing things.

The word 'memories' is a noun, but the sentence requires a verb or gerund form to express the ability to memorize. 'Memorizing' is the correct gerund form to use here to indicate the action.

× Uh, but I feels like, uh, I was like much better at memorizing things in my childhood days.

✓ Uh, but I feel like, uh, I was much better at memorizing things in my childhood days.

The subject 'I' requires the base form of the verb 'feel' without the 's'. 'Feels' is used with third person singular subjects, not with 'I'.

× Uh, it may be memorizing power has reduced because we are more depending on the technological devices.

✓ Uh, it may be that my memorizing power has reduced because we depend more on technological devices.

The sentence lacks a conjunction 'that' to connect clauses properly. Also, 'we are more depending' is incorrect; the correct form is 'we depend more'. Additionally, 'the technological devices' is too specific; 'technological devices' is more appropriate here.

× Yes, one time I forgot my key fob uh, I kept in my cabin inside the room and I went outside to near the car to start the car.

✓ Yes, one time I forgot my key fob; I had kept it in my cabin inside the room and went outside near the car to start it.

The past perfect 'had kept' is appropriate to show the action before another past action. Also, 'to near the car' is incorrect; 'near the car' suffices. 'I went outside to near the car' is awkward; better to say 'went outside near the car'. 'I kept' needs an object 'it' referring to the key fob.

× Then I had to go back to my room and to get back the key fob again.

✓ Then I had to go back to my room to get the key fob again.

The phrase 'to get back the key fob again' is redundant; 'get back' and 'again' both imply repetition. Also, 'to get back' is awkward here; 'to get' is sufficient.

× So sometimes yeah, I I for.

✓ So sometimes, yeah, I forget things.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'forget things' completes the thought and makes the sentence meaningful.

× I think we should, uh, remember about the importance task or activities that need to be complete within the timeline.

✓ I think we should, uh, remember the important tasks or activities that need to be completed within the timeline.

The verb 'remember' does not require the preposition 'about'. Also, 'importance task' should be 'important tasks' to agree in number and adjective form. 'Need to be complete' should be 'need to be completed' (past participle).

× Uh, it may be happen at the work as well in California in case of the projects.

✓ Uh, it may happen at work as well, in California, in case of projects.

'May be happen' is incorrect; 'may happen' is correct. 'At the work' should be 'at work' (no article). 'In case of the projects' should be 'in case of projects' (no article). Commas added for clarity.

× And we need to, uh, very careful about the scheduled or yes and scheduled appointments.

✓ And we need to, uh, be very careful about the schedule and scheduled appointments.

The phrase 'need to very careful' is missing the verb 'be'. Also, 'scheduled or yes and scheduled appointments' is unclear; corrected to 'schedule and scheduled appointments' for clarity.

× In my life, I usually make a list to remember important things.

✓ In my life, I usually make a list to remember important things.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× In my phone there's an app called notepad I usually use to make a note, and for the simpler things I usually use my memory to remember the things because I believe I have a good memorizing power.

✓ On my phone, there's an app called Notepad that I usually use to make notes, and for simpler things, I usually use my memory to remember because I believe I have good memorizing power.

'In my phone' should be 'On my phone' as per standard usage. 'Notepad' is a proper noun and should be capitalized. 'Make a note' should be plural 'make notes' for general use. 'The simpler things' should be 'simpler things' without 'the'. 'Remember the things' is redundant; 'remember' suffices. 'A good memorizing power' should be 'good memorizing power' without 'a'.