记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition and grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then explain with clear and concise supporting details without repeating words. Also, avoid irrelevant information and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

示例: No, I am not very good at memorising things. For example, some people think I have a photographic memory, but I often forget important items like my mobile phone.

建议: Your answer repeats the importance of your mobile phone and has grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and add specific details using linking words to make it coherent.

示例: Yes, I have forgotten something important before. For instance, I once left my mobile phone behind, which was very costly and the latest model, so it was quite stressful for me.

建议: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Avoid unnecessary words and unclear phrases. Provide a clear list of important things you need to remember daily, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: In my daily life, I need to remember important items such as my car keys, mobile phone, and watch. These things are essential for me to carry every day.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains repetition and hesitation. Try to explain your method clearly and use correct vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating words and keep your answer concise and coherent.

示例: I usually make a checklist on my mobile phone and watch. If I forget something, the alarms on these devices remind me to take the items with me.

× Yes, I am quite bad at memorizing things because some people say say to me like I have a photographic memory, but I don't think so because I forget one time my mobile.

✓ Yes, I am quite bad at memorizing things because some people say to me that I have a photographic memory, but I don't think so because I forgot my mobile once.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage and awkward phrasing. 'Say say to me like' is incorrect; it should be 'say to me that'. Also, 'I forget one time my mobile' is incorrect; the past tense 'forgot' should be used and the word order corrected to 'I forgot my mobile once'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, like I earlier mentioned, I forgot my mobile is very important thing for me because it's very expensive and also latest model.

✓ Yes, like I mentioned earlier, I forgot my mobile, which is a very important thing for me because it's very expensive and also the latest model.

The phrase 'I earlier mentioned' should be 'I mentioned earlier' for correct word order. Also, 'I forgot my mobile is very important thing' is incorrect; it should be 'I forgot my mobile, which is a very important thing'. The article 'a' is needed before 'very important thing' and 'the' before 'latest model' to specify the noun properly.

× So it's very important for me.

✓ So it's very important to me.

The phrase 'important for me' is less common and slightly awkward; 'important to me' is the correct collocation in English to express personal importance.

× All the things I want to remember in my daily lives, like my car, key, also mobile phone and also a watch.

✓ All the things I want to remember in my daily life, like my car, keys, mobile phone, and also a watch.

'Daily lives' should be singular 'daily life' because it refers to the speaker's own life. 'Key' should be plural 'keys' if referring to more than one or the usual set of keys. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× And I bought a yeah, the new airport.

✓ And I bought, yeah, the new airport.

The phrase is unclear and seems incorrect. Possibly the speaker meant 'And I bought, yeah, the new airport pass' or 'ticket'. The article 'a' before 'yeah' is incorrect. The sentence needs clarification, but the correction removes the incorrect article.

× So I used to remember in my airports where it is so different things in my daily lifestyle like to remember.

✓ So I try to remember where my things are at the airport; there are so many different things in my daily life to remember.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'Used to remember in my airports where it is' is incorrect. The correction clarifies the intended meaning and corrects pronoun and preposition usage.

× I make a checklist on my mobiles and also in my watch.

✓ I make a checklist on my mobile and also on my watch.

The preposition 'on' is correct for both 'mobile' and 'watch'. Also, 'mobiles' should be singular 'mobile' if referring to the speaker's own device.

× So if anything left behind the mobile and watch ring, ring for ringing them, ring them. Sorry, ring not ring them, not ring them.

✓ So if I leave anything behind, the mobile and watch ring to remind me. Sorry, I mean they ring, not 'ring them'.

The sentence has pronoun confusion and awkward phrasing. 'If anything left behind' should be 'if I leave anything behind'. 'Mobile and watch ring, ring for ringing them' is incorrect; it should be 'the mobile and watch ring to remind me'. The speaker corrects themselves, clarifying the verb usage.